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Xen'da'rik
Locations  (City)   (Desert)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-05-28 01:28 AM
Thank you!

I had one or two thoughts on the sands. The first is that it could be an entirely natural process based upon the weather; in fact the idea of the expanding sands came from the Sahara growing by n square miles per year.

The other more interesting theory is that 'nature spirit' the rangers were sent to destroy is somehow related to the desertification. This explains how the fourth ranger was able to predict that the island would turn to sand and why the third ranger refused the coin - from guilt knowing that what he had done would eventually destroy the island ecosystem.

I say 'nature spirit' because it is never actually revealed what the rangers encountered or did while on the island. Xen'ari assumed it was a nature spirit and hired the people he thought would be best suited to the assumed task. Whatever it is might still be on the island, slowly and vengefully grinding the city of its imprisonment into dust. Go to Comment
The Threat of Sugar
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Artistic/Performance)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2014-10-16 06:17 PM
Hey guys I just found this forum thread and reposted it here, it’s got the latest track.

Uugh, I’ll be honest I’ve wasted way too much time reading through threads on Sugar trying to come up with something but I think L1v3tehB347 is right. The best I’ve got is that this all started with the twins Pali mentioned. There was a lot of death in the Futura project so I wouldn’t be surprised if one of them lost their body and the two tried to live in the same morph and ended up merging egos. It would explain why they refer to themselves in the plural and the gender fluidity. They did what the Lost generation was meant to do: they thrived. They started making their music which attracted their async brothers and sisters to them. Spread asyncs throughout a crowd like at a rave and they can amplify the psychic waves Sugar is laying down and turn it into sort of an anarchist hive mind. They’re not dumb though, like lovelylemonlimes pointed out being so high profile is super dangerous for an async which is why they are so interested in giving this persona its own life as a symbol of anarchist freedom. That way if they get caught they can either deny it or have someone else take up the mantle.

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Snapdragon
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-03-24 08:01 PM
I like her! Her role seems flexible enough to slot onto a bunch of minor or major encounters and plots, and the background of her affliction of hatred is a nice story. It would be interesting to have her in the party, and perhaps reunite with the witch who granted her a soul to see if she had a way to patch her soul up. Go to Comment
Snapdragon
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
valadaar's comment on 2013-03-26 10:21 AM
This is a neat concept and an excellent NPC. As said, she can have lots of uses, even as a backstory for a PC.
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Snapdragon
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-03-25 11:05 AM
This is the kind of NPC that can drive a plot in so many unpredictable directions. Ally, enemy, easily underestimated; I likey.

Can someone missing such pieces of their soul know what they do not have? I imagine fear would keep Snap from taking that final step to being whole if it were actually in front of her. Wouldn't that be a death of sorts for her? Would she still be who she is afterward?

I wouldn't mind seeing more about the type of magic used by the witch and how she was able to provide some kind of soul. Was it a created soul? Some sort of trapped demon? A ghost? A patchwork of elemental or nature spirits? This is purely curiosity as the sub works fine on its own. Go to Comment
Snapdragon
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-03-22 12:18 AM

Snapdragon makes an equally good ally as adversary. She is intensely competitive in all matters and can become violent if vying for affection or approval. Her actions and words demonstrate a fundamental disconnect despite their good intent. ("Oh kitsune, if I were to rip your heart from your chest I'm sure it would beat just as red as mine!" "Dear sister, I could simply squeeze the flesh from your bones and crush them to powder.") While as a companion she is not liable to randomly lash out she is far more susceptible to mental or demonic influences. 

Snap wishes to have the holes in her soul mended, though it is not something she actively pursues. What this entails could be anything from requited love to eating the heart of a celestial, even she does not know.

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Snapdragon
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-03-22 12:23 PM
Blerg. Need some spitshine on the end but it's mostly done. Go to Comment
Snapdragon
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-03-24 10:44 PM
I'm glad you like her! Honestly that plot line about finding the "witch" is the most obvious one of all and it completely blew past me. Good catch. Go to Comment
Snapdragon
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-03-25 07:12 PM
I was going to write you a reply, and then I wrote a reply so long I figured I should just add it to the sub as an idea. I think the answer to the first part of your question is that she was not always this way. She was perfectly fine until her parents broke the covenant, and loved her sister more than her.  Go to Comment
Snapdragon
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-03-25 07:14 PM

I imagined that the "witch" (I use that term loosely, she is never referred to as a witch until she goes against the family's wishes) pulled together what parts of a soul were in the womb, and bound them together with Talia and Amond's affections. Over time this binding fused together the soul into a mostly viable person, but when the spell was broken there were large gaps left. Holes cause a combination of emotional and physical pain where an aspect of her (such as her capacity for empathy) once was while the parts there are (such as anger) attempt to fill what is missing. It's similar to those who feel pain in phantom limbs, which is caused by the brain overtaking the parts used to control the missing limb and applying them to different tasks. 

