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Mourngrymn's comment on 2006-04-20 01:32 PM
Once again Mur, after reading the first submission of yours I have read nothing but impressive stuff.

I wanted to vote 4.5 on this as I am trimming back my 5/5 votes... but I honestly could not bring myself to do it. While I may never use this entire idea, the concept of it being just a rumor that passes at a tavern around a few drinks and a warming fire, or a sailor on a still watered ship... impressive my friend.

Keep it up. Go to Comment
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Roack's comment on 2006-04-08 09:56 PM
For once you did a short post, and yet, it's as beautiful as anything else you've done. Go to Comment
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Pariah's comment on 2006-04-29 09:46 PM
All I can say has been said before, and better, than I ever could. Go to Comment
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Dozus's comment on 2014-02-18 02:40 PM
Lovely imagery on this one. I want to know more about the sperm whale's Leviathan Pool. Why only the "rambunctious" ones? Do they have their own Ocean Mother, or some other deity? Go to Comment
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Murometz's comment on 2006-04-09 01:31 AM
damn log-in issues!

Oh by the way. This is not be confused with "The Piss Pool", the yellowish muck which Hhasgyaj-Adok, the Troglodyte King wallows in every morning. :D Go to Comment
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axlerowes's comment on 2012-11-09 07:34 PM
a nice and original piece of scenery Go to Comment
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valadaar's comment on 2007-11-05 11:56 AM
Well damn, this is good! Go to Comment
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Silveressa's comment on 2011-07-20 09:38 PM


A much more somber and thoughtful piece then I was expecting, and certainly memorable. I'm not sure it's a place most typical greedy/ goal driven PC's would be satisfied with finally finding. (given there's no treasure or other tangible rewards to be gained from the place and no great "villain" to overcome.)  



Nonetheless, for those looking for a memorable legend, and a equally memorable location, they would be hard pressed to find one more so.



A bit more detail about the rumor of "You will not live to see the New Moon after witnessing its beauty." might be a worthy enhancement. I can feel there is potential for a surprising climax here with the PC's being attacked by whales, or some type of water elemental near the beginning of the new moon, seeking to return them to the watery grave as well.


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Cloister of the Empty Table
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manfred's comment on 2006-04-05 05:07 AM
I have to admit this religion, or sect or what is the proper name has quite surprised me.

Of a particular interest is the demon. A demon of Famine gaining his own cult... a surprising twist not likely in many world (except maybe in ours, with models as worshippers ;) ).

It shows nicely what can follow after a monotheistic religion starts to push all other out... and there can be other newly awakened cults. Is there any political resistance, from countries where the rulers are well-connected to 'their' religion, and see their powerbase threatened? Or could some enterprising ruler turn the story, and start to spread his own 'view on the things', keeping the One True Faith idea with tiny changes (and his own religious hierarchy of course). It is never easy to take over the world, you know. :)


*starts a fanclub for the Muromax Studios* Go to Comment
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manfred's comment on 2006-04-05 05:09 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
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Ria Hawk's comment on 2006-04-10 11:27 PM
Okay. This is faintly horrifying, but only because of the outlook these people have and what they go through. I like it as a group to expose my players to. *shudder* There are so many fun things to do with this... Go to Comment
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CaptainPenguin's comment on 2006-04-05 03:39 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
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MoonHunter's comment on 2006-04-05 12:18 AM
This should almost be two or three posts. One for religion (as you don't do a Deity for this one), One for the cloister, and One for the NPC.

Still nicely done across the board. Go to Comment
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Siren no Orakio's comment on 2006-06-01 12:32 AM
Excellently executed. Go to Comment
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Iain's comment on 2006-05-28 08:58 AM
Another brilliant submission by Muromax! Go to Comment
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Scrasamax's comment on 2006-04-07 05:10 PM
I will admit the Cloister is intimidating, almost alien to us in our rather soft and decadent westernized lives. In a sense this was an attempt to reach back into the collective history of organized faith to find those people who have gone to great lengths to demonstrate their piety. Ayyosha, while certainly not pleasant, and certainly not generous, has much in common with the fakir who rests on a bed of nails, monks who take vows of silence, chastity, or even modern folk who abstain from all meat.

I guess the basic though is that people are more than willing to go to extremes for the things that they feel are important. Go to Comment
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Cheka Man's comment on 2006-04-06 09:05 PM
Not a place that I would like to visit. Go to Comment
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Ancient Gamer's comment on 2006-04-11 11:43 AM
Okay. This was a hard one. The first story, about Ayyosha, was a true 5.0. The second part, about the cult, was a 4.0.

Distracting feature: When I began reading this I had gone into "imagination-mode" and the ode to Scrasamax was highly frustrating. I realize I sometimes have done the same, but I think I will begin to put such praise at the end of the post.

Overall this is well written. True craftsmanship shines through in a sometimes grisly post. The post is very long and I think you could have split it up in two parts (history/lore and cult/organization), and I would have given the first part 5.0 and the second part 4.0.

Additional plot:
Murder most foul - The local priests have begun dying and are found dead in the temples, their stomachs burst from excessive eating. Now a new priesthood has moved into an old, abandoned warehouse building and has declared that the wrath of their god is upon the city. In the beginning people scoff at these lunatics, but as the priesthoods are thinning out, and even ordinary citizens (most often food merchants and the like) die too, the despairing population begin turning to the newcomers for salvation.

The last remaining Arch Priest of a major temple summon the PCs into his temple besieged by angry converts. Can the PCs discover the relationship between the cult and the deaths, or will they too wither at the hands of the disciples of famine?

Yeah, I know the above plot needs grammar restructuring, but I am lazy :p Go to Comment
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Mourngrymn's comment on 2006-04-21 04:53 PM
I like it... I want to vote much higher but something about this doesn't sit well with me, no pun intended. Perhaps it is a cult of people subjugating their own demise... which wouldn't be the first time I would venture to say, but something doesn't really sit right in my liking of this.

I do love the history section however. The last paragraph is what did it for me the most. It was very detailed and heavily visual to me. The muromax duo have done a wonderful job yet again. Go to Comment
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Roack's comment on 2006-04-05 11:09 PM
I officially join manfred's club! Go to Comment
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