The bear in the backpack is a bit strange, but then so is the whole character. Strangeness really seems to be his strong point, actually. He's an ambulatory boulder of muscle and goodwill with the brains of an addled child who just so happens to be the lord of a town. He can be predictably unpredictable. Go to Comment
Reminds me of Haggar the Horrible. I like this character. The bear in the backpack is a bit strange, but I am intrigued by the idea (what else can I put in this backpack?). Go to Comment
A new view on Orcs (not a new take, as they are traditional orcs with a different culture).
Edit note: if you could put an extra line between the paragraphs. It would make the submission easier to read.
In terms of content, I like it.
Carnivore mounts, okay.. fantasy trope.. I can deal with that.
I just have one issue.. metal forging and nomadic peoples. Even the West African metal workers were semi-nomadic, as having a forge and proper anvil requires a great deal of space/ weight/ and installation investment. Even the West African Metal Worlkers, who did beautiful work, tended to work small because of their equipment.
So you will need to flesh this out or find some way for them to move a true forge. (It is a large sled that they shlep with a team of these creaures?) Perhaps their magic users are metal smiths (harkening back to West Africans), thus using magic to make things with less material gear. Instead of the banging of a hammer, the sound of an odd vibration, like a didgeridoo, comes from the magi as he forges the Great War SwordGo to Comment
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A nice take on Amazonian Orcs, and gives a great feel for their culture for those new to using Orcs in their campaign, and can make a nice resource to flesh out the orcish background of a half-orc char. Go to Comment
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Updated: Moon pointed out a bit of a problem related to how they manage to make metal goods and yet are nomadic. I have fixed the problem. Go to Comment
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You have kept the Medusa set of subs good. Blind Mary is nicely detailed and usable. I could see a group traveling along, they get attacked by bandits. Once they finally fight off the bandits they stumble wearily toward the nearby town. But, once they get there, they are faced with a foul beast! The ensuing role-playing would hopefully end in the parties comprehension that the "horrible beastie" is actually a helper. Or something like that. Anyway, it was good. Go to Comment
Not bad. I admit that I finished reading the sub wanting more to it. Whatever happened between her and Andrew? And the 3 part staff is great that it has some blood in it. Go to Comment
I try to leave my subs with room to grow in whatever direction anyone using it wants, so it's up to you what happened between her and Andrew really. Also, I'm glad you like the staff. I was a little unsure with that part, so it's good to hear. Go to Comment
It makes more sense when you read Twin Goddesses of the Medusa, which the word Amarane links to. In my take on Medusa, It's their gaze that turns them to stone, not their face. Go to Comment
At first they were skeptical in the extreme, but once she started healing people and teaching them to defend themselves they warmed up to her. Neighboring towns however know only that a serpent haired woman is training the peasants in the arts of combat. As is to be expected, tension is rising. They haven't yet faced the village with this, so it's mostly superstition and fear run rampant. Go to Comment
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