I must say that you surprised me with this, Mystic. As I was reading the description of Chiros' appearance and personality, I was preparing myself for another stereotypical lich -- a vast, hidden power who acts through proxies. Instead, we have a vastly successful con-man masquerading as a holy figure. Love the parallels to Chrisitanity.
He is a little uber, imo, so adding a few weaknesses (even just flaws in his personality that could be exploited) would help. Introducing some plot hooks or other important NPCs who are close to him would also increase the value of this post. But overall, there is very little for me to criticize here, and much to praise. Well done!
I actually enjoyed the path of the flute from person to person. I kept waiting for that to come in play though as mentioned and was disappointed when I didn't see it. They are correct that it doesn't add much to the sub...unless.
Perhaps the flute takes a piece of each person that it touches along its path. Each expert that can harness the flute imbues it with a little part of him/herself. As the flute passes from hand to hand it actually slowly accumulates more power and more music. Flutist may fall into the sound and stat playing pieces that past owners favored...etc etc.
I do love these kind of items and anything that gets the ideas flowing is always great.
Very nice. I have always enjoyed ideas revolving around the gifts of fey creatures and this one is very atmospheric, well detailed, and fun. My favorite part is the paragraph about the hands it has passed through. Great first submission, a very nice take on a traditional Bard's instrument.
A fine first submission, Mystic. I especially like the drawbacks to using the flute poorly -- fae can be dangerous when angered, but I bet that you could still talk your way out of serious trouble. This is also a nice reminder that an item need not be ornate or auspicious to be magical.
A few thoughts:
The paragraph you spent on how the item passed from hand to hand makes for an interesting read, but adds little to the overall piece. After hearing how the flute parted company with its creator, all we really need to know is that it changed hands many times before being lost in a forest. This is a minor nitpick; you wouldn't need to cut it out unless you were planning on greatly expanding this piece. At that point, it would become an unnecessary extra.
This would be fun to combine with axlerowe's Magical Songs.
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Overall, I like this item enough that I may have to use this in an upcoming submission as a quest reward.