he's alright, i guess I mean I can see him being run into during a roleplay scene or even being used to help fight someone I would like to see him being used first, before i can decide really Go to Comment
First of all, the Everlasting Canteen is an invitation to munchkinism- like Echo said, just fill it with healing potion, and BAM, just like that, you're invincible.
Gem of Enhancement is boring, leave it out.
I thought maybe the background would be interesting, and it was, up until the part where he began to wander around and "fight for a living".
All new and developing character-makers out there- WANDERING THE WORLD IS NOT AN INTERESTING THING FOR THE CHARACTER TO DO, REGARDLESS OF CIRCUMSTANCES!
By the way, is English your first language? Just for reference.
Loki... think about your posts before you post them. If it has a cliche built into its existance... little alarms should be going of in your head warning you of potential danger....
Not everyone needs to see their parent(s) murdered before their eyes. Sigh.
First how old was he? Do we have another toddler running down the road? Was he six? Why wasn't he adopted by someone? (or at least scooped up by monks)? Was he 12 or 13? No relatives? Nobody in the community noticed?
In ten years what has happened? Where did he learn to fight? Who apprenticed him into the bounty hunting? How did he get into this gig?
As for being a waunderer. It depends on the purpose for waundering. If a character does not have a goal or reason for its waundering, it should have an explanation on why the character is broken and waundering. Go to Comment
Well Cap'n, I beg to differ. My character Tython is known as The Wanderer and he got a 4/5. I think he deserves a 3/5, he did much better then me when I started, and deserves credit. Loki, you should tell more about his travels and adventures though, dont be afraid to be descriptive. Go to Comment
Dude, belive me, you want to put in spaces. It looks really unorganized when you dont, so be sure to edit. Also, if he wants to die, why would he want to learn to fight well?
Why waste all those years when he could of gotten killed in a bar fight? Why does he drink beer all of a sudden?
His master never allowed it, so wouldnt he of toaght him not to drink alcohol? Still too many questions, not enough answers. Go to Comment
"He knew that no one would kill a mere child for no reason so instead of commiting suicide or hiring a someone to kill him, he would merely take part in the most dangerous of professions."
"Being the young boy he was, he was stupid enough to think this was the only option."
"Master Jin thought since the boy would most likely end up in a bar fight, he would learn of his gift then."
I think i answered all your questions dragoon god. I guess since it was so cluttered, it was hard to pick these little tidbits up. I'll be sre to edit in spaces later, since I gotta go again. Go to Comment
Wow who knew I could stretch such a strange idea so far? I'm actually still coming up with ideas to throw in but im afraid of over doing it. Oh I've updated with spaces this time. :) Do you think posting anymore would be over doing one character? Go to Comment
Khor are a monsterous and violent race. Within five years of being born, they grow to about half human size and are very, very inteligent. As they get older, they get larger... unfortunately they become less intelligent. After their adolecesence (about seven years), they grow to human size and are of a low human intelligence. As they age, they grow larger, slower, and stupider. Most of them end their lives 3 to 4 meters in height. Khor have been reported upto 10 meters tall, though those elder giant Khor do little but hit anything that disturbs them.
As they age they get larger, they don't seem to ever die of natural causes.