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Xen'da'rik
Locations  (City)   (Desert)
Cheka Man's comment on 2013-05-15 10:32 PM
Rather Star Wars ish. Go to Comment
Xen'da'rik
Locations  (City)   (Desert)
Kassy's comment on 2013-05-18 07:16 AM
4.0/5

Very interesting sub. I enjoyed reading this. Go to Comment
Xen'da'rik
Locations  (City)   (Desert)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-05-15 08:11 PM
Update: This city was created for a campaign based on a world shaped like a tetrahedron, with several moons, several suns, and each side named relative to the prevailing element. Hotside, Coldside, Pointyside, and Flatside for Fire, Water, Earth, and Air respectively. Go to Comment
Xen'da'rik
Locations  (City)   (Desert)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-05-18 02:17 PM
What makes you say that? I'm not a huge fan of the series, so I don't remember anything from the movies nor have I read the books. I would have thought it would be more like Dune but then again I haven't read that either. Go to Comment
Silverfox Mill - Part II
Plots  (Discovery)   (Multi-Storyline)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-03-24 10:38 PM

This is the second part of Silverfox Mill, the portion regarding characters and setting is detailed in part I and can be found under the Locations section of the citadel.

Silverfox Mill is part of the Etzem Campaign and as such is unfinished, lacking links and context for a number of things. Statistics are given with the pathfinder system in mind. 

Some ideas have been taken from Tales of Terror and others have been taken from Strolen submissions. If you wish to link or receive credit simply comment below and I will create a link compilation at the end of this submission. 

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Snapdragon
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-03-24 08:01 PM
I like her! Her role seems flexible enough to slot onto a bunch of minor or major encounters and plots, and the background of her affliction of hatred is a nice story. It would be interesting to have her in the party, and perhaps reunite with the witch who granted her a soul to see if she had a way to patch her soul up. Go to Comment
Snapdragon
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
valadaar's comment on 2013-03-26 10:21 AM
This is a neat concept and an excellent NPC. As said, she can have lots of uses, even as a backstory for a PC.
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Snapdragon
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-03-25 11:05 AM
This is the kind of NPC that can drive a plot in so many unpredictable directions. Ally, enemy, easily underestimated; I likey.

Can someone missing such pieces of their soul know what they do not have? I imagine fear would keep Snap from taking that final step to being whole if it were actually in front of her. Wouldn't that be a death of sorts for her? Would she still be who she is afterward?

I wouldn't mind seeing more about the type of magic used by the witch and how she was able to provide some kind of soul. Was it a created soul? Some sort of trapped demon? A ghost? A patchwork of elemental or nature spirits? This is purely curiosity as the sub works fine on its own. Go to Comment
Snapdragon
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-03-22 12:18 AM

Snapdragon makes an equally good ally as adversary. She is intensely competitive in all matters and can become violent if vying for affection or approval. Her actions and words demonstrate a fundamental disconnect despite their good intent. ("Oh kitsune, if I were to rip your heart from your chest I'm sure it would beat just as red as mine!" "Dear sister, I could simply squeeze the flesh from your bones and crush them to powder.") While as a companion she is not liable to randomly lash out she is far more susceptible to mental or demonic influences. 

Snap wishes to have the holes in her soul mended, though it is not something she actively pursues. What this entails could be anything from requited love to eating the heart of a celestial, even she does not know.

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Snapdragon
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-03-22 12:23 PM
Blerg. Need some spitshine on the end but it's mostly done. Go to Comment
Snapdragon
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-03-24 10:44 PM
I'm glad you like her! Honestly that plot line about finding the "witch" is the most obvious one of all and it completely blew past me. Good catch. Go to Comment
Snapdragon
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-03-25 07:12 PM
I was going to write you a reply, and then I wrote a reply so long I figured I should just add it to the sub as an idea. I think the answer to the first part of your question is that she was not always this way. She was perfectly fine until her parents broke the covenant, and loved her sister more than her.  Go to Comment
Snapdragon
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-03-25 07:14 PM

I imagined that the "witch" (I use that term loosely, she is never referred to as a witch until she goes against the family's wishes) pulled together what parts of a soul were in the womb, and bound them together with Talia and Amond's affections. Over time this binding fused together the soul into a mostly viable person, but when the spell was broken there were large gaps left. Holes cause a combination of emotional and physical pain where an aspect of her (such as her capacity for empathy) once was while the parts there are (such as anger) attempt to fill what is missing. It's similar to those who feel pain in phantom limbs, which is caused by the brain overtaking the parts used to control the missing limb and applying them to different tasks. 

