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Yr, the Flaming Sun
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (Specific)
Pariah's comment on 2006-02-01 03:59 PM
You and Scras are finding all those little inconsistencies, aren't you. It'll get fixed eventually. Go to Comment
Yr, the Flaming Sun
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (Specific)
Pariah's comment on 2006-02-02 06:18 PM
You're so demanding, you know that Moon. First you demand originality, then you demand usability, then you start saying that it needs to look nice. What next, do you want me to have little green demon things dancing around it? Go to Comment
Yr, the Flaming Sun
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (Specific)
Murometz's comment on 2006-02-14 08:17 PM
YR. So unlike the typical gods of fantasy. I'd be scared to piss him off!

repetitive comment- very old testamentish

NICE Go to Comment
Yr, the Flaming Sun
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (Specific)
valadaar's comment on 2014-05-16 12:05 PM


How do you pronounce Yr? Yaaar? Yer? Ear? :)



A very good desert god!

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Kazi
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Desert)
CaptainPenguin's comment on 2006-01-31 08:19 PM
Try "skald"... That sounds more barbaric, but gives it a Viking tinge. Or you could do "singer-priest"... Or maybe even prophet? Go to Comment
Kazi
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Desert)
MoonHunter's comment on 2006-01-31 09:57 PM
I think it is a good solid posting. I like some of the little touches of chrome, in addition to the basics.

I almost think you should expand out certain sections (as systems posts or appropriate) then delete those parts out. Those posts can stand on their own or you can make this a continuing scroll. Go to Comment
Kazi
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Desert)
MoonHunter's comment on 2006-01-31 09:59 PM
Oh you did. You just did not link them. (Suggest a submission at the botton of the page) . That would certainly improve the score in many people's mind, especially if you edit the main entry to say "GO LOOK AT THE OTHER POST..." Go to Comment
Kazi
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Desert)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-01-31 09:48 PM
solid hunter-gatherer lizard-folk Go to Comment
Kazi
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Desert)
Cheka Man's comment on 2006-01-31 04:50 PM
Lizardmen types.I like the bardic idea. Go to Comment
Kazi
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Desert)
Ancient Gamer's comment on 2006-01-31 04:55 PM
This is very detailed and made a good read.

Good stuff:
Well described tribal culture with the elders and the warriors, the castrates and the women. The Native American references were noticable, but good.

Bad stuff:
The predators mentioned at the beginning of the text sounded like italian candy, to me at least, so that detracted a little. Go to Comment
Kazi
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Desert)
Dragon Lord's comment on 2006-02-01 09:05 AM
Barbarian, lizard man, hunter-traders, with a touch of bardic culture to boot - good stuff - 4.5 / 5 Go to Comment
Kazi
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Desert)
Pariah's comment on 2006-01-31 04:46 PM
Okay. I need help on this. Mostly it's just names but...
I need a name for the bards/preists. Bard brings trecherous troubadours to mind, which is exactly what these guys are not.
I need to figure out what they call their two language too. High and Low just don't sound right to me.
And I feel like I'm missing something, I'll figure it out eventually but till then. Go to Comment
Kazi
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Desert)
Pariah's comment on 2006-01-31 07:21 PM
All will be made clear in time AG. There is a reason that I mentioned those, even though they seem superfluous. I thought I hate kinda cut them out but I guess I missed that. My submission on their weapons might make it a bit clearer. Go to Comment
Kazi
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Desert)
Murometz's comment on 2006-08-24 02:06 PM
I love the Edu and nuchnibi! Good stuff P! Go to Comment
The Dreamer's Cult
Society/ Organizations  (Mystical)   (World Wide)
Strolen's comment on 2006-01-06 10:07 PM
The posts come clear when you read the suggested submissions with it, but as a stand alone post things mentioned in the other need clarification in this post as well. I hadn't read the two others so the following things came up.

-If little is truly known about this cult, then why are they such a high target of violence? From their description the only thing against them is their cryptic beliefs that nobody really understands. They don't do anything but sleep so why are they so 'evil' that they can never escape prosecution.

-The tears need to be expanded on too. A) Why would anybody want to buy their tears in the first place? B) If they are always having to hide and any group is quickly destroyed by those that hate them then how would they sell their tears and who would buy them?

Now, following the links I begin to understand the power of the tears so you should lightly explain the tears a little bit and link to them inside your post so we know there is more. Same with the reason they are hated. Since this is THE submission for the Dreamer's Cult these things should definately be at least mentioned with links providing the in depth explanation.

If you don't know how to link inside submissions, see this link http://www.strolen.com/level.php#i6

All together they make perfect sense, but this one as is leaves too many questions untouched expecting that we will go through and read all the suggested without hints in the submission. Once fixed it will get a solid 4 from me! Go to Comment
The Dreamer's Cult
Society/ Organizations  (Mystical)   (World Wide)
manfred's comment on 2009-01-13 04:36 PM
It is a fine group, especially with the larger connections. Odd characters cleared. Go to Comment
The Dreamer's Cult
Society/ Organizations  (Mystical)   (World Wide)
MoonHunter's comment on 2006-01-05 10:23 PM
It has inspired Strolenites, but not to vote it seems. Sixtyseven views, one comment, and no votes before mine?

Still a solid piece of work, with people building upon people's work. This is the best kind of thing we can do. Go to Comment
The Dreamer's Cult
Society/ Organizations  (Mystical)   (World Wide)
Ancient Gamer's comment on 2006-01-05 04:13 PM
I must say! The Dreamer Cult has surely inspired a lot of Strolenites! I love what all of you guys come up with, but I feel somewhat partial and thus I won't vote for what you and Roack and all them others create in this vein.

You should really team up with Roack though. I bet you guys could forge some wonderful stuff together, like Cheka Man and Maggot used to. Go to Comment
The Dreamer's Cult
Society/ Organizations  (Mystical)   (World Wide)
valadaar's comment on 2009-01-13 10:00 AM
Neat, and agree pretty much with all of Strolen and Moons comments. Has some odd characters to be cleaned up. Go to Comment
Order of the Vigilant
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (World Wide)
Strolen's comment on 2006-01-06 10:32 PM
Are the Dream Nector addicts on the side of the order and their attacks are coordinated or are their attacks something that just happen and the Order plays them up? From the sound of it the Order incites these addict riots.

These poor Dream Cultists sure do get a pretty bad rap just for supplying 'drugs.' Can't just sell them on a street corner so they must have some sort of underground distribution network or something. I keep looking for more of a reason for everybody to hate the cult so much. Go to Comment
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