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puppy dog tail's suit
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EchoMirage's comment on 2004-09-27 02:10 AM
Hey, this is positively cute! And can be lots of fun - especially the escape clause is great.

btw., didn't Squingle think about moving far, far away and changing his name into something like Max Power the Unfathomable? Just nitpicking... :D Go to Comment
puppy dog tail's suit
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Jak_O_Lantern_King's comment on 2004-09-27 10:47 PM
Ah echo, but if he had moved and given himself such a name, everyone would think he was over-compensating. I jest, but seriously, some people are forever cursed to be outcasts. Go to Comment
Timtom Flyboy Butterfoot's Flying Machine
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CaptainPenguin's comment on 2004-08-16 05:28 PM
"I've got a flying machine!"
A very interesting way of presenting a flying machine, though not the most original of bases to work with ({sarcasm}Gnomish flying machine. Gee. That's never been done before has it?!{/sarcasm})
The backstory is hilarious!

3/5. Go to Comment
Timtom Flyboy Butterfoot's Flying Machine
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MoonHunter's comment on 2004-08-17 12:31 AM
I am admused. One thumb and a tail up. Go to Comment
Timtom Flyboy Butterfoot's Flying Machine
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Pieh's comment on 2010-11-22 07:12 AM


Holy carp! This is the best flying machines ever! Beer-Jets, Ahoy! The letter was a great intro. I was reading, wondering what a gnome opening up a store/bat could have to do with a flying machine, then the ever-full mug, then the flying ever-full mug, and the transition from mug to machine was so gnomishly appropriate that I had to read it twice. This is great stuff!


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Timtom Flyboy Butterfoot's Flying Machine
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Scrasamax's comment on 2004-08-16 06:35 PM
Wheeeeeeeeeeee! I've got a flying machine. Those rascally gnomes.

This could be priceless if the flying machine flew about on jets of beer instead of water.

I would like to see more machines and contraptions built by someone other than a gnome. Very nice introduction with the outraged letter. Gotta give a point for that, and a point for making me smile with a gnomish invention.

4/5 Go to Comment
Timtom Flyboy Butterfoot's Flying Machine
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Cheka Man's comment on 2006-12-12 12:03 PM
A cliche but I love the backstory. Go to Comment
Timtom Flyboy Butterfoot's Flying Machine
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Jak_O_Lantern_King's comment on 2004-08-16 11:03 PM
heehee beer, yeah we were toying with the idea, but ruled it out simply for game mechanics, though the shoulder mounted oil spewing flamethrow was intriguing... bit overpowering ;P

-Jak Go to Comment
Timtom Flyboy Butterfoot's Flying Machine
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Sentinel's comment on 2004-09-04 12:06 PM
I love it, nothing I would ever thought of, very good

5/5 Go to Comment
Timtom Flyboy Butterfoot's Flying Machine
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Murometz's comment on 2006-06-22 07:23 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Timtom Flyboy Butterfoot's Flying Machine
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Murometz's comment on 2007-01-04 11:21 PM
I will simply copy/paste what Scras said.

Wheeeeeeeeeeee! I've got a flying machine Go to Comment
Timtom Flyboy Butterfoot's Flying Machine
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valadaar's comment on 2007-01-05 10:23 AM
This conjures up a great image! Good job!

This would be popular in drought-hit regions!
Bottle rockets revenge! Go to Comment
Timtom Flyboy Butterfoot's Flying Machine
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valadaar's comment on 2007-08-10 08:12 AM
I still find this one amusing.... Go to Comment
Timtom Flyboy Butterfoot's Flying Machine
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RGTraynor's comment on 2011-05-28 05:51 AM


Nice start, good flavor text, but too much we don't know.  What's its duration?  How fast can it go?  (Heck, how do you steer the thing?)  How many times a day can it be used?  Exactly how sturdy is that wagon?


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Glil Battery
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CaptainPenguin's comment on 2004-08-04 12:15 AM
It would be a 4 but there are some little language errors and I'm jumping on that. Sorry, buddy. But still, good item.

3/5. Go to Comment
Glil Battery
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Pirate Penguin's comment on 2004-08-04 10:00 PM
I think I've seen something in a movie lke this before... or maybe not, anyway good job.

4/5 Go to Comment
Glil Battery
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MoonHunter's comment on 2004-08-05 03:54 AM
If such a plant existed in an ecology, eventually animals would evolve to eat such fruit (or eat them so they can absorb the cahrge). Thus a plethora of electrically charged critters or electrically insulated critters would be natural extension of its existance. Go to Comment
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Shadoweagle's comment on 2004-08-04 10:18 PM
So it basically shocks one who touches it?

So the mechanics behind it are, perhaps, the fruit absorbs energy from the sun and water and nutrients and so forth, and it concentrates the energy within the seed. the flesh and skin of the fruit contains the seed so it doesnt discharge and lose energy, but once the seed comes into contact with something foreign, it releases all its concentrated energy into it. I can see the smaller, younger fruits not bieng as 'tingly' tasting as the larger ones, and with a smaller discharge since it hasnt had as much time to grow and absorb energy.

"The Huge rogue closed in on the humble peasant, his chainmail gleaming in the sun as a club raised to smite the weak man. The man, trembling in fear, pulled out the first thing in his small pouch for self defence. At the sight of a juicy piece of fruit, the large man laughed, and the peasant flung it at him. The soft fruit exploded all over the mans armour, not even slowing him down. But the thiefs sneer turned into a frown at the sound of faint 'crackling'. The pit of the fruit came into contact with the steel of the mans mail, and discharged its energy, running bolts of electricity through the mans torso. The rogue grunted in pain, then keeled over, falling to the ground, paralysed and unconscious."

I likes :) 4/5 Go to Comment
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Iain's comment on 2006-05-16 11:25 AM
Odd enough that it deserves to be seen. Go to Comment
Glil Battery
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Nobody's comment on 2006-12-13 08:55 AM
I think that you need to answer some of the basic questions.
Sight, sound, smell, touch, taste. Design, purpose, adaptation.

Let me ask you a series of questions to consider.

Sight- What does it look like. Not just the fruit, but the entire tree.

Sound- Espescially for an electrical tree, are there any unique sounds that it makes.

Smell- While smell is usually related to flowers, anything can have a unique smell. Does this one?

Touch- What kind of bark does the tree have, smooth or rough. Does the fruit have little hairs on them like a peach, or maybe the fruit has a hard outer layer like a mango.

Taste- What does the fruit taste like. Sweet, sour, bitter, salty...what? If it is like a battery, then it would be highly acidic, and therefore sour, but the electrical charge might be held differently.

Design- What makes the tree work. When and where does the electrical charge build up in the tree or fruit? Does it need an unusual soil to do so? What about climate, and conditions?

Purpose- The purpose of every species is survival, and the breeding of the species. A single fruit requires huge amount of recources for a tree to produce all the sugar in them. Those fruits are usually grown so that animals will eat the fruits and carry off the seeds to other locations to spread. Why would an electrical charge help the tree produce other offspring? At the very least, why wouldn't an electrical charge hurt.

Adaptation- Bark is an adaptation to the surrounding conditions. Bugs and animals that are harmful to a tree must be stopped. Every tree has defenses against it's environment. Certainly an electrical charge might be that, but then, larger critters would never eat it.


All in all, I want to see this submission thought out. If you can't explain why a tree like this might form, then I don't think it has been thought out enough.

2.0- Idea's there, needs some work. Go to Comment
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