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Staff of The Golden King
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Heroic)
Dossta's comment on 2010-09-11 12:47 AM
I love both the imagery of the staff and of the Golden King himself. Is there a lore reason for the staff to illuminate family bonds? Or is it mostly just a plot device to help determine royal heirs? I also appreciate that the powers granted vary by individual -- you gave lots of good examples for a GM to draw from, but left some wiggle-room for tuning it to an individual party or NPC. Go to Comment
Steelfeasters
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Underground)
Pieh's comment on 2010-08-27 11:26 PM
To address a few questions:

@Cheka - The toxin turns them into undead. Through magical corruption of living tissue, I would think. Their mind is damaged in the process but still works enough to move the body and such. Their souls would be subject to the same rules as any other undead in your setting.

@Mourn - The toxin acts quickly after entering their body. Over the course of a week they start to desire metal objects, finding it hard to resist the temptation to hold them and growing into obsession with licking metal eventually ending with full-blown pica, specifically concerning metal objects. By the time they succumb to the desire to eat metal, the transformation is complete and they can think of nothing else. They would be unaware of it happening.

And as a note, I am happy to announce this is my 100th Submission on Strolen's Citadel! Go to Comment
Steelfeasters
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Underground)
Cheka Man's comment on 2010-08-27 08:39 PM
Why are they just mindless eating machines? Are their souls still in the dwarven afterlife? Did creating them shred their minds?Other then that, a great submission and very orginal. Go to Comment
Steelfeasters
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Underground)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2010-08-27 10:39 PM
Ok.... first and foremost... the Rust Monster revised. I love it. A tad bit more information about them and why they are transformed completely would be nice. Such as, when infected with this necro toxin of sorts, do the dwarves immediately become an undead stealfeaster? Or is it a gradual thing where they are unaware of the change until it is to late?

Would they slowly succumb to the dreaded desire to feast on metals? Or do they die near instantly? Just food for thought. Go to Comment
Steelfeasters
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Underground)
Murometz's comment on 2012-09-23 12:54 AM
Let me echo the others in conrgatulating you on a great new take on a rust monster. Undead to boot. And Dwarven! Go to Comment
Steelfeasters
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Underground)
Murometz's comment on 2012-09-23 12:54 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
Steelfeasters
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Underground)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-09-23 05:25 PM
Yes! The Dwarves and the Necromancers can come together!

Overall a nice idea and as an idea I like it, I found your description to be complete and interesting. I do want to ask about tone and perspective. Who was writing this, who was the intended audience because the text seems to be pretty meta with regard to prespective. Go to Comment
Steelfeasters
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Underground)
valadaar's comment on 2010-09-02 07:56 PM
An awesome replacement for the rust monster. I'd add Rustcaller_Toxin as a related sub. One of these critters who used this poison would be really nasty. Go to Comment
Steelfeasters
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Underground)
Elbin's comment on 2013-05-29 03:24 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Lockzennites
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Regional)
valadaar's comment on 2015-01-19 10:53 AM


This seems to be a take on a Luddite, but to a greater extreme.



Given their tenants to shun both clothing and armor, are we to assume they are limited to tropical regions? Or are they gifted with some magic to keep from freezing to death?

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The Lockzennites
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Regional)
Moonlake's comment on 2010-10-22 12:13 AM


I quite like the underlying concept. Execution is also solid. The itallic bits in particular do heighten the atmosphere well. However, this piece somehow left me logically impressed while its emotional content didn't seem to have come across much in the overall sense. In aggregate, I still think this is a decent piece, hence the median score.


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The Mirr of the Mirror-Folk
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
Pieh's comment on 2010-09-29 05:57 PM
Update: HUGE UPDATE! PLEASE REVOTE! Go to Comment
The Mirr of the Mirror-Folk
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
Pieh's comment on 2010-09-29 06:26 PM
Update: Another Update, just for you Outrider. Go to Comment
The Mirr of the Mirror-Folk
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
Cheka Man's comment on 2010-08-27 05:29 PM
I don't think I could be nasty enough to shred the mind of one of these creatures. 5/5 Go to Comment
The Mirr of the Mirror-Folk
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2010-09-28 02:26 PM
The basics are in place, but I have to second Val. It feels unfinished. As it is now it is simply OK, but it has the potential to be very good. If this worked on I will update my vote accordingly. Go to Comment
The Mirr of the Mirror-Folk
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2010-09-29 06:42 PM
Vote update. I think your update makes the submission more complete and better in its execution. I still think your mirror Golems are a few notches better than this though. Good job Pieh! Go to Comment
The Mirr of the Mirror-Folk
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
valadaar's comment on 2010-08-29 07:51 PM
I think this one needs to stew a little more - it feels unfinished. Go to Comment
The Mirr of the Mirror-Folk
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
Moonlake's comment on 2011-02-10 09:23 PM


An intriguing concept. Overall, I think the sub brings out the evolution of the Mirror-folk very well. Also, I especially like the first paragraph of Closing Thoughts.


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The Mirr of the Mirror-Folk
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
outrider's comment on 2010-09-29 06:13 PM
I would need to have more information about where they came from. Go to Comment
The Mirr of the Mirror-Folk
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
Dossta's comment on 2010-09-30 11:44 AM
The Mihrral made me laugh out loud. Nicely done!

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