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Icegate
Dungeons  (Tundra/ Arctic)   (Doors)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-11 09:00 PM
Perhaps when saying any other frozen liquid he is referring to a temperature/pressure relationship. In some game worlds i've read of ice can be a primal force, like fire, electricity , sound or ...eh...acid.

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Icegate
Dungeons  (Tundra/ Arctic)   (Doors)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-11 09:01 PM


This is a really great idea, I ran glacier dungeon twice, two years ago. I wish I had this item for that one. 


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Icegate
Dungeons  (Tundra/ Arctic)   (Doors)
valadaar's comment on 2012-11-26 02:11 PM
This is a great idea - basically like swimming in a giant slushy. Given the headache drinking too much of that fast will bring, swimming in it sounds to be ungodly cold :)

Diving for items lost by those who failed to pass could be a local rite of passage.

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Icegate
Dungeons  (Tundra/ Arctic)   (Doors)
sverigesson's comment on 2012-02-10 12:17 PM
Keep in mind that almost every solid substance is technically a "frozen" liquid. So, limiting it to ice seems to be the best answer to this issue. Still, I love this idea. Go to Comment
Icegate
Dungeons  (Tundra/ Arctic)   (Doors)
montreve's comment on 2012-02-13 03:47 PM


I like the idea of guardians that are not the typical giant monster, in the 5 room dungeon set-up, which this fills nicely. Also the potential for it to be an entire dungeon in itself, or just to add difficulty to a dungeon is great.


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Icegate
Dungeons  (Tundra/ Arctic)   (Doors)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2012-02-15 03:30 PM


Very clever and flavorful, in the right environment this would be a way to make the cold and ice much more than window dressing. 


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Icegate
Dungeons  (Tundra/ Arctic)   (Doors)
Zailtais's comment on 2012-02-08 09:21 PM


This is a great idea. I really like the idea of a doorway that you can get lost in and the description of passing through it is imaginative and gripping. How do you make one of these gates or who made these gates? Where can you find them and can they only exist at freezing temperatures? Are they created in place or movable? Also, I would love to hear more about this dungeon.


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Icegate
Dungeons  (Tundra/ Arctic)   (Doors)
OmegaDraco's comment on 2012-02-09 01:35 PM
I imagine the archway as a thin piece of precious metal that has runic carvings. You can carry it around until you find a wall of ice that you want to put it on. You bend the metal to the archway shape you desire, place it against the wall of ice, cast a spell, and you're done. The metal seals itself to the ice permanently and can't be removed or reused. But you could destroy the Icegate by chipping off the ice it is set in.

They would be most frequently used in ice castles or ice dungeons where an eccentric magician wanted to limit his use of materials primarily to ice. They are only practical where a wall of ice is a structural support and can therefore not be cut into without compromising the integrity of the ceiling. It doesn't have to be freezing, but it does have to be on ice. Magically created ice or any other frozen liquid are perfectly acceptable substitutes for the Icegate.
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Icegate
Dungeons  (Tundra/ Arctic)   (Doors)
OmegaDraco's comment on 2012-02-15 04:20 PM
By frozen liquid, I don't mean metal. You are correct though, and I should be more precise. I pretty much mean water-like, but most natural state liquids would suit me just fine. For example, an ice demon could build his fortress out of frozen blood from his enemies and use Icegates to traverse the blood.
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Ok ... that's a really cool idea. I'm going to make that my next sub. Go to Comment
Icegate
Dungeons  (Tundra/ Arctic)   (Doors)
OmegaDraco's comment on 2012-06-27 08:31 AM
Update: Fixed some spelling and sentence structure issues, and added freetext. Go to Comment
Ruby Heart
Items  (Tools)   (Magical)
Chaosmark's comment on 2012-02-05 07:40 AM
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Ruby Heart
Items  (Tools)   (Magical)
Roack's comment on 2012-02-10 07:11 PM


Great, functional transportation item. I wonder, though, if the ruby heart is magically stuck to the door, how does the user retrieve it? After closing the door, the heart could be thousands of miles away. That might make for some interesting twistiness.



