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The Shadow Scribe
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
Cheka Man's comment on 2007-12-16 01:24 PM
5/5...but ewwwwwwwww. Go to Comment
The Shadow Scribe
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2007-12-17 07:00 AM
This on talks to me Maggot. Not in the real sense, but as a character I will use as soon as I have a chance. It is long yessir, and those pharagraphs can be a hard read on my screen yessir. But I wouldn't miss it! Great job! Go to Comment
The Shadow Scribe
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2007-12-17 09:15 AM
By the way, read this when it was in work and was looking forward to the official release. Go to Comment
The Shadow Scribe
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
Murometz's comment on 2007-05-31 09:27 PM
holy moly Maggot! What a visual!

finish it, finish it! Its revolting, but fascinating!!! Go to Comment
The Shadow Scribe
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
Murometz's comment on 2007-06-01 03:41 PM
we are looking for Maggot to finish this. I love this sicko!! :D

(I certainly wouldnt hesitate to use him. Nice jolt for my jaded PCs!)

DONT TONE DOWN ANYTHING! Go to Comment
The Shadow Scribe
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
Murometz's comment on 2007-12-23 11:48 AM
Phew. The Gruesome Appearence returns triumphant! :)

I loved this in its larval stage, and I love it now. It /is/ to echo Scras, a bit too long, me'thinks, but the 'concept' of the tortured, god-infused Scribe is good one! I enjoy greatly. Go to Comment
The Shadow Scribe
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
chilled's comment on 2012-06-10 08:12 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Shadow Scribe
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
Wulfhere's comment on 2007-04-04 01:00 PM
This is one of the more unpleasant contributions that the site has seen. While I don't shy away from controversial, gruesome subs, you might want to tone him down a touch, as there are some folks who would find this offensive and most of us would hesitate to use such a creature in our games. Go to Comment
The Shadow Scribe
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
sasa1's comment on 2007-04-19 11:35 AM
Hmmm..I think the Grey scribe is an interesting character. The juxtaposition of the gruesome details of his appearance with the mention of a practicality is a good touch. One can imagine the maggots eating at him to be apt metaphors for the emotions eating away at his soul. The reminder of the Scribe's grovelling'( can I assume that?), menial nature in the last paragraph sums up the character well. Overall seems an excellent candidate for a creature that would alternate between self-deceptive loyalty and betrayal. Not unduly offensive in my opinion... Go to Comment
The Order Of The Eagles
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Regional)
manfred's comment on 2007-10-27 01:09 PM
Once again, a spellcheck and another reading before posting would be nice. Once again, the descriptions are evocative, and a heap of setting/background details are imparted, which is kind of likeable.

But on the whole, I'm sorry to say, it fails to impress me, and it grew tiresome as the many paragraphs kept coming. It feels like more of the same story of the same setting with a slightly different window dressing... once again, sorry, but that's how it felt to me.

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A question: how did the other side, the Krakens, react? It appears like they didn't do much to oppose this threat. They would certainly take measures to protect their interests. In any case, piracy is far from a safe endeavor. How does the Order react to failures, and their ships being chased on the sea by the powerful Kraken's fleet? (Btw, that the Shogun denied any responsibility for a group with the same power base as the Company, acting basically in the Company's interest, sounds very suspicious as well.)

In short, I see this big effect on the one side, but no impact on the other side. There has to be a reaction on the action. Go to Comment
The Order Of The Eagles
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Regional)
Scrasamax's comment on 2007-10-27 11:25 PM
I second Manfred's comments and add with the spell check to do a read through edit, spellcheck doesnt know that ears should be years, to quote one example. The sub is a bit long and could be shortened some, but otherwise not too bad. Go to Comment
The Order Of The Eagles
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Regional)
Cheka Man's comment on 2007-10-27 09:03 AM
A holy equvilent of Stalin's NKVD. 5/5 Go to Comment
The Order Of The Eagles
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Regional)
valadaar's comment on 2007-10-29 11:03 AM
Maggot - I appreciate the sheer effort in producing this sub, but I have little to add to what has already been said. Go to Comment
Bogonu
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Swamp)
MoonHunter's comment on 2008-01-22 05:01 PM
I believe the only appropriate response is ...

"woah"

While it could use some more formatting, such as "chapter headings" to break it up and be easier to read, it is worth the slogging to get through it. Go to Comment
Bogonu
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Swamp)
Scrasamax's comment on 2007-10-08 01:28 AM
I don't know what kind of crack you are smoking but holy god it must be some awesome stuff! Underneath this tale of cannibalism and bestiality is a hell of a mythos!!! Go to Comment
Bogonu
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Swamp)
Cheka Man's comment on 2007-10-05 09:54 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
Bogonu
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Swamp)
Murometz's comment on 2007-10-05 07:31 PM
Sweet Mary, this was long! But good. Maybe a little scrollage or some other formatting tricks would prove helpful, making this somewhat easier on the eyes.

Wow, this is bizarre! So much info to absorb, i will have come back with more comments after rereading it again (good lord!)

Beware! The Frogs Cometh!

Her voice inevitably trembles as she describes her repeated vision of a vile, repulsive being that terrorizes her dreams the moment sleep claims her. For the next few moments, the elders listen enthralled as she tells them in a hushed, frightened tone of the hideous giant frog that forces its vile, grotesquely large member into her until her very genitals begin to seep a blood that seems all too horribly real, causing her to awaken screaming and praying that someone will come to save her from the monster's vile embrace.

Good gods!! What have ye wrought, Magggot?!?! (slap a NC-17 rating on this or something, HAHAHA)

Its creepy, its disgusting, its squishy, its primal, and oh so amphibious! I approve. Go to Comment
Bogonu
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Swamp)
Stomphoof's comment on 2007-10-05 08:22 AM
Very neat creation myth/story. Go to Comment
Bogonu
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Swamp)
Railus's comment on 2007-10-08 04:28 PM
Creepy. Just creepy. Go to Comment
Temple Of Inaha
Locations  (World)   (Water)
Maggot's comment on 2007-09-16 05:10 AM
I don't how it happened, but this is not supposed to be part of the on-going quest. Go to Comment
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