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The Keerg
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EchoMirage's comment on 2009-03-27 04:08 AM
Can't say I like it. Sketchy, not too well described (how can they have organs like humans when they are an invertebrate tentacled ball?). No description of culture, social order, tech...

This needs a lot of work on your part. Go to Comment
The Keerg
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Dozus's comment on 2014-02-04 05:56 AM
It's not awful - as is, it's a sort of funny-looking floaty thing that looks monstrous but isn't. More details to set it apart would be nice. And while the "We're still learning more about them" bits might be good for the game setting they're put it, as a GM/writer I'd prefer to know more about them. Go to Comment
The Keerg
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valadaar's comment on 2013-12-11 10:07 AM
It can stand as it is - though it could use elaboration.

A decent starting point, though not stellar. Go to Comment
The Dark Crusaders
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CaptainPenguin's comment on 2008-11-21 05:53 PM
Interesting, interesting. It has a lot of potential, and I like the bizarre description of the creatures themselves and their justifications for their actions. However, it reads very awkwardly and some parts are confusing. Also, why do they call themselves the "Dark Crusaders"? Do they culturally associate darkness with good or law or whatever? Go to Comment
The Dark Crusaders
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Maggot's comment on 2008-12-03 08:43 AM
I actually like this sub quite a bit. It's bizzare and haunting on so many levels. Go to Comment
The Dark Crusaders
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Murometz's comment on 2008-11-21 09:46 PM
Well, pretty much what Cap said. There are some very interesting concepts in here and I like the format you used, but yes, some parts are somwehat confusing. Go to Comment
The Dark Crusaders
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Murometz's comment on 2008-12-03 04:26 PM
To me, not so much haunting, but definitely bizarre! (in a good way)

The Keerg are a pretty fascinating species. Lots of interesting details. I think maybe you could have shortened this a bit. While the 2 seperate primers, one for fantasy and one for guns/ships game is kinda cool, from an aesthetic standpoint, I'd squeeze that into a more general primer, allowing people to populate their distinctive worlds with these beings, by adapting them as they see fit.

After rereading this though, I do find that I like it better the second time around. Lots of good work put in here. Good job, hrofgar.

Interesting mythology for sure! Go to Comment
The Dark Crusaders
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Murometz's comment on 2008-12-03 04:28 PM
updated vote. Go to Comment
The Dark Crusaders
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Hrofgar's comment on 2008-11-22 04:41 PM
Updated: Added the explanation for the name. I will get to the unclear parts when I have the chance Go to Comment
The Dark Crusaders
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Hrofgar's comment on 2008-12-01 05:53 PM
Updated: Cleared up a few things and added some stuff that I realized I had forgotten. Go to Comment
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