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Cheka Man's comment on 2009-01-29 09:56 AM
I really look forward to giving this an HOH. Go to Comment
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Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2009-01-28 08:57 AM
I have read it, but I will need to digest the submission and perhaps go over it one more time before making a proper comment.

-Mike Go to Comment
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Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2009-01-28 06:17 PM
In truth this is splendid! It's somewhat unfamiliar and has mixed some elements that I myself am not used too. But the imagery got across in time and I nailed those splendid, vivid and gritty images of your submission in my mind:D This is one of those submissions you can pick apart and use elements of, or you can take the hole thing and entertain your players with. Oagru Hactor caught my attention and I might use "him" in an upcoming campaign of him(yes I am finally getting back to roleplaying after a years break).

What surprises me the most is that it does not bog down at any given place. It is fluent and good reading all the way trough. Well done David, now go write that book;)

-Mike Go to Comment
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Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2011-01-31 10:50 AM


BUMPED and HoHed MoB lately, so, here is another masterpiece for our newer members to read. 


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Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2011-01-31 10:51 AM
BTW, who on earth voted less than 5? Go to Comment
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Chaosmark's comment on 2009-01-27 09:34 PM
Aha. You mentioning Mountain of Boats reminded me of where else I had seen something this huge, this insanely long of a read. I've seen something roughly this length elsewhere, but no matter.

I absolutely love the atmosphere you created in this sub. To call it creepy is to degrade the horror and terror that this submission evokes. My description of this to Pieh was, "It's like Call of Cthulhu, but with STEAMTECH." I stand by my affirmation and description. This is a brilliant piece of art, and it opened in my mind vast vistas of adventures to be had within this area.

My one complaint is that something so simple as a rocket launcher could force Oagru Hactor-Newath from his interdimensional anchorage. Surely such a formidable being (described as being thaumaturgically powerful beyond description) could put up more of a fight. I should very much have liked to see something like what Mountain of Boats did, with two possible encounters, one as a lower-level encounter, the other as an epic-level campaign ending. I think what you've given here is the former. I think the latter might overload the Citadel with greatness should it ever be published, however.

This submission is the best I've seen in a very long time. While it seems to take up a sizable chunk of my comment, don't take my suggestion for the ending as anything more than a mild afterthought. The total submission more than makes up for such a small thing. Thank you for sharing this vision with us. Go to Comment
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Murometz's comment on 2009-01-28 12:48 PM
Since I read this via emails already, i'll keep it brief. This is an inspirational piece. Very diffcult to even peg down "favorite" parts, because the whole thing is kick-ass. I guess the creatures, for me, punctuated by Oagru Hactor-Newath, are particularly awesome. The history reads well, the timeline and so forth. There are lots of things to steal here, and too many 'whoa' moments to list them all.

Great job is an understatement! Go write that Locastus novel already! Go to Comment
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Murometz's comment on 2009-10-16 10:07 AM
Reread this today, and find to it to be just an awesome expose of a twsited world. Kudos, David. Go to Comment
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valadaar's comment on 2009-01-29 10:41 AM
Ye gods - such an epic!

Write that damn book - you've got half it here already :P

Wow. I've been giving out very few 5's these days. Today I am. Go to Comment
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Ouroboros's comment on 2009-01-28 02:00 AM
Thank you, CM!

My first thought for a last, climactic battle involved osme form of machine that could close the portal - or maybe remote-deactivate the Warhead. The RPs are given this mission by a stranger, who turn out to be a Hag-sworn agent. The Ur-Kaol Witchocracy wants Akelor opened, so that they can continue their war on Locastus, and so trick the Rps into betraying their nation.

Problem is, That would have added another layer of story and the whole thing would have been just too big. So, I came up with this more modest solution. I excuse the ease with which the RPs drive Hactor-Newath away with the fact that he has never experienced pain, or ever been attacked and hurt. Besides, now he´s back in his home realm - and he´s pissed!

However, if I ever write that book, I´ll use the epic version. But for now, I cant stand having this sub distort space in my "in work" folder..:-)

Anyway, thank you for your comments. I really, really appreciate it.

/D Go to Comment
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Ouroboros's comment on 2009-10-21 08:52 AM
Thank you, Muro! I think that praise might just be the thing I need to start writing again...:) Go to Comment
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Ouroboros's comment on 2010-09-16 07:12 AM
Hey Lockheed, and thank you.

I apologize for any grammatical irregularities - english is not my first language. As for adjective-heavy prose, I think the Captain and I are both students of the master in that regard, ie HP Lovecraft.

Hope to be out with some more stuff soon.

Regards,

David Go to Comment
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Ouroboros's comment on 2011-01-31 11:09 AM
Credit where credit is due: Mountain of Boats inspired this one!
//David Go to Comment
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angryscotsman93's comment on 2009-05-10 12:10 AM
Su-weet! I love the idea of this, mate. It reminds me of the game S.T.A.L.K.E.R.: Shadow of Chernobyl, in that there are strange mutants created by a (fantasy equivalent of a) nuclear explosion, and that the area's been quarantined. If it's cool, I'd like to put in a li'l short story about a mercenary who is trying to escape from the zone after his unit was wiped out- he's been "infected" by the zone, and is desperate for any possible treatment. However, the mutations have, so far, proven at least somewhat beneficial: improved senses, a limited ability to morph his body, the ability to communicate, to some extent, with local monsters, etc. While he DOES enjoy those advantages, he's still scared as to what other horrifying events they could lead to. That cool?

Also reminds me of Warhammer 40k Daemon World, with what's-'is-name as the Greater Daemon running the place. Go to Comment
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Lockheed's comment on 2010-09-01 12:01 PM
This is pretty great, and I enjoyed it a good deal. However, it frequently feels like you are actively trying to write in someone else's style, which can't help but feel forced and off at times. The hyphens and whelter of adjectives is kind of a trademark CP thing, and it works for him. You don't typically write that way, so it doesn't work as well here. Also there were many grammar problems, although its not that surprising given how difficult it must be to edit this massive beast. Again, very creative, cool world, great adventure. Go to Comment
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Forganthus's comment on 2013-06-12 11:15 AM
Only voted and applauded.

5/5 Go to Comment
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CaptainPenguin's comment on 2008-11-18 08:17 PM
I just have to say: well done. Go to Comment
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Kassil's comment on 2008-11-18 10:48 PM
This is an awesome idea, as is the notion that the devices can be 'shut down' and potentially reused; a sufficiently callous government could send expendables into the wild zone until one of them finally managed to shut the device down, and then move the normal army in to mop up the remaining disaster.

This has given me an idea for another weapon. Hopefully I can find the time to work on it between novel-writing and work. Go to Comment
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Kassil's comment on 2008-11-20 02:06 AM
I thought of that almost as soon as I read the effects of the weapon. Locastus gets a Cacotopic Stain that i might, eventually, manage to shut down again! How lovely for them, if only it weren't nearly impossible to get to the device causing it.

...Hey, is that an Inchman over there? Go to Comment
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Scrasamax's comment on 2008-11-19 08:06 AM
That is simply just disturbing Go to Comment
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