I can see there being friction between the Gauntlets and the Order of the Magenta Rose, seeing as one is based around a pact between a long dead Queen and the King of the Elves, and the Gauntlet's protection of the King. Not to wander off into an anecdote, I had a similar conflict in my home game where in the Queen's Guard, the standing military of the Kingdom frequently came to odds, often violently with the Black Legion, the King's 'special forces' Go to Comment
I like these guys. They remind me of the knights around Henry the III (or one of those Shakespherian Historicals... but the one I mean is the one with Falstaff). Some will be strong and noble, others will be drinking buddies. Go to Comment
The Southern Knights were not specifically part of this set of posts, which is not yet done. I need to write up the King, the Queen, the two Princesses , and the Elven King. One to two plots to go with it. Hmmm, I am a bit behind.
A ceremonial detachment of soldiers, not entirely unlike the Winged Guards of the White Tree from Tolkien mythology. I especially like how the Order maintains it's duties despite the split between the Blue and Yellow, though there is some friction implied in the text. Go to Comment
Cool. I see these guys as being something like the fantasy equivalent of the Secret Service- pleasant, polite, and definitely not equipped for total war, but still more than tough enough to kick the posteriors off of any would-be assassin. I'd imagine that any sort of attack on the palace would be driven off in an elegantly brutal fashion (rapier through the chest, then violently kicked off the blade into another group of assailants). Go to Comment
The texts indicates we should remember that those who die in these tombs go to Merideth. Why would I remember that when this fact was not mentioned in the text until that point.
This is because all the Aviontix submissions are part of a coherient set. They all require each other to be properly used.
I do apologize, I thought Merideth had been linked and that this submission was spell corrected. I would of sworn on my sould I had spell corrected it (after I released the sub). But you are more than right, it needed it. That has been corrected. The link is also in place.
On the plus side, it is interesting that an avian race would have tombs in the ground - it is contrary to ones expectations and provides a reason for what otherwise would be bizarre traps.
The Aviontix are humans. They are not bird people. Their concept of spirit is that of things of the air, thus their gods are represented by birds. Like the Egyptians that had Bird Gods (among others) and Mammoth Tombs, the Aviontix build big and worshiped the Gods from the Air. Go to Comment
Actually not pyramids. Those have long since been broken into and down. More akin to those tombs found in The Valley of the Kings. In actually, they more resemble the Mayan tombs in type and function. Go to Comment
The texts indicates we should remember that those who die in these tombs go to Merideth. Why would I remember that when this fact was not mentioned in the text until that point. It would be better to me for the text to indicate that those who die here have their souls sent to Merideth, and explain why. I would not make the assumption that the reader will have read all of the Aviontix before reading this sub, and this appears to be a major fact.
I had to do some searching to find out what Merideth is - the first occurance should be linked to improve readability, or even adding the phrase ("the Aviontix City of the Dead"), etc.
On a minor note - there are a few typos here - Gauntlet,greath,etc, and Larger has an extra capitalization.
On the plus side, it is interesting that an avian race would have tombs in the ground - it is contrary to ones expectations and provides a reason for what otherwise would be bizarre traps. Go to Comment
This idea has that old MoonHunter feel to it- if you could call a setting piece utilitarian, that's what it would be.
I echo Kendra's remark about the gods' names simply being the names of birds. In fact, I like the whole vibe of it. I can imagine the heroes stalking through dark ruins in an ancient slot canyon, amidst pillars carved like ascending flocks of stylized birds, and approaching statues carved like bird-headed men.
So overall, I like it.