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Yr, the Flaming Sun
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manfred's comment on 2006-02-15 06:35 AM
Actually, that could be slightly metaphorical - the command speaks generically of The Old And Wise - and since all the older males could have been father, you've got to show respect to all of them, buddy!

Aside: anyone that is so old as to have adult grandchildren is of a venerable age, and should he keep to the commandments, then he will be wise as skillful - a source of wisdom for the young ones. Go to Comment
Yr, the Flaming Sun
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CaptainPenguin's comment on 2006-02-02 08:17 PM
Now everybody chill.. Go to Comment
Yr, the Flaming Sun
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MoonHunter's comment on 2006-02-02 02:11 PM
Can you link all these up. Sure we can follow the freetext, but not everyone knows how to do that. Go to Comment
Yr, the Flaming Sun
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Scrasamax's comment on 2006-01-31 10:51 PM
Not bad, a very Pagan sun-god whose demands echo with the sound of the God of the Old Testament. Go to Comment
Yr, the Flaming Sun
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Cheka Man's comment on 2006-01-31 10:21 PM
Very Old Testamentish. I like the abyss idea of Hell. Go to Comment
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Dragon Lord's comment on 2006-02-01 10:26 AM
Small inconsistency with the race write-up:

In the write-up for the Kazi race - "The Kazi have no wives, instead sharing the women of the tribe among themselves and their guests. Because of this family lineage is not tracked through the father but through the mother"

Here, in the write-up for their god - "Honour your father's father and your mother's mother, in them is the truth"

How could they honour their father's father when they do not keep track of paternal parentage, and indeed cannot do so since, giving their mating practices, no individual can know who his father is?

A law demanding the honour of maternal parentage is fine, it helps to cement the tribe and define who is "one of the tribe", but demanding paternal honour makes no sense.

You need to change either the culture or the rule - personally I would suggest changing the rule and leaving the culture alone

Apart from that this is extremely good - 4/5 Go to Comment
Yr, the Flaming Sun
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Pariah's comment on 2006-02-01 04:59 PM
You and Scras are finding all those little inconsistencies, aren't you. It'll get fixed eventually. Go to Comment
Yr, the Flaming Sun
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Pariah's comment on 2006-02-02 07:18 PM
You're so demanding, you know that Moon. First you demand originality, then you demand usability, then you start saying that it needs to look nice. What next, do you want me to have little green demon things dancing around it? Go to Comment
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Murometz's comment on 2006-02-14 09:17 PM
YR. So unlike the typical gods of fantasy. I'd be scared to piss him off!

repetitive comment- very old testamentish

NICE Go to Comment
Yr, the Flaming Sun
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valadaar's comment on 2014-05-16 01:05 PM


How do you pronounce Yr? Yaaar? Yer? Ear? :)



A very good desert god!

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Kazi
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CaptainPenguin's comment on 2006-01-31 09:19 PM
Try "skald"... That sounds more barbaric, but gives it a Viking tinge. Or you could do "singer-priest"... Or maybe even prophet? Go to Comment
Kazi
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MoonHunter's comment on 2006-01-31 10:57 PM
I think it is a good solid posting. I like some of the little touches of chrome, in addition to the basics.

I almost think you should expand out certain sections (as systems posts or appropriate) then delete those parts out. Those posts can stand on their own or you can make this a continuing scroll. Go to Comment
Kazi
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MoonHunter's comment on 2006-01-31 10:59 PM
Oh you did. You just did not link them. (Suggest a submission at the botton of the page) . That would certainly improve the score in many people's mind, especially if you edit the main entry to say "GO LOOK AT THE OTHER POST..." Go to Comment
Kazi
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Scrasamax's comment on 2006-01-31 10:48 PM
solid hunter-gatherer lizard-folk Go to Comment
Kazi
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Cheka Man's comment on 2006-01-31 05:50 PM
Lizardmen types.I like the bardic idea. Go to Comment
Kazi
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Ancient Gamer's comment on 2006-01-31 05:55 PM
This is very detailed and made a good read.

Good stuff:
Well described tribal culture with the elders and the warriors, the castrates and the women. The Native American references were noticable, but good.

Bad stuff:
The predators mentioned at the beginning of the text sounded like italian candy, to me at least, so that detracted a little. Go to Comment
Kazi
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Dragon Lord's comment on 2006-02-01 10:05 AM
Barbarian, lizard man, hunter-traders, with a touch of bardic culture to boot - good stuff - 4.5 / 5 Go to Comment
Kazi
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Pariah's comment on 2006-01-31 05:46 PM
Okay. I need help on this. Mostly it's just names but...
I need a name for the bards/preists. Bard brings trecherous troubadours to mind, which is exactly what these guys are not.
I need to figure out what they call their two language too. High and Low just don't sound right to me.
And I feel like I'm missing something, I'll figure it out eventually but till then. Go to Comment
Kazi
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Pariah's comment on 2006-01-31 08:21 PM
All will be made clear in time AG. There is a reason that I mentioned those, even though they seem superfluous. I thought I hate kinda cut them out but I guess I missed that. My submission on their weapons might make it a bit clearer. Go to Comment
Kazi
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Murometz's comment on 2006-08-24 03:06 PM
I love the Edu and nuchnibi! Good stuff P! Go to Comment
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