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Hak the Gnoll
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
Cheka Man's comment on 2010-01-12 08:01 PM
I like his backstory. Go to Comment
Hak the Gnoll
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
Dozus's comment on 2010-01-13 12:57 PM
Like Cheka, I'm a sucker for backstories, especially amusing ones. Hak seems like a decent enough fellow, for a crazed gnoll merc.

And although I can't help but wonder why he can't find a decent enough blacksmith to take off his chains, they do help with the imagery. Go to Comment
Hak the Gnoll
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-01-14 06:30 PM
When I started reading this I was unimpressed, another violent demi-human thug with a single syllable name and another mage succumbing to the hubris of his own powers...4 years old know these troupes.

But for some reason, and perhaps I have the intellect of a 4 year old, I was completely charmed by the end of the read. I think it was the quiet moment you described in which the one dimensional character has to look around and find some motivation. You gave things just enough depth to make this a fun and usable NPCs that is accessable enough to be placed in any campaign. I like it. Go to Comment
Hak the Gnoll
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valadaar's comment on 2010-01-16 06:13 PM
A good way to flesh out an otherwise generic NPC. I like it!
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Hak the Gnoll
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Redgre's comment on 2010-01-17 07:08 PM
Hak must be a fairly honourable fellow to feel such a debt to his now departed master or that must've been quite the spell. I agree with the previous comments as well. Go to Comment
Hak the Gnoll
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Nafar's comment on 2010-04-28 01:48 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Ancient Empire of Karryk-Mos
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Country/ State)
manfred's comment on 2009-09-12 07:16 PM
Fun with kobolds! And a major location to up their potential too. Me likey. Go to Comment
The Ancient Empire of Karryk-Mos
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Pieh's comment on 2009-09-18 06:09 PM
Me also likey. Kobolds HOOOOO! Go to Comment
The Ancient Empire of Karryk-Mos
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Cheka Man's comment on 2009-09-09 12:14 PM
Me likey. Kobolds with attitude. Go to Comment
The Ancient Empire of Karryk-Mos
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Murometz's comment on 2009-09-18 01:13 PM
Me likey too. Nostalgic, unpretentious kobold goodness! Go to Comment
The Ancient Empire of Karryk-Mos
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Country/ State)
Misanpilgrim's comment on 2009-09-08 01:05 PM
Out: annoying, pretentions, and weak kobolds.
In: more annoying, more pretentious, and surprisingly dangerous kobolds. Go to Comment
The Ancient Empire of Karryk-Mos
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Misanpilgrim's comment on 2009-09-08 01:11 PM
Another possible plot hook: Karryk-Mos has been attacked by kobolds from another tribe, who claim that their reclaimed ruin, a moderate distance away, is the real capital of the Ancient Empire and denounce the Emperor of Karryk-Mos as a "pretender". The kobold war soon endangers nearby towns, as both sides raid for resources in a frantic search for any tactical advantage. Go to Comment
Zekluft
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Mountains)
Pieh's comment on 2009-05-23 07:54 PM
I enjoyed this one. Although I'm getting a bit of a Pokemon-esque image in my mind, I can easily shove that aside to see this for the gem that it is. Good work. Go to Comment
Zekluft
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Mountains)
Cheka Man's comment on 2009-05-22 06:55 PM
I want the watchdog varity. Go to Comment
Zekluft
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Mountains)
Murometz's comment on 2014-03-04 06:01 PM
This is a fun one! Go to Comment
Zekluft
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Mountains)
Drackler's comment on 2009-05-23 06:25 PM
*Applauds*

Brilliantly good! I love the idea of giant sky snakes! The description is well done, the history is easy to read and well said, and the other breeds section is very good. On a side note, what are the "air corps" called? The Zekluftwaffe?


"The experience of riding them has been compared to sneaking up on a very large and very angry bear, jumping on from behind and trying to hang on. In a hurricane."

I can just imagine someone doing this! It's hilarious, and very good at explaining what it's like. That is, if you've ever ridden such a bear at such a time, which I, alas, have not. Go to Comment
Zekluft
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Mountains)
valadaar's comment on 2009-05-25 10:28 AM
I like this as well - having different breeds is a good touch!

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Anchor Spirits
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Water)
manfred's comment on 2009-05-19 02:58 PM
Nice one! Deserves the Spirit freetext.

(Note: parts of the sentence "though the only spirits who posses them have been through many harrowing scenarios" should be probably turned around.)

It is written, how they answer on a certain question... do they actually manifest in some way? Or do they merely control the figurehead of the ship? Both options could be fun (the spirit actually moving on the ship as an unremarkable sailor no one can rightly remember; vs. the captain always having to climb to the figurehead to get a conversation and be laughed at by sailors).

Also, how do the spirits behave towards those, that are negligent to the ship or even endangering it? Would it act directly against a sailor that wants to torch it, for example? Things can get nasty on a living ship. Go to Comment
Anchor Spirits
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Water)
manfred's comment on 2009-05-22 04:57 PM
Nice new plot hook and all! Go to Comment
Anchor Spirits
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Water)
Scrasamax's comment on 2009-05-19 10:06 AM
Nice idea, has a very familiar feel to it. I approve Go to Comment
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