Really good indeed. I love your atmospheric descriptions, I love the 5 room set-up(have never attempted it myself though) and I enjoyed the plot. 

Good job MysticMoon!

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Really good - it seems to have been overlooked somehow.

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Excellent follow up to the original post! If I had votes left, I'd give you a 5/5!

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I enjoyed this adventure, and can appreciate the work that went into the atmospheric descriptions.  It nicely complements your other quest submission.  I will, however, agree with Pieh about the hopelessness for the PCs at certain parts.  The snakes, especially, are a difficult conundrum, and I would probably omit them if I were going to run this.

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Thanks. I appreciate the feedback. Go to Comment

Is there anything specific you feel could be improved upon? I really struggled with this one and only posted it when I felt I'd done as well as I could (plus I could barely stand to look at the thing by then.)

Adventure design is not one of my strengths and I'm open to any feedback that could help me to improve. Go to Comment

Some good food for thought. I will go back through this from the perspective of the PCs and see if I can make improvements. Go to Comment

An excellent submission, I echo the praise of the others. I don't really have any questions after reading this. It seems like any of the pocket realms would be easy enough to devise of your own, but I do look forward to reading more of this setting.

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This one's good. Echo likes.

You might want to flesh out the plot hooks a little.

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Thank you. Those wizards have certainly suffered for their greed. Maybe I should make a 30 Pocket Realms submission.

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Oddly enough I read this two days ago and seemed to not have voted or commented on it at all. I like it, the backstory is quirky and detailed enough from a single perspective it reminds me of why I love backstory. Even though it might not be a story that the players will ever find out it is still a much needed bit of context to any sub I think. Kudos to you.

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That would be a great addon to this... tie it all together in a huge back story and actual working dungeon. Go to Comment

Interesting. Liked the idea of the Tower creation leading to the city's end and the quest  by the Wizard-Lichs to free their torment.

Question though, would this mean that there are towers in every pocketworld? In my mind the tower(s) act as gates from one world/dimension to another.  As I followed the plot I expected the characters to end up at one of these towers, not a hill. Or, is the tallest hill that dimensions version of the tower?

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Pretty much everything has been said already; it's an interesting premise and a solid submission.  I especially liked the writing for the internal dialogs of each character, because they really make it come alive.  I actually feel bad for the wizards, though my normal inclination would be to dismiss them entirely as arrogant fools.  Well done!

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Special thanks to Cheka Man for 30 Grassy Mounds. Number 30 inspired the last piece that finally tied all my ideas together.

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There used to be a tower there, but it is gone, along with the rest of the city. The only remaining link in that pocket world is the pentagram where the ritual was performed, and that is buried beneath the hill. I probably should have included more detail on that.

Otherwise, you are correct. There is a tower in every other pocket world and they are capable of acting as gates (if anyone could breach them.)

I am working on a follow-up submission, a 5 Room Dungeon that should clarify some of this. Go to Comment

It's up: The Lost Imperial City.

This is only the first of many I have planned. Go to Comment

Doesn't it hurt the crocs being catapaulted?

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Yay! Have some grog! Go to Comment