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PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2011-08-29 06:01 PM


Interesting. I am not sure what to make of this, but I can see it being useful as fluff to lead into a mystery or eplain some things. It's well written and clear.


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OmegaDraco's comment on 2011-08-30 10:41 AM
Good questions! The rub is that the writer of these logs didn't know the answers. Anyone could speculate that it would take even longer to teleport a human since the cat took so long to fully teleport. Since particles are reassembled in space relative to the particle scanning micromachines, maybe Alexi simply moved his head slightly during the scanning. Maybe the particle reassembly wasn't accurate enough. Maybe ... well I don't want to give away too much. I'm planning another sub to follow up. Go to Comment
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OmegaDraco's comment on 2011-08-30 10:44 AM
Thanks for the encouragement, Scrasamax. I'm planning another submission to follow up on this one. Stay tuned. Go to Comment
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Strolen's comment on 2012-02-18 03:25 AM


Good stories and introductions to some great legendary figures. I like these for legends of the land and justifications for symbology used in the current playing world. 


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Agar's comment on 2011-08-26 02:36 PM


This is a well written sub. The item has a backstory and a purpose, a reason for being, and a very evocitive description so that you 'see' the weapon in use. Excellent writing all around!



I do hold one point with Cheka Man. As strolens is not a system specific website, we try to avoid stats when we can. If you want to provide them, I would recommend putting them in a reply to your own sub to help keep them seperate. Another personal point, this thing definately is an artifact level item, its valued at over half a milltion gold! Once cost get up that high, I usually dont attach price tags to them, that's a lot of gold!

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Scrasamax's comment on 2011-08-28 06:01 PM


Interesting read, reiterate basic comments above about diluted dragons, and stats in posts blah blah blah. The stats dont bother me in the slightest, and I think putting them in the ideas section is brilliant. Well done. The story and characters are engaging and the weapon is well thought out in my limited opinion (I don't actively game any more)



 



Welcome and keep up the good work.


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EchoMirage's comment on 2011-08-28 03:52 AM


This is "so DnD" - the lore is decently written, but the whole "weapon made to stop the greatest foe" approach has been used too often and is made only slightly better by having been made by two working in unison.



Also, it's a sword. With a dragon inside. That turns you into a dragon. I know Dungeons and Dragons is supposed to be about as much about dragons as it is about dungeons, but overdoing it with the dragons may lead to diluting their dragony awesomeness and making them less special (been there, done it).



This said, the sword can be a good McGuffin; I'd have included a limiting clause though or some sort of drawback which makes players less inclined to keep it after they down the Big Nasty.



Another note: the bargain Lord Brax struck with the dragon could have actually borne the seeds of his demise - you write he had the power to claim the soul of the dragon - so the dragon in turn should possess the "power, strength, endurance, and knowledge" to defeat him, in turn. Hence, the dragon-turned-blade could indeed be fed a stream of thought betraying the villain's plans or next strike in that battle (knowledge), drain him of vigor feeding its weilder and striking true as defensive enchantments woven by Lord Brax fail miserably to deflect this one weapon.



Also, welcome to the citadel.


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EchoMirage's comment on 2011-08-28 03:55 AM


Ah, the vote.


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Cheka Man's comment on 2011-08-26 10:10 AM


Too many stats but an ok idea. Please rework and then I'll vote.


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Ted's comment on 2011-08-26 10:53 AM


I disagree totally and completely with Cheka's aversion to having the stats included at the end. As a DM, I enjoy seeing the implementation of mechanics, and there's a great deal of information to be found within the mechanics you've provided. I don't run pathfinder, but the information is still useful and completes my understanding of the item. I suspect you'll encounter a great deal of hostility from most of the citadel- you might want to throw them a bone and generalize some of the information in a less mechanical light by making a section that discusses the weapon in a system-free way.

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Ted's comment on 2011-08-26 10:56 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
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Kassy's comment on 2011-08-26 01:50 PM


Welcome to the Citadel.



No matter what desire you have, our knowledge will help.



 



A good first submission, very impressed.



