What's with the freaked-out margin? Oh well. Very detailed, very, very looooong...
I don't much like the "planes" set-up in fantasy worlds, but that's no reason to take off points...
I'll give it a...
I voted a 5 to balance out and average both of us to a 4.
This post could of been a five, if you had just paid attention to presentation. Very few people except die hards like CP and myself are going to slog through an entry like this.
People really need to preview their posts before they press submit. They need to check their returns/ enters. They can use bold and italic with the simple use of html codes. This makes posts more read able and only take a piddely number of key strokes.
The wierd margin must of come from another program like notepad or an email program. If you are going to post, could you us show that you care enough about your audience to edit the format. Go to Comment
I have to agree with Moon, this entry is long, almost painfully so. There is good detail and no lacking of plot hooks or other developed ideas. The spacing is disruptive, and with the length, keeps this from being a 5.
To shorten the post, you could make sure not to repeat yourself, as you did in regards to the properties of silver, and iron unpon the fay.
OK, I have done my best to correct the erratic spacing and dubious margin, not a total success but better than it was, I will have to have a bit if a think about whsat to cut out, I will do that later, I may also stick a warning in the brief description about the length Go to Comment
Elven prison sentences even for small offenses seem very long to humans, but this is not because their rulers are draconian, but because elves live so long that a six year sentence, for example, is like a six week one in human terms.Humans in Elven countries are well advised to behave themselves
Ideas ( System ) | August 29, 2008 |