Likeable chaps. You get a good feeling of their 'otherness', so important for that exotic race you need to place somewhere. Much as I like them, I would still like to see some 'bad' to them, or something to blow the mind upon. Even with the stranger parts they are in perfect harmony. Still a very good minor race. Go to Comment
The fact that you mess with The Song and have some unpredictable effect, like sending them on a murderous rampage (or have them all drop asleep)?
Like they hang with Dragons?
Not everyone needs to live a depressing, horrid, life. You should leave that to Goths and WoD players.
It is all about the spin. They are aliens, or being enslaved by the song. Or they could be a human disease, slowling taking over "the land". People could be entranced by their song after long enough exposure... turning them from people into Singers. They could be innocent victims to be abused by people, echoing a native plight.
I normally leave the spin to others and what they want to use them for. Nobody should be telling anyone how they should use a sub, not even the author. Go to Comment
The edit function is being wonky right now:
Change the Intro to:
You can hear the song from miles away. The song is enchanting in a mild way. Even the plants sing this haunting tune all day. For this day, you dance a new dance, from your world to theirs. Go to Comment
I am sorry, I thought it was clear that the amount of damage was along the lines of two broadsword's worth of damage. Otherwise why would it be so wimpy against organic and instantly devastating against rocks/ trees?
No worries. I will think of an edit to make that clearer. Go to Comment
Limit them to one region or put into the whole world; make them a priestly sect or a secular organization, the basic idea stands unharmed, perfectly scalable. You get the plot hooks, you get the drama, and the undead become a tangible threat in this world. Worth using any day. Go to Comment
Yes, but there is still the question of their philosophy about 'The Shadow', or however they call it. Some core tenets can be spied from the post:
- The Shadow does not like to be looked upon. It hides, or it attacks, but it cannot tolerate a determined look.
- The Shadow lacks true patience. Its wickedness can be outlasted by a tenacious mind.
- One steady blow at the right moment saves battles between armies later.
I like to keep them a secular organization that was religious roots. That keeps them out of the power struggles that religions and knightly organizations (like this one was) are always involved with or drawn into. Go to Comment