Lol,yes,this was a bit rushed,Shadow. I started this an hour before lunch and had to wrap it up a little sooner than I'd have like,thanks to hunger pangs. I wish I had spell check,but I don't. Hopefully,I'll get it soon.
And thanks for raising that point about it being a little absurd,regarding the affected demons having human emotions forever. I modified it slightly on that score and hope you like it better now. Go to Comment
A character,eh? Yes,I would enjoy creating one. And yes,Echo,I'd be delighted to chat with you about this. I've been obssesed with demons and hlf-demons ever since I discovered the peasure of tuning in to the now defunct Buffy the Vampire Slayer. Go to Comment
I might note that it depends upon the female whether twins are born or not - it is the number of ova to be fertilized that determines the number of kids - if, by chance, two manage to mature at the same time, the potential for twins is given, etc.
The male must just shed enough spermatozoa to fertilize them, and this could indeed be the effect of the soup: potence, combined with desire, and a higher sperm count.
There should be a female counterpart for this, resulting in increased female fertility, to justify that 'twins' part... now, perhaps there should be several potions for the female to ward of diseases of the unborn, and ensure healthy development... I sense a thread coming up... Go to Comment
Awesomely powerful, almost certainly too powerful - total control of such a powerful creature could make a man invincible (and yes, I have read the info on the Zaben in the Animals thread)
However, the cost of using it does at least temper it slightly since no sane man would dare use it too often - of course the insane pirate lord (bit of cliche I know) wouldn't hesitate to unleash hordes of ravenous shark-goblin hybrids on his enemies
Could be usable as the power behind some powerful NPC villain - but watch out when the PCs get hold of it (which they almost certainly will) - it's a well know fact that PCs are the most insanely dangerous creatures in ANY universe
My instinct is to give it a 3 (way too powerful) but the price it extracts upgrades it to a 4
It is a bit powerful, but I don't mind such things when power comes at a price. Here you've got a guy who creates a race of killing machines and his only way to control them was to trust a djinn. See how well that turned out.
I also like the idea that a simple musical instrument can control an unstoppable army with a few toots. Like if the Pied Piper had dire rats. Nice work. Go to Comment
Dragoon God again. I like the story and detail,although it seems to be missing something. Like if he has an ultimate destiny does everyone else? the villagers were destined for what, to fish? Thats the problem I find with the term 'destiny'. Why was only this guy destined for greatness, and if he rules an area the size of france, why is he afraid of some cultists from a swamp? Is it mostly forest? Add an explanation for destiny, an ultimately destined enemy(King maybe?),and a love intrest and I'm good. I must give credit though, you did a magnificent job, well done. Go to Comment
First off, dont diss the name (What kind of name is "CaptianPenguin?) And second off, I just personelly think that having an ultimate enemy spices up the whole adventure. It gives the character something to go for, and no I'm not saying that fighting to take back your homeland isnt something that would make you want to fight, but it adds to the drama. Plus who wouldnt want a girl at their heros side?
I'm not saying that having a love interest is neccesary, I guess I just like the idea that the hero has found some closure. In Vantu's case I think that if he had a girlfriend he would be able to look at the bright future ahead, not the troubled past he left behind.
As for you Cap'n, I'm sorry I misunderstood you. I thought you were being sarcastic when you put the quotes on my name. And to answer Echo's question, you've got a point. I guess I never thought of it that way. You made a valid point, but my opinion has'nt changed, I'm pretty stuborn, but dont take it to heart, I just like adding those characters.
Okay, I just read the entire story of Vantu(after many a break for I suck at reading)and the comments.I like the story alot and I have to side with the captan. Why does he need a girl? He's a fucking badass, not a panzy "oh hold me in your arms and never let go" hero/drama bullshit. Let me spell it out, HE KILLED HIS FATHER WTH A SMILE ON HIS FACE! why would he want some women slowing him down. And about making fun of the captans name i have one thing yo say; penguins rule. What the hell is a dragoon anyway? Peace. Go to Comment