Sweet Mary, this was long! But good. Maybe a little scrollage or some other formatting tricks would prove helpful, making this somewhat easier on the eyes.
Wow, this is bizarre! So much info to absorb, i will have come back with more comments after rereading it again (good lord!)
Beware! The Frogs Cometh!
Her voice inevitably trembles as she describes her repeated vision of a vile, repulsive being that terrorizes her dreams the moment sleep claims her. For the next few moments, the elders listen enthralled as she tells them in a hushed, frightened tone of the hideous giant frog that forces its vile, grotesquely large member into her until her very genitals begin to seep a blood that seems all too horribly real, causing her to awaken screaming and praying that someone will come to save her from the monster's vile embrace.
Good gods!! What have ye wrought, Magggot?!?! (slap a NC-17 rating on this or something, HAHAHA)
Its creepy, its disgusting, its squishy, its primal, and oh so amphibious! I approve. Go to Comment
I like it - Quite good, and well written. It does require a very specific world view in that the actions and behaviour of the gods are defined very specifically, and has a feel of a fantasy Bolshevik revolution. Go to Comment
I would clean up all the bolding at the end and save it just for the paragraph headers, otherwise this is a delight to read, sometihng that would have come slunking up from the depths of Lovecraftian mythos. Good work. Go to Comment
The Uroghi Lifeforms (Third Kingdom)
Wow! That's a big sub!
You have a significant amount of typos and other spelling/grammatical errors, but otherwise, these are amazing beings. I'd also suggest condensing it a little, but that's not a terribly big deal.
The opening narrative
The physical description Go to Comment