Love the "voice" on this piece! I almost feel as if I'm reading a treatise by some Victorian-era Darwin type, who is either about to "off himself" or be hunted down by beings-man-was-not-meant-to-interact-with.

Intriguing, esoteric and somewhat vague, which i like. To echo Gossamer, the mystery of Eath's tiring is a fascinating one. Go to Comment

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The classic concept of the Creator and Destroyer, with a twist. I enjoyed reading this piece -- the voice drew me in, and shepherded me through to the end. A few paragraphs could use a tiny bit of trimming (especially the one ending with "but just so much larger than us are beings such as these."), but no major complaints at all. I, too, wonder why Eath is no longer doing his job as effectively. What could possibly distract, harm, or tire a being such as it? What other symptoms are showing up in the world? Go to Comment

At first I thought it a bit cheap to name them thus. But your reasoning makes a lot of sense, after all, why do we call it life? Though I'm sure there's some answer in latin, or a language derived from the same, it is still an interesting question to pose. And the idea of Death tiring, would make for a very interesting(albeit chaotic) campaign setting, no doubt.
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A very dangerous place to be. Go to Comment

To talk to a living person who knows a secret. Go to Comment

4.5/5

Welcome to the Citadel Elbin!

Quite a grand 1st piece, I still can't believe mine eyes *winks*

Really enjoyed reading this. Go to Comment

Ah! An expert lurker come into the Horde! Excellent! Go to Comment

Additional ideas:
- A wizard/scientist that tries to synchronize seeds with the plant at the center of the dungeon to make the source jump into one of them (looking for eternal life).
- An evil cult that has on its agenda to pursue and destroy the spark of life (they think they have the means). Go to Comment

Update: Typos fixed. Go to Comment

Thanks for asking the right questions that sparked the creation of some unknowable gods and who knows what else! Go to Comment

Thanks! I've actually been around a long time ago, and just glancing at the site for years until I decided to come back again. Go to Comment

I can't say I've seen anything quite like this before. Seems like the best way to attack this place is to try disintegrating/flaming the place from the outside before entering. Those creatures and plants may not entirely die, but enough of the brush would be cleared away that you could conceivably make it to the center, if you wished.

Right now, I'm trying to think of other ways to use this thing -- perhaps have the seed linked to a magical plant of some sort, for additional effects. It would be interesting to play around with the life aspect a bit more, as well (either making it impossible to procreate or, inversely, make the critters around it incredibly fertile). Go to Comment

A very nice read, it would be interesting to know what created that spark in the first place.

Useful, quite original. No obvious spelling or grammar mistakes, reads easily. Nicely done, full score.

Here a few typos I found;

Apart form total annihilation of its physical form

Or the players are send to tend the garden of a mage

plant in the heart of the dungeon, nothing can stop it from dieing when it's life cycle comes to an end

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Oh, you're quite welcome! =D Go to Comment

What the others said. This provides an excellent background for any potential game and by influencing the personal quirks of the weapon, a GM can shape the path that a PC takes. Also, as Scras commented, it is extremely well written. I foresee this becoming one of the most popular subs in the Citadel. Go to Comment

The writing is top quality, and flows quite well. It did drag on a bit long about 2/3rds of the way through, I must admit. It has a very epic feel to it, not something that is really randomly found, but the central focus in the Hero's Quest. Nicely done sir. Go to Comment

Very good, I want to add things to this thread later. Go to Comment

An excellent submission indeed! If I have not already said so, welcome to Strolens! Go to Comment

Excellent submission very well thought out. Go to Comment