These holes are not a terribly uncommon occurrence in people but the holes most have are small and get repaired with time or stoppered with something such as drugs or a new puppy. Unrepaired souls make a fabulous foothold for evil influences which is why there is usually some trauma associated with those who walk that path. What makes that route doubly tempting is that when someone is killed their soul momentarily passes through that of the killer and fills in those gaps for a few seconds. Beating a person within inches of their life brings them within touching distance and has a similar though less dramatic effect, as does intimate sex (though the conditions for that are difficult to meet as it requires nothing short of true love). 

In effect, Snap's soul is filled with many large gaps and cracks making it a breeding ground for the essence of the nether realms. She's caught between the person she knew she was, and the person she feels she is. The monks taught her to manage the constant pain, the consuming rage, and the breeding evil, but none of it ever goes away. If she ever lets her guard down at least one of these will overtake her, and no one is sure what happens after that. 


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The Hand of Callous Justice
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-05-29 09:12 PM
As the others mentioned - this is a sub which definitely focusses on the backstory more than the item itself. This isn't a bad thing, so long as the item doesn't suffer, and in this case I think it did; it's a little vague - I'd love to know why the hand was given it's abilities and how they are used. Why his hand? Would the criminal family go back and lop off other appendages to see if they had powers as well? Do the fingers curl up as the powers are used in a manner like the Monkey's Paw wishes?

i'm all for this Judge being so commited to his work and law that his very hand retained the essence of his beliefs - perhaps that is what happened? Maybe the power concentrated in his hand because of the way he swung his gavel with such conviction at sentencing of his own son.

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The Hand of Callous Justice
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Ted's comment on 2013-02-26 03:30 AM

Withered Fist

The blackened and withered Hand of Callous Justice is forever trapped in the shape of a fist. Shrunken with age, someone long ago had the idea to incorporate it into a necklace so that the emblem of unflinching loyalty to the law could be worn about the neck.

Those wearing the Hand of Callous justice feel themselves strongly compelled to enforce the law in the harshest way possible- all but the most minor of violations demand the death of the perpetrator. The Hand's demands must be met immediately, lest the owner be stricken with unbearable agony until justice is served.

The Hand allows its owner to immediately become aware of any crime or dishonesty done in their presence, immediately granting complete immunity to the Criminal's attacks. Those using the Hand of Callous Justice find that those they are hunting are completely unable to strike them, their attacks passing through the hunter harmlessly.

The Hand carries a great burden of responsibility- should its owner commit a crime, the Hand of Callous Justice will demand their death, and subject them to relentless suffering and pain until their death- whether at their own hand, or by the next owner of the Hand of Callous Justice.

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The Hand of Callous Justice
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Ted's comment on 2013-02-26 03:32 AM
Added my take on the hand and the powers it should grant. Go to Comment
The Hand of Callous Justice
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Kassy's comment on 2013-06-01 05:09 AM
3.0/5

Sadly your links are Grue infested. I would like to read more of the three locations you mention. Go to Comment
The Hand of Callous Justice
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Elbin's comment on 2013-05-29 03:57 PM
I think you spend too much time on the history of the judge, and almost nothing on the actual item that the sub is about. From the beginning it sounded like an NPC description, not an item. The power of the hand is also somehow "dropped from the sky", as we say here (in Bulgaria). It doesn't come logically (or illogically, for that matter) from the rest. Go to Comment
The Hand of Callous Justice
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Elbin's comment on 2013-05-30 03:10 AM
To be honest I glanced through the two parts of your epic plot and the shear amount of described places, NPCs and steps made me leave it for later. I promise I will read through it though.

On the current sub - that kind of detail would be great to have! So it may be better to post the descriptions of the cities in question before drawing parallels to them. Otherwise we're like the Okada folk that had no idea why the hand was taken... except that we have no idea what it is to be a citizen of Okada either. Go to Comment
The Hand of Callous Justice
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Elbin's comment on 2013-06-01 01:55 PM
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The Hand of Callous Justice
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2011-12-10 11:57 PM


Author's Note: This submission is unfinished, as it should be linked to a number of other items in a homebrew campaign setting which does not exist on the site. Critique as you like. 


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The Hand of Callous Justice
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-03-20 09:50 PM
I heartily approve. Go to Comment
The Hand of Callous Justice
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-05-29 12:11 PM
I never considered the name important, but I understand the confusion.

Ever watch Warehouse 13? It's a show where people collect 'artifacts', things like Sylvia Plath's typewriter which makes you suicidal. No one blessed or cursed or enchanted the typewriter, it is the way it is because of who it belonged to and the emotions she felt. This is the sentencing hand of a man who let his own son die rather than compromise justice. Do you not think that is magic enough? Go to Comment
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