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The Slorghia
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Water)
Cheka Man's comment on 2009-07-02 05:02 PM
The jellyfish from Hell. Go to Comment
The Slorghia
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Water)
valadaar's comment on 2009-07-06 07:36 PM
Wow - this is quite the critter! And an excellent 'fate worse then death.'




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The Slorghia
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Water)
VIM40's comment on 2010-07-08 09:48 AM
I loved it all, excellent background story and I can't wait to plug it into my game. Go to Comment
The Slorghia
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Water)
Tundra's comment on 2011-09-07 07:07 AM


Very well written and thought out!


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Charles Hurley
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Maggot's comment on 2009-02-01 08:03 AM
As a matter of fact, the Maoist Communist who terrorised large swathes of the world during the Cold War, were actually the inspiration for this NPC. I wanted to channel revolutionaries who weren't stereotypical ''good guys'', so to speak. Go to Comment
Charles Hurley
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Maggot's comment on 2009-02-05 01:26 AM
Would you like me to add those details? I could expand the Roleplaying notes section quite a bit if you think that doing that would result in a more well-rounded NPC. Go to Comment
Charles Hurley
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Maggot's comment on 2009-02-05 02:59 AM
Updated: I have taken what Scras said into consideration and have added additional details to give him more depth as a character. Go to Comment
Charles Hurley
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Scrasamax's comment on 2009-02-04 01:15 PM
Not bad, it was a long read that drug on in a few places, and some of the scenes seemed a bit gratuitous. I don't mean that the rape, immolation of a baby, and beheading of a baron was excessive, that is the sort of thing that people do, I just dont know that it provided anything more than some shock value. Charles is a well developed revolutionary/infiltraitor, but aside from that and his bloody past there is not actually that much we know about the man. Aside from his obvious fanaticism, and killer's ethos, he is somewhat one-sided. I would like to see behind the facade and know, what does he like to do besides killing, plotting assassination, and if he has no friends among the other guards, does he have any friends at all? does he socialize any? Drink? Wench? These are just some questions that I pondered when I was reading this submission. Go to Comment
Charles Hurley
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
EchoMirage's comment on 2009-03-02 02:28 PM
This sub is a consistent piece, well-written and usable.

I can see the picture, with Charles standing triumphant over a dead monarch's body, calling out to all the oppressed, say, during a grand festival, to kill their masters... the paranoia, violence, and change that occurs. Go to Comment
Charles Hurley
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Cheka Man's comment on 2009-01-30 12:48 PM
Thank you for writing this, I can so see him as a *real* carecter. The equivilent in your world of a Communist. Go to Comment
Charles Hurley
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Cheka Man's comment on 2009-03-01 12:24 PM
I think this entry will most likely win the Quest. Go to Comment
Charles Hurley
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2009-03-03 09:03 AM
My opinions of this is somewhere in between Echo and Scras. I would like have some more landmarks to follow. My major brownie point for this one is that it's quite usable. Go to Comment
Charles Hurley
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
valadaar's comment on 2014-08-27 10:15 AM
A very detailed treatment of the revolutionary. Go to Comment
Charles Hurley
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
klauston's comment on 2009-01-30 11:41 PM
A very nice history for this character. It is well written with lots of details about his youth and the trials of growing up. The single minded fanatacism to bring about equality among everyone is like Cheka Man says, a true communist. 5/5 Go to Comment
The Ragori
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Swamp)
Maggot's comment on 2009-01-27 11:41 PM
I've fixed that part about the female shamans. Is there anything else that needs to be sorted out? Thanks. Go to Comment
The Ragori
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Swamp)
EchoMirage's comment on 2009-01-26 05:11 AM
They could stand some editing - there are some contradictions in the writeup, such as the role of the female being unclear; as it is written it means all women would be shamen - which would make little sense.
I do like their communication, though.

It needs to be smoothed out still, spelling and content. Go to Comment
The Ragori
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Swamp)
Cheka Man's comment on 2009-01-22 01:07 PM
They remind me a bit of the Spartans. Go to Comment
The Ragori
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Swamp)
Murometz's comment on 2009-01-23 10:19 AM
I was trying to figure out as i was reading whether these were crocodilian lizard-men, or something else entirely, but then finally settled on them being eel-men, yes? Sugada being the clincher.

I like these folk, its a ready-made, detail-oriented swamp race, and i love anything tha lives in a swamp. My favorite terrain for adventure! Physiology (nice touch on the tentacles and egg-sex variances) and 'dwellings' (banyan tree, panels to Sugada, etc...) were hi-lites for me.

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Jimmy Stout
NPCs  (Minor)   (Domestic/ Craft)
Maggot's comment on 2009-01-12 11:13 AM
That's true, now that you mention it. I guess that as long as he has the good sense to stay away from the transcendants, he would have a very fulfilling career as the personal chef of some noble who would allow him to butcher and cook pretty much anything he wanted. And on the subject of Rephatia, have I ever mentioned that it's easily the most disturbing fictional culture that I've ever had the pleasure of reading about? Go to Comment
Jimmy Stout
NPCs  (Minor)   (Domestic/ Craft)
Maggot's comment on 2009-01-09 12:58 AM
You raised a valid point Muro and I amended that part. Only the bones are now given to the dogs. Go to Comment
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