Well done. I've often wondered about this. Go to Comment

Great. Now I have an urge to research non-Euclidean geometry. Thanks.

Great sub. Great explanation of the whole mind-bending subject in simple ways even I can understand. Somewhat. And now I have an idea of making some castle where the courtyard is not your average Euclidean one, and you have to do a couple of laps while getting fired at before you reach the main (and barred) door... Go to Comment

A fearsome weapon to face in combat. Go to Comment

Its long, but I also liked the tale a bit more than the gun itself! Not that there is anything wrong with the gun. I also liked little tid-bits like, the "proto-matches", "punching the pig", superstitious ogres adorning the guns with fetishes and charms, and that a few of these unwieldy weapons occasionally grace the trophy rooms of kings.

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This is quite the weapon. I liked the story even more then the item.
It fits the warhammerish vibe perfectly.

Nice job!

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Well put val. A terrifying weapon!

4/5 Good stuff! Go to Comment

The idea was to give ogres a big, powerful weapon that could be introduced if/when the PCs start seeing ogres as easy or boring. Of course, ogres should never be easy or boring, I think. They're huge and really strong!

Is the story at the top too long? I worry it might detract from the post. Go to Comment

Casting a spell to see this thing is the worst thing possible. Go to Comment

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Thanks! I have many flaws, and one of them is liking cosmic horror way too much. I was actually worried that some people might be turned off my squicky descriptions of the spookiness.

But you have a good point. I'll try to submit some more generic stuff next time, so that it will be more usable to more people. Go to Comment

Lovecraftian monsters aren't really my cup of tea, but you did a splendid job on this one. It seems well-balanced, and a good GM could play it up beautifully. Your writing is chock-full of vivid sensory details that really bring this thing to life. Rarely have I seen a beastie described so well -- especially with senses other than sight. 4.0 + 0.5 for the excellent sensory descriptions. Go to Comment

5/5 What a beautiful city and it it is nice how they treat the cut down undead as the former humans that they once were. Go to Comment

I have to say I really like the concept of Zala Vacha, the forgotten gods collective. At first, I read that and thought that this singular deity is a representation of several (or many) long forgotten gods no longer worshipped. Which also might be an interesting idea.

I also like the fact that the worshipers of Mondaloa seek not to destroy the undead per se, but to also allow for the dead to truly and properly "rest in peace"..

This is well written and evokes the proper tone and atmosphere for the subject matter (cities beneath cities, and countless undead). It almost feels like a classic dungeon-crawl, except its draped with a fresh and stimulating approach.

Looking forward to more details! Go to Comment

The last vote of the day goes to: forganthus!

Exceptionally well written. A nice new take on the undead, and the god of death also.


OT: I notice my level has been reset to 1. Yet I have kept my xp and submissions. Is there a way for this to be fixed? Or will it reset itself naturally when the server next updates. Presumably it will be the latter, but I thought I should ask just to be on the safe side. Go to Comment

Hmmph! I'm at a loss, what do I say...

I like the idea of the undead being treated differently, with respect. That made a nice change.

No criticism as such, except for that part where you used "Deeper in," as a sentence starter twice in a row. That irked me for some reason. The second sentence could perhaps have been differently worded. Maybe; "Delving even further into the catacombs..." or something like it?

Just my 2¢.

All in all I really liked it.

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Holy smokes but I am having the hardest time with the editor. Pasting from Word seemed to work, though (oddly enough).

Anyway, this is Mondaloa. I hope you like it, and I hope to add to it.

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Huzzah! I like Zala Vacha, too. That write-up will look a lot like a 30 scroll.

And thank you. Cliches are cliches for a reason, but it's usually not hard to freshen them up a bit. Go to Comment

"Deeper in" irked me, too, now that I've noticed it. I have since blammed it. Thanks for the catch! Go to Comment

There are some really good ideas in here. I look forward to more. Go to Comment