I absolutely love the name, and the fact that it was not automatically palmed off onto the mechanically minded gnomes. (Shakes fist at gnomes). The idea seems fairly well fleshed out, and has a plausible backstory. Even Dufgar (who is never described) seems easy for me to imagine. (A young dwarf not yet grown into his beard)

Now for the axe. There are several grammatical and capitalization flaws that need to be ironed out, but nothing that inspires the wrath of the average reader.

Good luck with this, I don't how others will respond to the normally non-magic using dwarves having a magical tunneling machine. Go to Comment

What Strolen said: Dugfar would have been exuberant at his first major creation, overflowing with poetry and joy. It's Dugfar's, it's Dangerous, because that's awesome, of course it's Dwarven, it does Dig, and man, for one last D... Dirigible! Tadaaa.

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I love it, enough said. The name is brilliant, the idea even more so. Regardless of the grammatical errors, 5/5! Go to Comment

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I think this is quite amusing and helps explain how the Dwarves can have so many blasted tunnels! :)

I don't have a problem with spell-using dwarves - the Norse dwarves were pretty magical.

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I love dirigibles and I looove the name! Go to Comment

What's wrong with zombies having newfound dexterity? If you ask me, even the current incarnation of zombies are a joke- they're just slow, stumbling things for the heroes to chop up into bits. If zombies could actually move, they could be decent monsters. But as they are, they're ridiculous.

On the other hand, they are rather far-fetched. ;) Go to Comment

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Ok, thanks. I touched it up a bit and it should be good to go. Sorry about the reanimator referance, I've never done anything like that in one of my posts before and decided to try it. Anyway, thanks for the feedback. Go to Comment

This is definitely quite funny. I can imagine FTZs becoming an ongoing campaign joke, if used in the right way. Go to Comment

Ok, I attempted to read the chat room conversation when you had it up.

I liked part of it then and I like it now. The mold is an interesting idea and something I may use for area specific creatures. The history is muddled a bit but understandable.

Tighten up a bit on grammer. Spelling is good, but the use of some words in some areas make having to read a sentence or two twice. Type in Word and it will tell you when there is a conflict of words.

Its interesting. I would like to know more about the Kalanori before they were brought back.

Oh one point I didn't like was the reference ot the Reanimator. Even though the concept was derrived from that, it still is out of place. Go to Comment

I like the post, I like the random mutations because of potions, etc. I like the fuzzy mold. I like the histroy. BUt it seems off-kilter just a little bit the whole way to me. Things like zombies having a newfound dexterity, and a powerful necromancer chilling out with barbaric halflings for so long... why not use a different race, or why wait so long if you could just cast a massive death spell. I'm not saying the idea is not there or not good, just that I don't think it's all been written up or fleshed out completely. I think the underlying idea is both funny and potential a great monster/conflict for players. Go to Comment

interesting...and not bad. Go to Comment

It is the "left overs" from a previous Evil plot. Littering your world with these sort of things help create a sense of historical flow (that things have happened and are happening) that is good for a campaign. Go to Comment

This islands thread is doing well. Go to Comment

I liked the part about blood seeping up from the sand. But why is blood seeping up?
What did the island inhabitants do for their master? Guard the island? Moving gear? Dance?
Why did the evil necromancer want too attack the main land? Just because he is evil?
You get the idea. I see a lot good ideas here, but I am missing some flesh on the bones...
What makes this island different from any other fight/loot location?
Hope i'm making sense. Go to Comment

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What are these reasons?? I would like to know why you considered this worthy of an outstanding rating of 5!

By the way: This sumbimission is dedicated to my friend Charlie and his second characted ever. I will not even mention the first one... Go to Comment