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Key, Quill, and Seal
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CrazyF1r3f0x's comment on 2013-08-22 01:45 PM
Cool ideas, though I'd like some more detail on the puzzle of the seal; and what makes it so difficult to solve. Go to Comment
Fena, the Demon Goddess
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Scrasamax's comment on 2013-08-26 12:37 AM
Interesting read, and I like the idea presented, but there are quite a few areas that are vague or left blank, some of which is intentional.

As Darkstand said, I would like to know more about the binding, and how and why such power as Fena's was left to fade and be forgotten. Some other questions revolve around Fena as a demon, I have no idea what she looks like, what if any mannerisms she has. What is her portfolio, does she have any elemental aspects, weaknesses, strengths?

I would like to see a triptych style progression, Fena the mortal, Fena the vengeful demon, and Fena the older and now dangerously unknown goddess. What is her appearance and how has it changed? What were her powers and how have they changed?

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Fena, the Demon Goddess
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Scrasamax's comment on 2013-09-03 09:58 AM
The additions and editing have made this a much better submission. Good job, and here is a 1.5 point bump in vote.

4.5/5

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Fena, the Demon Goddess
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Dozus's comment on 2014-01-22 01:08 PM
A very interesting progression. I like the duality here, and the idea of binding evil to do good. Excellent work. Go to Comment
Fena, the Demon Goddess
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valadaar's comment on 2013-08-26 09:18 AM
I like the idea, especially since one religions angels could be another's demons. Scras's comments best echo my thoughts here.

Any influence by Hera?
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Fena, the Demon Goddess
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MysticMoon's comment on 2013-08-26 12:05 AM

I tried to make this sub very focused on Fena, so while there are references to what goes on in the wider world, very little is explicitly said about it. Since I didn't have a particular setting in mind when I wrote this, I made the background details vague enough that they could be adapted to whatever the GM is using. As such, you are correct that many details are left out.

The binding of Fena could have been a good bit of narrative fluff to add. I'm sorry I didn't think of it.

A few ideas about the magic: It could be that magic waxes and wanes in this setting. Thus as it wanes and gets harder to use, its application becomes rare and fewer attempt to keep the traditions alive. Maybe Karilea was not the first to attempt to bring Fena back but, with magic waxing once again, was just the first to be able to tap into the power to do so.

Karilea's desire to free Fena was not random. I think it is common for some people to look to the distant past and seek a connection with it or to try to bring some of it into the present, especially when they feel lost or that life provides little spiritual meaning. Look at all of the various real world neopagan traditions that are around today.

Fena from the past would fit right into a high fantasy campaign but the modern version was designed specifically for a setting with little magic (or at least a world where magic is only beginning to come back.)

Thanks for the thought provoking feedback!

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Fena, the Demon Goddess
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MysticMoon's comment on 2013-08-26 09:35 AM
Good questions, all. Based on all the feedback here, I'm working on an update. Go to Comment
Fena, the Demon Goddess
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MysticMoon's comment on 2013-09-03 05:13 AM
Update: A lot more detail has been added. Go to Comment
Fena, the Demon Goddess
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MysticMoon's comment on 2013-09-03 10:23 AM
Thank you for taking the time to reread this. Go to Comment
Fena, the Demon Goddess
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MysticMoon's comment on 2013-09-03 02:48 PM
Glad you liked the updates. Go to Comment
Fena, the Demon Goddess
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Gossamer's comment on 2013-08-21 10:31 AM
Very well written and original. Haven't got much else to say. Go to Comment
Fena, the Demon Goddess
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Darkstand's comment on 2013-08-25 01:09 PM
The Good: Like already said, well written, The idea of fallen angles sees a lot of use, but rarely do demons rise again, more needs to be done with that idea.
The Bad: A bit dry once the introduction is done. How did they bind Fena again? At what cost? Why is magic draining away/being forgotten? And which of those is it? Both are implied.
Also, in my opinion it seems odd that Karilea just randomly decided to free Fena again without some inciting event, but that could just be me. People do pick up odd obsessions and goals sometimes (especially where religion is involved).
Like stated in the article, it works well for a low magic, low fantasy world, or one just waking up again, but would need a major overhaul for a high fantasy campaign. Go to Comment
Fena, the Demon Goddess
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Darkstand's comment on 2013-09-03 12:45 PM
The additions are good. The voluntary sacrifice in particular is a nice touch..
Whether she is truly 'free' is another good question, as is her power now, but both of those are fine as open questions for the GM to answer. Go to Comment
Ahkti: The Great Ancestor
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Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-08-22 02:34 AM
As with the other two, I love how you made it relevant for multiple timeframes.
This sub wasn't full of all the nitty-gritty little details, and I actually kind of enjoyed it because of that - Ahkti is simple, straight forward and to the point.

Now all that is left to progress to is inter-planetary missionaries spreading the word (or holy laser-fire in the case of extremists) to alien life! Go to Comment
Ahkti: The Great Ancestor
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Dozus's comment on 2014-01-22 10:28 AM
The evolution of Ahkti is great, showing the changes over the eras. I agree with Val re: religious practice. The basic theology of Ahkti is here, but I wonder what rites and rituals were carried through the ages, or how they were changed over time as well. Still, it's a very fine base. Go to Comment
Ahkti: The Great Ancestor
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valadaar's comment on 2013-08-24 08:41 PM
I love the history of this religion, though its actual tenants and worship are very light in detail. I expect this was intentional, but it loses a bit of flavour thereby.

Great writing and detail. Plot hooks are good, and I like how you tied it into the future. Go to Comment
Ahkti: The Great Ancestor
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valadaar's comment on 2013-08-24 08:41 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Ahkti: The Great Ancestor
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mrcelophane's comment on 2013-08-18 02:37 PM
Enjoyable read on the way to Church this morning.

Interesting that PCs can be placed inside any era of this Religion and it still can be a dominant force. Go to Comment
Ahkti: The Great Ancestor
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MysticMoon's comment on 2013-08-24 10:00 PM

Good point about the light details. I wrote this up as part of my 8-in-8 challenge, meaning I had less than a day to work on it. So it wasn't intentional so much as the consequence of a lack of time to fully flesh it out.


With the changing cultures and beliefs in Ahkti/Aktagarti over time, it would be difficult to present a singular set of official dogma. It is something to ponder, however, and I may add at least an overview of some of these variations in the future.


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Gossamer's comment on 2013-08-18 07:15 AM
I like how it evolved throughout the ages to fit with the needs of whichever era is the current one, much akin to real world religions. Not a bad come back. Go to Comment
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