I really liked this; well-written and fun to read. A very interesting idea; "feeding" off of people's malevolences. It's been done before, but you've added some excellent twists in all the right places. The plot hooks were very enticing as well. Very well done!
You know a submission is good when:
a) It brings an evil smile to your face
b) You can think of at least 10 ways to use it off the top of your head
c) It leaves you wanting more
This is a fantastic sub on all three counts, and is very well-written to boot. The only thing I would nitpick on is what Pieh already mentioned -- the floating body parts are not compelling enough to me. I would probably not give them any "natural" form. If forced to lower their assumed disguise, their appearance would shift rapidly between all of the "victims" whose thoughts they have consumed, with flashes of the Empress and Kharn- Salog reappearing most frequently throughout. 5/5
I think the plot hooks are where this creature shines, the fact that they leave people who have been consumed with hatred and evil as simpletons creates a moal dilemma. I love the little backstory about "the devil who just wasn't evil enough" but wish it was linked to some other posts so I knew more about this badass woman that tore his mind asunder.
I hate tieflings and don't use them, but i LOVE every word of this masterful post! My favorite kind of "30" compilation. Chock full of plot hooks and fascinating details, and scrumptious personalities (can personalities be scrumptious?).
The 'Gifts' are a great addition!
Awesome! I thought all thirty (actually 31, considering the twins) were very colorful and unique. What I particularly liked was that you were able to really capture these characters without having to go into exhaustive detail or backstories; making them highly usable on a moment's notice. Some of these guys'll definitely make it in my campaign.