This is one of these ideas that pop out at 4 o´clock in the morning.... I´ve been kicking it around for a while, used it a bit in my stories, but never really expanded the idea before now. I believe it all started when I watched a show about mummies on Discovery, where the poor were preserved not by regular mummification, but by simply covering the body in tar.
Hi Murometz, and thank you. Locastus (as Im sure you´ve figured out) is the central setting for my submissions. I feel I sort of have to work my way up to that post of posts. But its coming... I just need to set the stage for myself a bit first. Next up is the Bloated Moon, persona non grata and inofficial ruler of Locastus... Go to Comment
The thought behind this comes from the original zombie idea of an undead servant (which is not unlike the original Golem idea). I thought, why construct something with complex articulated joints and hinges when the perfect starting material, ie corpses, are already available in large numbers (especially in a Dickensian London-like setting). Adds a nice twist of cynic utilitarianism too, I think... "Your body belongs to the State, even after you stop inhabiting it" Go to Comment
A beautifully executed submission. The only thing that is giving me pause is; by coating the undead in asphalt, you are removing all visual aspects that would identify them as undead. And so they might as well just be golems, why use dead bodies in the first place, unless golem technology is unavailable in this setting. Go to Comment
I must say one thing though: I find it ironical that those, who ask for tolerance in the matters of grammar often have a definitely clean writing style. (In other words, well-written. :) )
Back to the submission: the idea is very logical - the gift of magic is often not available to everyone - and well executed. It is perfectly reasonable, that many would dare to try their luck, even with such a horrible price to pay. As I was reading it, questions came to me, and were immediately answered, I like that style.
- Could there be a similar way to increase the talent of existing wizards, making them greatly powerful? Even if there isn't, somebody will try...
- I would expect, that the contract was signed _before_ the experiment - or there are actually two contracts, signed before and after, both part of a ritual that binds the subjects to their words.
- You can bet that there will be someone created with an unusual talent, that the Clinic is not able to contain right away... who will catch the fugitive, before the word gets out?
I'm not sure if I would use it, but thanks to the ideas presented here I can certainly think about it. All in all, a solid first submission! Great work, Ouroboros. Welcome to the fold. Go to Comment
As mentioned above, I could use this, or a derivative, in a number of settings, up to and including the one I run most often... which is the Shadowrun fantasy/cyberpunk blend. There would have to be alterations to the fine details, ramp up the failure rate, despite a medium magic world, and probably cranial bombs, but, y'know, it can be used just about anywhere you'd want to be a mage and aren't. Go to Comment
I think that this is a great first-submission indeed. One thing though, after the "experiment"- Have they gained the potential to become mages with the studies it involves, or are they automatically spellcasters?
I noticed that the style was somewhat dry, but I think it suited the post well. I still had a vivid imagery while reading it. The Tank was a horror-like and dark touch in my opinion. Go to Comment