The only thing stopping me from making it a 4 are the stats. So have a 3.5 ;)


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Dossta's comment on 2011-08-26 06:08 PM


Welcome, OmegaDraco, and congratulations on your first submission.  I personally found the item stats to be a useful addition, but agree that the comments section is the best place for them on this site.  It's a very flavorful item, and I definitely give you full marks for the backstory and the descriptive writing.



However, I'm always a little leery of uber powerful items like this one.  If I were going to use this in my campaign, I would either take out its ability to transform the user into a crystal dragon (except under very special circumstances), or find a way for the Arbiter to leave the player's possession after awhile.



Summary: this is a good, solid submission (3.0) + 0.5 for the added stats.


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Dossta's comment on 2011-08-29 10:47 AM


You have a good point there, one that I missed because I haven't used an intelligent item in game yet. I must say, the idea of a sword turning on the wielder because of a disagreement in ethics just makes me smile. I'd be sorely tempted to give this sword a bit of a . . . caustic personality as well, one that makes the player almost relieved when they part company after the big bad is dealt with.



Does anyone else think that an Intelligent Items quest would be a good idea?  I'm perversely interested to see what deviousness the rest of the Citadel would come up with.

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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-08-26 06:17 PM
I think this is a fairly common move for new users, and I'm pretty sure you haven't offended anyone here, especially being a new user.

From my own personal viewpoint, I want a sub to bring the content alive in my imagination. I want to be inspired, not just by the sub itself but by the world it paints. I can always create my own stats, but the ideas and how they are presented are key. When I'm reading a really cool back story or description and then come across game stats, I find it jarring. Kind of like looking at an interesting painting and then finding notes by the artist on what colors he used in his palette. It breaks the spell. Go to Comment
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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-08-26 06:19 PM


An excellent first sub. The back story really pulls me in. There's some good potential here for world-changing campaigns.



I look forward to seeing more of your ideas.


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hylandpad's comment on 2011-08-27 03:19 PM


Uber item. I, like several others have already stated, dislike Uber Items IN GENERAL, nothing against yours at all.



Well written, good physical description, excellent lore.



I have no opinion, good or bad, on the usage of stats. This is a site for resources, and in some manner I think that stats are certainly a good resource to have when running a game. You gave me enough information that, if the need arose and I had to adapt this from say, Pathfinder, to another game I could do it easily, which is an accomplishment.



3.5!



Welcome to the Citadel.



(I'm not so new anymore!)


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OmegaDraco's comment on 2011-08-26 09:26 AM


The Lore of this item opens up a number of possible plot lines. Here are a few that I can think of:




  • 1,000 years is up and the Destroyer has returned. Players must find Devdan's tomb and recover the Arbiter to fight Lord Brax.


  • Followers of Lord Brax have recovered the Arbiter and are attempting to destroy it. You must stop them to prevent future generations from enslavement (or you must try to destroy the Arbiter for an evil campaign)


  • Players find and must destroy the evil scythe (or they might need to recover it for an evil campaign).


  • Players must find the Arbiter and return Veysara home where other crystal dragons can restore his body.


  • The players are trying to recover the spell that Devdan discovered.


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OmegaDraco's comment on 2011-08-26 12:02 PM
Cheka Man, thank you for your input. I understand your point of view; too many system-specific details can detract from reading. Perhaps I should have left only the item's description and placed my system-specific stats into a comment or idea. To compromise, I have added a system agnostic description of the item's magical properties, but I have left the Pathfinder-specific stats for interested GMs. I hope this is a sufficient compromise.

Infested-jerk, thank you for the enabling and the advice. Being a GM from many systems, I always like to see specific stats to complete my understanding. This is my first post, and I appreciate the insight for making my subs more Citadel-friendly :) Go to Comment
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OmegaDraco's comment on 2011-08-26 03:33 PM
Thanks Kassy. I look forward to frequently using the Citadel to enhance my game. While I do appreciate the vote, I value opinions higher. I feel that stats make an item most useful to a GM (even if they have to be converted to a different system), but I can also understand the value of not restricting an item to stats. It's the artist vs. engineer debate. This is my first submission, and I would love to hear if you have any suggestions for improvement. Go to Comment
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