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The story meandered a bit. Nicely executed, but needs to be tightened up some. (Sorry no pun intended). You might want to take it to a fiction site and see what advice writers might give about it. Go to Comment
Knowing that if you were innocent you would willingly put the noose around your neck to prove it. Even though you know your innocent and you will not die (hopefully) would that not be a similar act of suicide?
So, would a priest or a Paladin or Holy Warrior of the church put on one? Knowing they were innocent, but by placing a rope of execution around their neck would that not be seen in bad taste? Just curious. Go to Comment
Edited some for content. Thanks for the compliments. I was worried about this one as it was difficult for me to bring to life.
Dragon Lord :
The item is very unique.
There could very well be other items of such history created. This was actually a dream I had which I fleshed out into this.
The other item in question (Pueola Demuet) is another such unique item whose origin can be linked back to the Gods. Which is being detailed as we speak.
The Gods have tried not to become involved with the mortals (in my world) on too many occasions but there are some items that have been created for special events, heros, kingdoms, and even by accident. See Pueola Demuet for a good example of an accidental item created by the Gods. Go to Comment
I see your reasoning behind that. I was under the outlook that by physically putting the noose on, regardless of it's intent was an act of self harm, even though they willingly know it will not hurt them it is still the act of it that should be seen in bad form.
I was thinking that one of the two listed archtypes would demand the use of the noose to prove any innocence yet also degree that by being judged and having it put on them would clear them of any guilt at doing so.
That having been said, nice backstory and a good explanation of the items' power - I quite like the idea that it operates as it does because the gods intervened and deemed that it be so.
Question: Is it unique or are there similar items elsewhere?
Also: Are there other unusual items created in much the same manner?
And: Might not other items have a variety of diverse powers, depending on which of the gods created them, what the god in question considers important, and why the item was created?
There could well be an entire subject (or at least a subset of the general Magical Items subject) to be explored here.
Good solid item - easily worth 4/5 in its' own right, but I'm upgrading it to 5/5 because it's got me thinking Go to Comment