Okey then. Like the backstory, like the power, and the thought of the humiliation such emotions might give. Like the fact that the demons can still choose to be cruel and evil. What don't I like about this item?
not too much. :)
One question I have though - how long will they think like a human? I mean, a simple 3-tap and BAM! They have emotions for eternity seems a bit too powerful to me. Perhaps the feelings wear off after a few days? weeks? months? years?
One thing I will bring up - mainly because others will if I don't - is that you should run your posts through a spellchecker before you submit it. The fact that you can spell Precarious and Lecherous, yet mispell plague and impossible suggests your posting was a bit rushed.
Anywho - nicely done all-round. I'm tossed between a 4 and a 5, but in the end, I give it
4/5. Go to Comment
Lol,yes,this was a bit rushed,Shadow. I started this an hour before lunch and had to wrap it up a little sooner than I'd have like,thanks to hunger pangs. I wish I had spell check,but I don't. Hopefully,I'll get it soon.
And thanks for raising that point about it being a little absurd,regarding the affected demons having human emotions forever. I modified it slightly on that score and hope you like it better now. Go to Comment
A character,eh? Yes,I would enjoy creating one. And yes,Echo,I'd be delighted to chat with you about this. I've been obssesed with demons and hlf-demons ever since I discovered the peasure of tuning in to the now defunct Buffy the Vampire Slayer. Go to Comment
I might note that it depends upon the female whether twins are born or not - it is the number of ova to be fertilized that determines the number of kids - if, by chance, two manage to mature at the same time, the potential for twins is given, etc.
The male must just shed enough spermatozoa to fertilize them, and this could indeed be the effect of the soup: potence, combined with desire, and a higher sperm count.
There should be a female counterpart for this, resulting in increased female fertility, to justify that 'twins' part... now, perhaps there should be several potions for the female to ward of diseases of the unborn, and ensure healthy development... I sense a thread coming up... Go to Comment