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Chiros: Savage Messiah
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MysticMoon's comment on 2012-07-20 09:23 AM
He's going to be the Big Bad in at least part of my developing campaign with the pocket realms, so I don't want him too humanized :p

I know this sub is a bit old, but I really do have more planned around it, Mathom be praised. Go to Comment
The Lost Flute of Jasloff
Items  (Art and Music)   (Magical)
Strolen's comment on 2010-12-23 12:58 PM


I actually enjoyed the path of the flute from person to person. I kept waiting for that to come in play though as mentioned and was disappointed when I didn't see it. They are correct that it doesn't add much to the sub...unless.



Perhaps the flute takes a piece of each person that it touches along its path. Each expert that can harness the flute imbues it with a little part of him/herself. As the flute passes from hand to hand it actually slowly accumulates more power and more music. Flutist may fall into the sound and stat playing pieces that past owners favored...etc etc.



I do love these kind of items and anything that gets the ideas flowing is always great. 


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The Lost Flute of Jasloff
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Pieh's comment on 2010-12-20 11:35 PM


Very nice. I have always enjoyed ideas revolving around the gifts of fey creatures and this one is very atmospheric, well detailed, and fun. My favorite part is the paragraph about the hands it has passed through. Great first submission, a very nice take on a traditional Bard's instrument.


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The Lost Flute of Jasloff
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Cheka Man's comment on 2010-12-21 08:30 AM


A nice magical instrument.


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Murometz's comment on 2010-12-22 10:51 PM


Very nice. Instant Bard instrument with lore (and a downside).  There is a scroll somewhere we can attach this too, but it escapes at the moment which one it may be.



 



Let me throw out the ubiquitous, Welcome Aboard!!


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The Lost Flute of Jasloff
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Murometz's comment on 2010-12-22 10:51 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
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valadaar's comment on 2011-01-25 02:44 PM


Well done, and a belated welcome aboard!


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Moonlake's comment on 2010-12-20 10:52 PM


A solid first submission. I quite like the descriptions in the second paragraph. Personally, I would insert some bold headings to separate out different sections but as it is, it's still quite easy to read and I didn't take any points off.


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The Lost Flute of Jasloff
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Dossta's comment on 2010-12-22 02:12 PM


A fine first submission, Mystic.  I especially like the drawbacks to using the flute poorly -- fae can be dangerous when angered, but I bet that you could still talk your way out of serious trouble.  This is also a nice reminder that an item need not be ornate or auspicious to be magical.



A few thoughts:



The paragraph you spent on how the item passed from hand to hand makes for an interesting read, but adds little to the overall piece.  After hearing how the flute parted company with its creator, all we really need to know is that it changed hands many times before being lost in a forest.  This is a minor nitpick; you wouldn't need to cut it out unless you were planning on greatly expanding this piece.  At that point, it would become an unnecessary extra.



This would be fun to combine with axlerowe's Magical Songs.



Overall, I like this item enough that I may have to use this in an upcoming submission as a quest reward.

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The Lost Flute of Jasloff
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Ramhir's comment on 2010-12-23 07:08 PM


 




A very nice magical instrument, I like it. Welcome aboard!



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MysticMoon's comment on 2010-12-21 08:22 AM
Update: I added a few headers to break it up into sections, per Moonlake's suggestion. Go to Comment
The Lost Flute of Jasloff
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MysticMoon's comment on 2010-12-26 04:16 PM
Update: After letting some of the comments sink in and percolate a little, I have expanded the flute's history. Thanks Strolen for the idea of tying the history into the powers of the flute itself. Go to Comment
The Lost Flute of Jasloff
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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-03-26 06:12 PM
Update: Added Music freetext Go to Comment
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