Maggot - I think you need to look at the reception super-long subs seem to get here. I keep being reminded of that when I overbuild something.
I did not get the Iron Man reference (having not seen the movie), but I found the armor is simply too much. Being able to fire continuously for five hours???? Five minutes would be extreme in a roughly man-sized object.
15 hours flight time from ethenol?
I think this is a case where too much detail is provided. Magical jet packs with a 15-hour duration seems 'okay' to me, but when you mix in real-world terms like ethanol, it does not jive.
In short, it seems vastly too powerful for the drawback, which can be avoided simply by not using it often. And for that matter, many societies could find individuals more then willing to accept the penalties for becoming, for a short will, a god of destruction. Go to Comment
Not exactly. It was a random, unintended effect of casting a spell that was somewhat beyond the capability of the amethyst stones that he had. In order to get all the energy it needed, the spell leached away some of his own life energy. Hence the grey hide and rotting odour. The story has been updated to reflect this fact. Go to Comment
I see a few spelling errors, Sgaron, calm in place of claim, and that sort. Might need to spell check it again. I have a question, why did Sagron turn deathly in pallor and gain a rotten stench? Is he an undead kraken, or what? Go to Comment
Some of the paragraphs are overly long and chunky, and might want to check on the bold tags in the bottom of the submission. I like the reverence for the giant lobsters, and I can see a Clash of the Titans-esque scene between a hunting kraken and one of these beasts. Go to Comment