I'm happy with a 3/5, I might eventually think of a really good backstory; about the shortness: I'm going to try to add some more flavor to it at some time. Sadly, its not up to the quality of my past items, but, hey, they cant all be winners. Go to Comment
How about writing up Arbanax - but write him as a villain, a genuine Bad Guy - lets face it, a man who derives amusement from other peoples pain is NOT A NICE PERSON
As for the cloak - I'm inclined to agree with Echo - this is an assassins' tool, even if it wasn't originally meant to be - as a joke it's in extremely bad taste, a quite likely to get Arbanax killed just as soon as somebody (enter the PCs) works out who made it
I'll give it 3/5 because it would probably work well as a plot hook Go to Comment
This is not a "minor" character. It has an impact upon its world is notable. It needs work. Alot of work. The write up does nothing to answer the questions that immediately come to mind when you read this.
Not enough detail or interesting elements to make it more than a cliche. Sorry. Go to Comment
This is a little cliche, but not bad. If the gnome was played well, with a spunky personality, the PC's could have some fun with him...as long as the GM doesn't overdo it with such characters. Perhaps he could be hired to build something for the PC's, or decide to follow their group around for awhile. Go to Comment