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Steelfeasters
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Underground)
Cheka Man's comment on 2010-08-27 07:39 PM
Why are they just mindless eating machines? Are their souls still in the dwarven afterlife? Did creating them shred their minds?Other then that, a great submission and very orginal. Go to Comment
Steelfeasters
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Underground)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2010-08-27 09:39 PM
Ok.... first and foremost... the Rust Monster revised. I love it. A tad bit more information about them and why they are transformed completely would be nice. Such as, when infected with this necro toxin of sorts, do the dwarves immediately become an undead stealfeaster? Or is it a gradual thing where they are unaware of the change until it is to late?

Would they slowly succumb to the dreaded desire to feast on metals? Or do they die near instantly? Just food for thought. Go to Comment
Steelfeasters
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Underground)
Murometz's comment on 2012-09-22 11:54 PM
Let me echo the others in conrgatulating you on a great new take on a rust monster. Undead to boot. And Dwarven! Go to Comment
Steelfeasters
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Underground)
Murometz's comment on 2012-09-22 11:54 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Steelfeasters
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Underground)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-09-23 04:25 PM
Yes! The Dwarves and the Necromancers can come together!

Overall a nice idea and as an idea I like it, I found your description to be complete and interesting. I do want to ask about tone and perspective. Who was writing this, who was the intended audience because the text seems to be pretty meta with regard to prespective. Go to Comment
Steelfeasters
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Underground)
valadaar's comment on 2010-09-02 06:56 PM
An awesome replacement for the rust monster. I'd add Rustcaller_Toxin as a related sub. One of these critters who used this poison would be really nasty. Go to Comment
Steelfeasters
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Underground)
Elbin's comment on 2013-05-29 02:24 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Lockzennites
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Regional)
Moonlake's comment on 2010-10-21 11:13 PM


I quite like the underlying concept. Execution is also solid. The itallic bits in particular do heighten the atmosphere well. However, this piece somehow left me logically impressed while its emotional content didn't seem to have come across much in the overall sense. In aggregate, I still think this is a decent piece, hence the median score.


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The Mirr of the Mirror-Folk
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
Pieh's comment on 2010-09-29 04:57 PM
Update: HUGE UPDATE! PLEASE REVOTE! Go to Comment
The Mirr of the Mirror-Folk
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Pieh's comment on 2010-09-29 05:26 PM
Update: Another Update, just for you Outrider. Go to Comment
The Mirr of the Mirror-Folk
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Cheka Man's comment on 2010-08-27 04:29 PM
I don't think I could be nasty enough to shred the mind of one of these creatures. 5/5 Go to Comment
The Mirr of the Mirror-Folk
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2010-09-28 01:26 PM
The basics are in place, but I have to second Val. It feels unfinished. As it is now it is simply OK, but it has the potential to be very good. If this worked on I will update my vote accordingly. Go to Comment
The Mirr of the Mirror-Folk
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2010-09-29 05:42 PM
Vote update. I think your update makes the submission more complete and better in its execution. I still think your mirror Golems are a few notches better than this though. Good job Pieh! Go to Comment
The Mirr of the Mirror-Folk
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valadaar's comment on 2010-08-29 06:51 PM
I think this one needs to stew a little more - it feels unfinished. Go to Comment
The Mirr of the Mirror-Folk
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Moonlake's comment on 2011-02-10 08:23 PM


An intriguing concept. Overall, I think the sub brings out the evolution of the Mirror-folk very well. Also, I especially like the first paragraph of Closing Thoughts.


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The Mirr of the Mirror-Folk
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
outrider's comment on 2010-09-29 05:13 PM
I would need to have more information about where they came from. Go to Comment
The Mirr of the Mirror-Folk
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Dossta's comment on 2010-09-30 10:44 AM
The Mihrral made me laugh out loud. Nicely done!

4/5 Go to Comment
Augment Trees
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Any)
Pieh's comment on 2010-08-27 10:15 PM
The thorns as weapon would be a rare sight. But, I imagine rare enough that it couldn't hurt to make them permanent until discharged. Go to Comment
Augment Trees
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Any)
Cheka Man's comment on 2010-08-26 07:37 PM
Very impressive. Go to Comment
Augment Trees
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Any)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2010-08-26 09:11 PM
Nice to come back to the citadel and see something like this pop up fresh and new. Very interesting and quirky... The whip idea for the thorns are a nice added touch. For someone who likes simple and new items of mystery/ magic I give this a good job. Go to Comment
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