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Silveressa's comment on 2011-02-25 08:23 AM
Congrads! Go to Comment
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Silveressa's comment on 2011-02-24 12:24 PM


Lol I love it, I'm glad you found my idea worthy to expand into a sub. :)


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Silveressa's comment on 2011-02-24 12:43 PM
I rather assumed it was a "silly" sub... Go to Comment
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Silveressa's comment on 2011-02-25 11:43 AM
Probably, and it likely pisses'em off too; an the only thing worse then a croc, is an angry injured croc! Go to Comment
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Ramhir's comment on 2011-02-25 05:22 PM


Ooo-Kay! Remind me not to be a kobold around there. Or a croc! Watch out for low-flying crocs!


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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-02-25 08:29 AM
Aye! We have excellent grog in these parts. Though I fear it often leads to more silliness. Go to Comment
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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-02-24 05:59 PM
I intended to but didn't see the option. If I understand the level system correctly, it is level 3 that lets me use established freetext. Go to Comment
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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-02-24 11:48 PM
Update: Finally, level 3 :)

Adding "Silly" freetext. Go to Comment
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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-02-25 12:29 PM
Honestly, there were a couple of ideas I left out when I wrote this because I didn't want to overdo the gag. There was the history of the pioneering war leader who invented the tactic and then there were special padded leather jerkins used to cushion their landing (which they were trained to quickly release).

Of course, I hadn't considered the efficacy of pissed off crocs :) Go to Comment
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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-02-25 12:36 PM
I know I'm easily amused, but the image of a croc sailing through the air as a projectile just tickled my funny-bone and I had to run with it. Go to Comment
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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-02-28 07:53 PM
Update: Incorporated the padded leather jerkins and the story of the intrepid warleader. Go to Comment
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Renlim's comment on 2011-02-24 05:19 PM


Silly or not, it is awesome!  I can just see the expressions of my PC's faces as I describe what would be happening.


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RHHale's comment on 2012-12-11 06:51 PM
Hilarious!!! Love it!!! Go to Comment
Skrelleth Demons
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Strolen's comment on 2011-02-22 03:39 PM


It might be because it is late but I had to read the first two sentences a dozen times to get it straight. "take her place' told me that Sean was a girl and the other was taking her place. Then in the next sentence it said the girl in front of the master was 40, or is that Sean...ah, "his" I guess he is a dude, oh -'s that is a break in the sentence. There were a couple more leading sentences that were interrupted by commas making it hard to track. (It happened that...) I normally don't nickpick but I very much enjoyed the narrative but it didn't flow. There wasn't much to prove the intense hatred but I can assume more went on, don't need it all.



Would like to see a hint of the demon in the passage though. At least an inkling of hatred not fully his own perhaps to give some foreshadowing to the unnaturalness of it all. That would make the intense anger more justified.



Sorry, didn't mean to dwell. I will hold the vote and give it another read.


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Strolen's comment on 2011-02-22 11:46 PM


That made a huge difference! It all falls together very nicely and the narrative compliments and enhanced the nature of the demons to make them more useable. Great addition of a few hooks as well. PCs often make plenty of enemies so could see this coming into play. Solid sub!


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Pieh's comment on 2011-02-22 08:08 PM


I liked this one. It provides a very nice rough sketch of what I need to use the creature. The narrative was capturing, though a little disjointed, as noted, and really gave me just enough detail for my mind to wander around and fill in a picture. I think this is a very good submission, because each reader will walk away from it with a slightly different impression of the events leading up to, and concluding, the feeding process



Again, good work.


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EchoMirage's comment on 2011-02-23 03:32 AM


It does not feel like revenge - after all, the girl did nothing to actually wrong Sean the Failure.



Also, this kind of petty envious hatred is so common that likewise the Skrelleth demons would inadvertently be an everyday problem.



Also, the >curse< thing is unfitting for such petty critters - I see them rather physically switching bottles, spilling poison ivy extracts into a bath, or carrying a diseased cloth to their victim.


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Cheka Man's comment on 2011-02-22 08:38 PM


Use them at your peril.


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Drackler's comment on 2011-02-25 08:18 PM


 It's good, it's usable, and I liked the narrative introduction. I especially liked the image of the demons warming themselves on Sean's hatred.


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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-02-22 03:45 PM
Ah, I see what you mean. I'll take another whack at it this evening. Go to Comment
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