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My Notes on Shadow as a Component of Magic
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PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2011-08-08 07:25 PM


I quite like this submission, I imagine it as an excerpt in a game from a book or overheard in a classroom. I am particularly partial to the idea of the shadow having effects in the shadow realm which then translate to effects in the material realm. Solid work.


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Strolenati Origins Pamphlet: Manfred
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Pieh's comment on 2011-08-07 10:35 PM


Good. That was the intent. :)

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Strolenati Origins Pamphlet: Manfred
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Ancient Gamer's comment on 2011-08-07 06:38 PM


manfred... Who knew?

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Strolenati Origins Pamphlet: Manfred
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Mourngrymn's comment on 2011-08-07 10:29 PM


I can only LOL at this.


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Strolenati Origins Pamphlet: Manfred
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valadaar's comment on 2013-05-28 11:25 AM
Ah Pieh, where has your oddness gone? I see you have sojourned here recently.. Go to Comment
Scorch-Born
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Pieh's comment on 2011-04-27 06:20 PM
Thank you for the kind words. I am also looking forward to delving deeper into The Concave, I could certainly use some more feedback regarding my ideas in the forum thread, though. They're kind of festering for a bit, but eventually I'l pick them open and let the juices flow once more. Go to Comment
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Pieh's comment on 2011-04-22 11:15 PM
The Witch referred to another type of being living on The Concave. They would be a sort-of Hag-like creature, but Hags are slightly different. They possess innate abilities regarding the Fogs of Rigor. The Fogs of Rigor have been most detailed in the main Concave submission, which is still in work, here:

http://strolen.com/viewing/The_Concave

There is a forum topic with my musing on the setting, here:

http://strolen.com/guild/index.php/topic,5442.msg68746.html#msg68746

Feel free to comment there with ideas, dislikes, and any confusion. Glad you liked it. Go to Comment
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Cheka Man's comment on 2011-04-21 09:26 PM


Sort of Urn Beastish.


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Mourngrymn's comment on 2011-04-21 10:38 PM


Ok major things I wish to learn more about...



Who is the Witch, or a witch as it seemed a title to me and not just a position.



The Fog of Rigor... very intriguing name...



The Conclave and the Blackened Church...



ll in all though... damn good job. Very colorful in flavor.


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valadaar's comment on 2011-04-28 10:22 AM


Definitely a scary creature - and a brutal one at that.  A good way to flesh out an elemental religion.

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Scorch-Born
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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-04-27 05:40 PM


I love it! This is shaping up to be a truly new and creative setting. Good language, excellent imagery. I look forward to reading more.


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The Ocular Court
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Strolen's comment on 2012-05-13 11:39 AM
I never really got this deep into making these kind of histories but I do enjoy reading them. Go to Comment
The Ocular Court
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Mourngrymn's comment on 2011-04-15 11:13 AM


Intriguing to being with. As Dossta said it is an original take on a pantheon. It would be interesting if there were separate courts for the senses divided in their individual courts yet together in the pantheon by an odd form of harmony.



However, I would like more information on the parental gods as well as why Hyewmor took his mothers eyes and ate them. Was it to gain her unique sight or abilities? Or was it simply out of spite for looking at him differently than his two siblings?


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The Ocular Court
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Dossta's comment on 2011-04-13 02:46 PM


I'll be the first to say that this is a really original pantheon, and I'm surprised that it works so well.  However, I wish that Hyewmor was a little better defined.  You tell us that he's the enemy of the rest of the Occular Court, but he's little different from any other "bad god" that I've seen in RPGs -- as far as I can tell, he's motivated purely by "teh Evuls".



I would have made him the god of blindness, expect that Opstiscus fills that roll so nicely.  So perhaps he could be the god of false sight -- delusions, mirages, eye diseases and the like.  Depicting him as completely and irrevocably insane would also jive a bit better with his actions after birth.



Remember that these are just my thoughts -- I truly don't want to detract from the pure originality of this piece.  Right now, this is a solid 3 for me, with + .5 for pure creativity.  Well done!


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The Ocular Court
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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-04-18 11:39 AM


The format seems a little confusing. I had to read it through a couple of times to grok it. I agree with the others that this could use some fleshing out.



I could see the priests of Percepticus being the philosophers with those of Visax having more of a scientific bent.



Overall, a creative piece.


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The Twin Orbs of Poverty and Wealth
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Strolen's comment on 2012-05-13 11:59 AM
Oooh, I like this one a lot!! Oh, the temptation of the unguarded gem in the beggar's hall. A great "prank" to pull on a new thief trying to enter the guild....or on a PC...or on a..... Go to Comment
The Twin Orbs of Poverty and Wealth
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Pieh's comment on 2011-04-12 08:40 AM
Yeah, I'm not wholly satisfied with this one. Seemed like an interesting idea that I just couldn't hammer out. You are correct on the two latter statements. As for how they were created, it seems like the kind of thing a diety could do on a whim, no? That's how I pictured it.

In any case, feel free to vote freely, I just had to get this out of my in-work box. Go to Comment
The Twin Orbs of Poverty and Wealth
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Pieh's comment on 2011-04-12 12:23 PM
A lovely idea. I was so focused on the power of 2 sides of the same coin that I didn't even consider that. Take some xp for the thought. Go to Comment
The Twin Orbs of Poverty and Wealth
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EchoMirage's comment on 2011-04-12 08:23 AM


I'd like to know how they were made.



Plus: the Wealth God is stealing from one guy at a time, correct?



What I did not understand: those who can break the wealth transfer are those who currently suffer from the Orb of Poverty?


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The Twin Orbs of Poverty and Wealth
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EchoMirage's comment on 2011-04-12 11:38 AM
Actually - what if the Greed/Wealth god made multiple orbs of poverty linked to one Orb of Wealth? That would allow him to steal so much more, so much faster! Go to Comment
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