Strolen\s Citadel content. 
Undead Beard Fleas
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-09-25 10:24 PM
Culturally it is dwarven, it speaks to dwarven values and behavior no? But the action is necromantic. Such is the divide between the two topics that we discussed earlier. LIke if we had a French guild and Architectural Guild, the french guild would be more culture, history and events and the Architectural Guild would be stories and items associated with the task associated with designing buildings.
Necromancy really isn't an idiom as dwarfishness will be when we are through with it. I would love to read counter arguments. Go to Comment
Undead Beard Fleas
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-09-26 07:00 AM
And the teaser is awesome Go to Comment
Undead Beard Fleas
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-09-26 04:54 PM
Dude I was in the in that cha
Go to Comment
Undead Beard Fleas
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
valadaar's comment on 2012-09-28 08:47 PM
Not bad, though bravado aside, I would not expect a dwarf to die for his beard. Kill, yes. Woe to whoever visited this fate to a dwarf.

Go to Comment
Undead Beard Fleas
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
olontur's comment on 2012-09-26 04:59 AM
Besides the vermin itself, reading this will give my dwarves much more depth! Go to Comment
Undead Beard Fleas
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
Dossta's comment on 2012-09-26 06:11 PM
There has got to be a better way to exterminate these things. I wonder if a cleric can turn them? :) It also seems like an odd choice for the necromancer -- "You have destroyed my life's work. Despair, for I shall now make you itchy!" Go to Comment
Shivenhusk the Unliving Refuse
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Underground)
Strolen's comment on 2012-09-25 01:35 PM
I like the church war plot aspect of it. Having a demi-god, of that sort, actively going against his Aunt's church makes for great indirect conflict in the world! PCs would be affected by odd parts of this war and may, in scenarios, even get involved. Decent history and reason for coming into being as well. I find this very usable. Go to Comment
Shivenhusk the Unliving Refuse
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Underground)
Scrasamax's comment on 2012-09-24 11:29 PM
Sniff sniff, I smell awesome. Great visuals, but there is something missing. He is a half god, a wretched creature of half life and half death. He feels like a fantastic monster boss, but not really divine, or half divine. If it would not offend, I would like to try my hand at creating a half dead demigod. Go to Comment
Shivenhusk the Unliving Refuse
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Underground)
Cheka Man's comment on 2012-09-25 04:42 PM
Foul and disgusting, but it's not his fault that he ended up this way. Go to Comment
Shivenhusk the Unliving Refuse
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Underground)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2012-09-23 06:32 PM

I really hadn't thought of him as an end of campaign boss. Just a malign pain that is a constant pain in the side of those try to tackle evil and end cult plot after cult plot. Being as he is not bound to a single cult, as many different worship him I felt he would be an almost never ending antagonist. But I do see you point.


 


*updated per CM's remarks.

Go to Comment
Shivenhusk the Unliving Refuse
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Underground)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2012-09-23 07:38 PM
I understood where you were coming from defeat is just a strong word I guess and can mean so many different things. But all is well. Go to Comment
Shivenhusk the Unliving Refuse
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Underground)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2012-09-25 06:34 AM
Why would that offend? Create away. Go to Comment
Shivenhusk the Unliving Refuse
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Underground)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2012-09-25 08:25 PM
Updated and hopefully fixed. Go to Comment
Shivenhusk the Unliving Refuse
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Underground)
Chaosmark's comment on 2012-09-23 06:25 PM
Shivenhusk seems very much like an end-of-campaign boss to defeat. His writeup obviously has enough flesh to be spawning hordes of writhing, disgusting, slimy plot hooks, and I'd like to see some of those, to better allow his use. Go to Comment
Shivenhusk the Unliving Refuse
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Underground)
Chaosmark's comment on 2012-09-23 07:33 PM
Well, by 'defeat' I simply meant that his plans would be foiled. Defeat does NOT have to mean death, especially for a demi-god of undeath. Go to Comment
Shivenhusk the Unliving Refuse
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Underground)
Chaosmark's comment on 2012-09-23 07:34 PM
Updated vote; the plot hooks really do help. Go to Comment
Shivenhusk the Unliving Refuse
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Underground)
Murometz's comment on 2012-09-25 12:48 PM

A perfectly horrid and disgusting "thing"! Well described and imagined. Even the name alone is great, summons up mental images of fractured sanity and putrid, worm-eaten dreams. I Iike that he is worshiped/revered by various cults and madmen. Could use a a bit of a spell/grammar-check.

Go to Comment
Shivenhusk the Unliving Refuse
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Underground)
valadaar's comment on 2013-05-25 09:36 PM
Another great one found with unvoted subs! He would make a great antagonist anywhere undead can be found. Go to Comment
Treatise on Necromancy
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (World Wide)
Strolen's comment on 2012-09-25 01:23 PM
Normally I try and leave comments about spelling and structure alone but this is a rough draft. An excellent rough draft, but in dire need of another read through. I see the voice you are trying to get out and I love it, however if you read it out loud you will find many errors that make it difficult for me to get through.

I think you can up this .5 to a point with a quick rewrite to make things more clear! Go to Comment
Treatise on Necromancy
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (World Wide)
Scrasamax's comment on 2012-09-24 11:34 PM
I like the approach, but (and I do prostrate myself before you in apology) there are several typos and this sub needs to be spell checked. Go to Comment
Total Comments:
1603

Join Now!!




Fatal error: Call to undefined function top_menu() in /home/strolen/public_html/lockmor/application/views/citadel/vfooter.php on line 2