It started off as...classic Hippocampi meets rushing, foamy, wave-horses from LotR. Best take-away from the first part was--to stop is to die. That was nice.
But the Abilities and Weaknesses gets to all the good stuff and some original bits, especially the--messages across great distances!
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They are indeed flavorful, well-rendered creatures, though I've come across their ilk quite a few times. Still good though!
A very organized and detailed plotline! It is hovering around the edge of being pre-scripted, but that is probably the only way to keep the text from becoming immense.
Also, being underwater tends to put strong controls on where and what you can do.
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An interesting question. Most likely it would require the gem to consciously create bad weather inside of a cave, but in all likelihood it would be a safe haven from the weather. There may be ice golems or other nasties patrolling such an area, however.
As far as being used by PCs: Being intelligent, the gem would only be useful to a party if it wished to be. Its powers are entirely under its own control so it would be useful only under circumstances it agreed with. In fact, it could make life very difficult for a party it did not wish to be a part of. As such, it is far more likely to be useful to a GM as a particular plot device, as you say.Go to Comment
I like the idea of the mysterious storm; it fits in with how I envisioned it.
This sub is kind of a departure from the last few I've done. I'll admit I was more into the narrative than considering how it could be used in a game. For a storytelling fix it was an interesting exploration :)Go to Comment
While I enjoy being lighthearted and joke a lot in chat, I do tend to go to very dark places when I write. Sort of cathartic, I suppose, but you're not the first to say that it goes a bit far. (And you may want to avoid my journey into hell piece)
I'll explain some of my thought processes and how those map to what I was probably trying to express (though I usually have to guess after the fact; I never quite understand my creative side):
The gem took the brightness of her mind for granted at first, which is why it never called her to it before. It only called to her once her light became darkness, in order to regain the bright soul it had lost. I have felt that frustration, seeing bright people grow into broken adults because of traumas they survived, and I have wished for the power to banish that darkness. I've also realized that most people can only find salvation after they've broken free on their own to a certain degree. (And talk about a horrific challenge...)
I would say that it is possible to have a functional relationship, though even with the best of help, some scars will always show through. Of course, I skipped over 2 years worth of Karina gaining back her own power and having her mind magically healed to a degree by the gem. Still, if I was to go more in depth, I probably would need to show some jagged pieces of her past that poked through into her fairy-tale marriage.
Looking more closely at this, I can see some strong parallels with some real life events experienced by people I've known (though it's a bit of a mish-mash and more metaphor than literal). Not going into details, but it's bizarre how the mind transforms the mundane into the fictional.
You are probably correct that it becomes a trope at some point, and shouldn't be overdone. This was one of those subs that I pretty much barfed out in one sitting without having any real clue what was going to come out. I just knew I was feeling the urge to express something and I couldn't find any better medium. I wouldn't have consciously chosen this topic, as I've seen it done to death myself. But, when the muse stamps her impatient little feet, I come running ;)
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