Some of the paragraphs are overly long and chunky, and might want to check on the bold tags in the bottom of the submission. I like the reverence for the giant lobsters, and I can see a Clash of the Titans-esque scene between a hunting kraken and one of these beasts. Go to Comment
Heh, this worked out nicely. I admit I was a bit worried about how you were going to keep it from utterly annihilating humanity, but you seem to have worked out a way around that. I still think it would make a nice doomsday plot.
Also, how about breaking it into smaller paragraphs? It is kinda hard to read as is. But, I like it. Go to Comment