I'm enamored of the first sentence. "The Ruby Heart is the fastest way to get home," is perfectly succicinct, and has that folksy fairy-tale ring to it that I love.


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Ruby Heart
Items  (Tools)   (Magical)
chilled's comment on 2012-06-09 04:23 PM
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Ruby Heart
Items  (Tools)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-04 05:25 PM


Could you use a similiar supernatural technology or technique to make slippers?  



I think you could/should cut some words out of the first four sentences and then describe what happens when the magic is employed in a little more detail.



Does the silver heart burning out mean you only use it once?  Does the enchanted distant door look like the ruby door, how many people can pass through it, how long can it stay open and what can you see through the open door?  If the magic isn't too obvious: clever players would trick people into passing through it or drop ex-wvies or monsters into the rooms of the unpopular or evil. 


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Ruby Heart
Items  (Tools)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-04 08:49 PM


Nice conservation of language now, and this a very useful item. 


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Ruby Heart
Items  (Tools)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2012-12-05 01:43 PM
A good 100-word item. Clear and usable. Go to Comment
Ruby Heart
Items  (Tools)   (Magical)
OmegaDraco's comment on 2012-02-04 08:15 PM
Thanks for the feedback. I made some changes to explain the way it works in greater detail.

I wanted to create a fun utility item that has many uses. I really like the ideas you've come up with so far. Go to Comment
Goliath Crown of Garim Darnore
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
Cheka Man's comment on 2012-02-03 09:33 PM


Very useful unless you are an elf or a goblin.A teleporting crown.


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Goliath Crown of Garim Darnore
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
Murometz's comment on 2012-02-21 07:11 PM


The power of the crown is what it is. Nothing to linger on, but everything else in this sub is fun and clever.



I liked the crown's physical description for starters. It builds to a nice crescendo of "impossible puzzle of precious metals".



Pink and Blue are great, laughed out loud a few times, as I read it.



I actually find myself liking and wanting to use the mini-setting you created around this crown! The lazy, fat bear-king, blue and pink, showing off their distaste for nobility with garish-colored beards, the dwarven poet dwohn dwunn (best line, that one!), dwarven teamster guilds, the "notorious mercenary sage and bard" Anoikis, (the "Meddler" some dwarves call him, others, the "Facilitator") and groemdegger stout!  (that'll be 2 silver pieces, i'll pm you my address)


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Goliath Crown of Garim Darnore
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-06 06:22 PM


You seem be trying for a flippant and comical tone with the origin story here, but I feel like you haven’t really committed to it. I suggest changing the open line to directly address the character of Garim Darnore (instead of the side long view you have now) and also use that line to set the tone. For example a bawdy take on that might be



King Garim Darnore was so fat that when he invoked the royal We, you were forced to consider whether or not he was hiding the entire royal line under robes. Certainly a man of his stature took up both side of family tree.”



Please if you go that route, find better route than those stale jokes.



Or try in pull in both sides of his character in that opening. Consider something like “Before becoming King, Garim Darnoe had strangled Bawlor the great river demon with his bear hands, bested the Helk the Hatceht in single combat, led the conquest of Island of Crueloar, alone saved the great Red Kraken from the God’s Wrath tsunami by dragging it 3 miles back to the ocean and single handedly resisted a 2 month goblin siege of his family diamond mine with only a dagger, a loaf of meat bread and a cask of whiskey. When he ascended to his throne he swore that he would tax sparingly, encourage freedom, rule without aggression and only leave his throne when his realm was threatened. Nobody had expected him to embody such a literal interpretation of that last point.”



The point of your story is that crown was designed not for military uses or romantic rendezvous, but to help a fat lazy rich guy get around his enormous house. I get that and it is funny. Play to the funny.



Also the powers section is kind of vague. Do you actually meld into the stone and step out? Can you hang out there for awhile if you want? Do the stones have to be connected?

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