Concept: Full Point - Based on: "Is this a good and/or interesting idea?" Yes. An interesting take, a very usable idea.
Craft: Full Point - Based on: "Did I find the work free of errors and written with a reasonable level of technical proficiency?" Yes. I spotted a single typo, but it's otherwise pretty tightly written.
Style: Full Point - Based on: "Did the work give a good sense of the material, a 'flavor,' so to speak?" Yes. The piece gives a good sense of not only the character, but the world which spawned him.
Substance: Full Point - Based on: "As a GM or Player, Can I take what's presented and run with it?" Yes. With some name changes to fit the setting, I could see this easily fitting into an Everway tale, a wonderful legend to set the stage for an interesting adventure.
Extra Mile: Full Point. Based on: "Did the work go above and beyond in one or more of the above criteria, and/or did this piece somehow 'speak' to me in a way which is not accounted for by the four criteria?" Yes. It's a great piece which was clearly crafted with both care and imagination. It speaks to me.
5.0/5.0, and an HoH