A solid minotaur spartacus, well done. Go to Comment

Echo loves the bit about the helmet, and the slave-speak, and all of Kharz. The bit about the lines in his face is excellent.

(*smile* I once had a rebellious slave minotaur in one of my games. The moment he snapped, an overseer was yelling at him and whipping while he carried a huge building block. Kamargh, for that was his name, simply dropped the block and walked away) Go to Comment

Spartacus as a minotaur. Nice. Go to Comment

At last another freedom fighter doth join our ranks, hes no terrorist, ok he harbours an intense dislike towards humans but otherwise he's great. Go to Comment

A cool take on this! Nicely done! Go to Comment

Oh, yes. I really like this one.

Favourite bits:

Helmet stamped flat and worn as an amulet - Damn, wish I coulda come up with that.. That is so good!

Crude slave language lacking small talk - Nice, very nice..

Beating someone to death with a wheelbarrow - Imaginative, although slightly worrying...

Good job!

/David Go to Comment

Oward to freedom. Go to Comment

It really fleshes out the "I rolled a 4, I hate Orcs" concept that happens in many games. Good post that shows that even a typical history can have some flair. Go to Comment

Its well written, but there is little to make me want to use her in a game. The whole killed my whole family now I hate all orcs is a little overdone. Too many quick PC backgrounds can be boiled down to the same idea. Also, you aluded to 'what she has become'. I think she needs to become something worse to be more interesting. Go to Comment

She exists mostly to show just that even an otherwise bland character (In D&D terms, a level 1 ranger, weaponsmithing skill, favored enemy orcs) can be interesting if just fleshed out. Take from it what you will. Go to Comment

Updated: Expanded on a couple of minor points, and tried to come up with a more interesting sounding summary. Go to Comment

Its a nice piece to read. Go to Comment

Yeah, I'm with Strolen.  Sure, it's a stereotype - and how many stereotypes do we routinely employ, anyway? - but this EXPLAINS the stereotype.  Too many people are far too ready to turn their noses up at subs that don't hit minimum (but undefined) levels of Quirky!, Flashy! or Unique!

Beyond which, c'mon, folks ... what's the psychology behind an adventurer, anyway?  Who goes off from living nice, safe, quiet lives to run off and deal with horrors on a regular basis, sleep on the ground in haunted ruins and pretty much be assured of an early, violent death unless you have at least a little crazy in you?

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The name drew me in, and while Infernal Cities are about as common as trailer parks, this one seems to stand out. I can get a feel for the place, I can almost imagine the way it would smell, a sort of hot greasy stink with an undertone of wet rot. Very nicely done Grey. Go to Comment

I like the idea of a haven of evil nonchalantly existing in the mortal realm; it makes for a good place for a villain to hide, for example.
What I'd like to see added is a history of this place - how it came to be. Go to Comment

Very good. A villian could use his or her own evilness as money. Go to Comment

Er, where is this city? It seems like it is in hell, and not in the normal world.. Go to Comment

Updated: Fixed some spelling errors. A history is in the works. Go to Comment

Forgot to vote. Go to Comment

What EchoMirage said. Go to Comment