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CaptainPenguin's comment on 2004-08-11 10:57 PM
Odd...
What's with the freaked-out margin? Oh well. Very detailed, very, very looooong...
I don't much like the "planes" set-up in fantasy worlds, but that's no reason to take off points...
I'll give it a...

4/5 Go to Comment
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CaptainPenguin's comment on 2004-08-11 10:58 PM
Oops! I voted 3, but really, I meant 4. Seriously. 4/5, not 3/5. Go to Comment
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CaptainPenguin's comment on 2004-08-16 04:02 PM
Don't cut anything out, nothing needs to be removed. The reason that it was so long was the margin and spacing. Other than that, it was good. So, thumbs up. Go to Comment
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MoonHunter's comment on 2004-08-12 12:08 AM
I voted a 5 to balance out and average both of us to a 4.

This post could of been a five, if you had just paid attention to presentation. Very few people except die hards like CP and myself are going to slog through an entry like this.

People really need to preview their posts before they press submit. They need to check their returns/ enters. They can use bold and italic with the simple use of html codes. This makes posts more read able and only take a piddely number of key strokes.

The wierd margin must of come from another program like notepad or an email program. If you are going to post, could you us show that you care enough about your audience to edit the format. Go to Comment
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MoonHunter's comment on 2005-10-28 10:34 AM
Updated: Updated for format, punctuation, sentence structure, and categories. Basically rewritten. Go to Comment
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MoonHunter's comment on 2006-01-06 11:55 AM
It is a good piece. A little long and in need of some more formatting, but something that people should see, if they haven't.

It is nearly a setting piece. It has that kind of depth and usability.

Take a look at it. Think about it. Build on it. Go to Comment
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Scrasamax's comment on 2004-08-12 08:55 AM
I have to agree with Moon, this entry is long, almost painfully so. There is good detail and no lacking of plot hooks or other developed ideas. The spacing is disruptive, and with the length, keeps this from being a 5.

To shorten the post, you could make sure not to repeat yourself, as you did in regards to the properties of silver, and iron unpon the fay.

4/5 Go to Comment
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Cheka Man's comment on 2005-11-02 05:47 PM
I really like all of this.I want to make a world this complex. Go to Comment
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Grendel's comment on 2004-08-16 02:24 PM
OK, I have done my best to correct the erratic spacing and dubious margin, not a total success but better than it was, I will have to have a bit if a think about whsat to cut out, I will do that later, I may also stick a warning in the brief description about the length Go to Comment
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valadaar's comment on 2007-10-30 07:03 PM
Yes, this is very good!!!! Go to Comment
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