This was a great submission, I had no problem reading it from start to finish. It kept my attention all the way through. The one thing I would object to though, is the feel what it feels kind of thing, that's a tad redundant since it's just a sock you wear on the hand. And if it works when you don't wear it, then you'd constantly feel trapped if you keep it in a box. I'm not seeing that mentioned, but like I said, if it only works when you wear it, then that abbility is redundant in my mind. Other than that, great! Go to Comment
Awesome write-up, a pleasure to read! Not sure why but his single-minded end mission of finding his father was a little less than I expected with such a complex character. With the unpredictable humans, and since it was their fault he was in this predictament, I was expecting a little more animosity towards them. Not the hostile, killing kind as this dragon is refreshingly self-aware, but more like, "Lets see what we can manipulate these idiot humans into doing that won't be blamed on me." I would have saw him doing odd things to start some small wars between cities and such just for a little payback while he was on his way to his greater mission. Dragon scale "pranks" that would cause quite a bit of disruption which could continue to prove his superiority over them even in his current state.
Really enjoyed reading it!
(PS. 2m = ~6.5ft, not 8 -- you could just say just shy of 3m and we would all get it without the conversion) Go to Comment
As you emerge from the shop in the alleyway, not-too-distant clanging and stamping makes you wary. Further investigation reveals a massive Balgrian protest march flooding the main street, banners roaring about the inhuman conditions in which this ethnic group is forced to live. City guards stand helplessly by, beating up the odd protestor, but unable to hold back the flow. Onlookers throw vegetables at the Balgrians, and shout abuse.