These holes are not a terribly uncommon occurrence in people but the holes most have are small and get repaired with time or stoppered with something such as drugs or a new puppy. Unrepaired souls make a fabulous foothold for evil influences which is why there is usually some trauma associated with those who walk that path. What makes that route doubly tempting is that when someone is killed their soul momentarily passes through that of the killer and fills in those gaps for a few seconds. Beating a person within inches of their life brings them within touching distance and has a similar though less dramatic effect, as does intimate sex (though the conditions for that are difficult to meet as it requires nothing short of true love). 

In effect, Snap's soul is filled with many large gaps and cracks making it a breeding ground for the essence of the nether realms. She's caught between the person she knew she was, and the person she feels she is. The monks taught her to manage the constant pain, the consuming rage, and the breeding evil, but none of it ever goes away. If she ever lets her guard down at least one of these will overtake her, and no one is sure what happens after that. 


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The Hand of Callous Justice
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Ted's comment on 2013-02-26 03:30 AM

Withered Fist

The blackened and withered Hand of Callous Justice is forever trapped in the shape of a fist. Shrunken with age, someone long ago had the idea to incorporate it into a necklace so that the emblem of unflinching loyalty to the law could be worn about the neck.

Those wearing the Hand of Callous justice feel themselves strongly compelled to enforce the law in the harshest way possible- all but the most minor of violations demand the death of the perpetrator. The Hand's demands must be met immediately, lest the owner be stricken with unbearable agony until justice is served.

The Hand allows its owner to immediately become aware of any crime or dishonesty done in their presence, immediately granting complete immunity to the Criminal's attacks. Those using the Hand of Callous Justice find that those they are hunting are completely unable to strike them, their attacks passing through the hunter harmlessly.

The Hand carries a great burden of responsibility- should its owner commit a crime, the Hand of Callous Justice will demand their death, and subject them to relentless suffering and pain until their death- whether at their own hand, or by the next owner of the Hand of Callous Justice.

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The Hand of Callous Justice
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Ted's comment on 2013-02-26 03:32 AM
Added my take on the hand and the powers it should grant. Go to Comment
The Hand of Callous Justice
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2011-12-10 11:57 PM


Author's Note: This submission is unfinished, as it should be linked to a number of other items in a homebrew campaign setting which does not exist on the site. Critique as you like. 


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The Hand of Callous Justice
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-03-20 09:50 PM
I heartily approve. Go to Comment
Forget Me Not
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Non-Magical)
Dossta's comment on 2011-08-28 10:21 PM


This is an exquisite item, and a very original weapon.  However, I feel that the item itself could use a little more description, and the backstory as written is really confusing.  Who is Gen?  Who is the lady that Devorak falls in love with during exile?  And what did Hestor mean to him anyway?  The dialog is good, but there is just not enough context given to allow comprehension of the major events.  I love this item, but will withold my vote for awhile to give you the chance to clear up or remove the backstory.


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Forget Me Not
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Non-Magical)
Dossta's comment on 2011-08-29 03:02 PM
You don't have to do anything "more traditional" -- I liked the dialogue a lot! I just didn't feel like I had the context to understand it all, and so missed a good part of the story. And that was disappointing because I greatly enjoyed the parts I did understand :) Go to Comment
Forget Me Not
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Non-Magical)
hylandpad's comment on 2011-08-29 05:11 PM
this was very fancy. I liked the dialogue; I felt it was artistically written, tasteful yet vulgar and gritty enough to evoke an emotional reaponse. That alone makes it a great sub. I did feel a bit lost with the storytelling. But I appreciate the attempt to do something new and different. The prose grants a good insight into the history of the weapon, though I wish I knew more about the weapon itself. Go to Comment
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