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Valeras the Forgotten, Lord of Vengeance
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Religious)
Kassil's comment on 2006-08-30 03:55 PM
Comments are welcome, folks. He just sprang from my mind today, and I'm sure he could use some work. Go to Comment
Valeras the Forgotten, Lord of Vengeance
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Religious)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2006-08-31 07:04 AM
Mmm, what a friendly fellow this Valeras is. Everything seems in order here: Horrid mutations, flesh-ravaging fury and vengeance against those nasty close-minded gods who banished one of their own because they were different. I could like to see the rest of the gods fleshed out, actually. I'd especially enjoy writing up a god who fell victim to Valeras's potent toxins. :) Go to Comment
Valeras the Forgotten, Lord of Vengeance
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Religious)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-08-30 10:44 PM
All hail the poisonous lord, who dwells in his own vitriol. Hallowed is he who corrupted war into slaughter, and drove brother to feast upon brother. Wicked evil. Go to Comment
Valeras the Forgotten, Lord of Vengeance
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Religious)
Cheka Man's comment on 2006-08-30 05:38 PM
Hidously nasty but I like him. 5/5 Go to Comment
Valeras the Forgotten, Lord of Vengeance
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Religious)
Pariah's comment on 2006-08-31 11:19 PM
It all makes sense now, that senseless violence I mean. Go to Comment
Valeras the Forgotten, Lord of Vengeance
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Religious)
Murometz's comment on 2006-08-31 11:20 AM
some great imagery Kassil. Kudos! Go to Comment
Valeras the Forgotten, Lord of Vengeance
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Religious)
valadaar's comment on 2006-08-31 11:01 AM
Jeesh, the feedback others make to put a little more detail into the Bolt of Twilight has created a monster! :)

Seriously, when I started to read the description, I was wondering why people ever worship these things but that became pretty clear early on. This is an excellent alternative to the generic evil gods of death.

And now I'm scared of Scrasamax... :) Go to Comment
Bolt of Twilight
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Villanous)
CaptainPenguin's comment on 2006-08-29 10:58 PM
The mighty Kassil awakes!

There are only two things that I dislike about this item... One, it is a sort of "evil for evil's sake" item, which I can live with, the other, that it is associated with "lone assassins", and Cthulhu knows we don't need any more of THOSE.
But in any case... It's good!

Nice comeback post, Kas! Go to Comment
Bolt of Twilight
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Villanous)
CaptainPenguin's comment on 2006-08-29 11:48 PM
Well, that's exactly what I was saying, you just phrased it differently... The "evil for evil's sake" quality of the weapon. Go to Comment
Bolt of Twilight
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Villanous)
Kassil's comment on 2006-08-30 05:03 AM
Updated: Taking into account the overdone evil-for-the-sake-of-evil and lone-assassin comments... Go to Comment
Bolt of Twilight
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Villanous)
Kassil's comment on 2006-08-30 05:11 AM
I adjusted it so the bolt has a purpose (reviving the dead god; only corrupted souls can be used to fuel his rebirth) and to remove the 'lone gunman' effect by making the priesthood responsible - for a reason that fits them - they want their master revived, his power restored, and presumably a horrible vengeance exacted upon whoever or whatever caused him to vanish in the first place. Go to Comment
Bolt of Twilight
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Villanous)
Kassil's comment on 2006-08-30 03:57 PM
Updated: Minor adjustment - changed a couple words to read better. Go to Comment
Bolt of Twilight
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Villanous)
MoonHunter's comment on 2006-08-30 12:27 PM
Nicely done. It grants a certain degree of explanation as to why certain groups and things exist. Perhaps the various members of these groups were nicked by the bolt by the creating member. Go to Comment
Bolt of Twilight
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Villanous)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-08-30 12:12 AM
The thing that stands out above was the use of the 'lone assassin'. It makes me think of that movie Arlington Road where it summed up the theory of the Lone Person being the most publicly favored since once the person is arrested or killed, their evil is ended. No one wants to think that the assassin was really just a single person in a group that could be much, much larger. Go to Comment
Bolt of Twilight
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Villanous)
Cheka Man's comment on 2006-08-30 12:53 PM
5/5 A very realestic weapon. Go to Comment
Bolt of Twilight
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Villanous)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2006-08-29 11:18 PM
I semi agree with CP here... the item itself is great. It is well thought out and has a perfect reason to exist. However the reason for reasons sake of being created to repeat the cycle of evil, while a perfect reason, is old and been done and nto really realistic anymore. But again as CP said, this is good. The way it is brought forth makes this that much better. A normal 3.0 out of me came to a 4.0 due to the unique quality of the tie in with the punishment of the assassin and the actual effect of the item. Kudos. Go to Comment
Bolt of Twilight
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Villanous)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2006-08-30 11:15 AM
Reading what Iw rote I realize that now. I know it says I replied at 7pm but it was closer to 1am and I was not really with it. Go to Comment
Bolt of Twilight
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Murometz's comment on 2006-08-30 12:28 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Bolt of Twilight
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Villanous)
valadaar's comment on 2006-08-30 11:00 AM
Cool item - excellent backstory.

The fact that it is a unique item and is currently in a rather unobtainable situation mitigates it's rather powerful effect.

Sending the PC's on a quest to regain the 'holy relic' from the dragon would be a good lesson for the PC's to do their research first... Go to Comment
Burnbee
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Tundra/ Arctic)
Kassil's comment on 2006-03-08 05:54 PM
Updated: Added the last pieces, but still not sure about the submission. Suggestions quite welcome. Go to Comment
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