I really like the way you wrote this, with the back and forth between the scene and the description.
A suggestion: in the ancient world sexual imagery was not consider as taboo and tasteless as it is now. Romans consdiered the phallus to be a good luck charm, half of the cave paintings are off sexual scenes. Their are unavoidabe sexual over tones to this work. I am being serious, the God of Light is in many ways to defined by his sexuality. He is male and the counter part to the silver queen. A chaste sexuality, is an important part of the Gods' ethos. It will be hard to present and empowering staff which is both attractive and plants in those near it a desire to hold, with drawing some into making freudian connections. Again I am not saying that was your intent, but the theme is there. I am just saying in future works you may want to try and own the imagery of a powerful but restrained male sexuality.