More information on Shabow Boxing and Masters of the Shadow-Physical Arts -
Well, it seems one of our students is a bit more interested in Shadow Boxing and, in particular, its relation to the Longstrider Technique.
You see that the Shadow-Physical Arts rely on using Shadow as an extention of yourself. With Shadow Boxing, you touch someone with your Shadow and cause then harm. With the Longstrider Technique you are extending your Shadow in a very similar way but then, and this is a very difficult Technique to master and use quickly, force your physical body to travel the legths of your Shadow. As it is being used as an extension of yourself, it is often considered related to Shadow Boxing, but in truth Shadow Boxing is only the first step towards learning Longstriding. The proper name for this area of study is Shadow-Physical Arts and I am sorry for misleading you.
An interesting look into an under-used spell component. I enjoyed the lecture format, though Shadow-Boxing could be a little better defined before going into the applications of it. For example, it's not clear how Longstriding and Shadow-Boxing are related.
I quite like this submission, I imagine it as an excerpt in a game from a book or overheard in a classroom. I am particularly partial to the idea of the shadow having effects in the shadow realm which then translate to effects in the material realm. Solid work.
Ok major things I wish to learn more about...
Who is the Witch, or a witch as it seemed a title to me and not just a position.
The Fog of Rigor... very intriguing name...
The Conclave and the Blackened Church...
ll in all though... damn good job. Very colorful in flavor.
Intriguing to being with. As Dossta said it is an original take on a pantheon. It would be interesting if there were separate courts for the senses divided in their individual courts yet together in the pantheon by an odd form of harmony.
However, I would like more information on the parental gods as well as why Hyewmor took his mothers eyes and ate them. Was it to gain her unique sight or abilities? Or was it simply out of spite for looking at him differently than his two siblings?
I'll be the first to say that this is a really original pantheon, and I'm surprised that it works so well. However, I wish that Hyewmor was a little better defined. You tell us that he's the enemy of the rest of the Occular Court, but he's little different from any other "bad god" that I've seen in RPGs -- as far as I can tell, he's motivated purely by "teh Evuls".
I would have made him the god of blindness, expect that Opstiscus fills that roll so nicely. So perhaps he could be the god of false sight -- delusions, mirages, eye diseases and the like. Depicting him as completely and irrevocably insane would also jive a bit better with his actions after birth.
Remember that these are just my thoughts -- I truly don't want to detract from the pure originality of this piece. Right now, this is a solid 3 for me, with + .5 for pure creativity. Well done!
The format seems a little confusing. I had to read it through a couple of times to grok it. I agree with the others that this could use some fleshing out.
I could see the priests of Percepticus being the philosophers with those of Visax having more of a scientific bent.
Overall, a creative piece.