I disagree -- the back-story is very good. It neatly explains the circles powers and motivations, as well as the (several) risks involved in looting the catacombs beneath.
One quibble -- What happened to the souls of all the youngsters sacrificed to give Circle life?
Did they all become part of the Circle's personality? (shades of Paranoia here)
Are some of them still around, seeking vengeance on Dahlia and her descendents?
Where they instrumental in the destruction of the Brethren of the Red Chalice? Go to Comment
"Even as their youthful souls were fleeing to the stars above, she gathered them and spun a greater mind of the matter, wiping all memories, but giving the potential for growth, learning and development." that is what I wrote. Break them down, merge the stuff, forge a new being. No memories, new personality. Go to Comment
I was thinking about this. What other backstory would you prefer, Capt'n? Perhaps you can write a sentient stone circle too... perhaps for your Taurzehin? Go to Comment
Ooh! Science fiction! We discussed this in the chatroom, yes?
Excellent! I love it! Well-written, well-thought-out, but I have to say, this post is L-O-N-G-lengthy!
Good job, Echo!
It's simply brilliant -- great motivation and truly scary
And a very difficult moral question as well -- is it one of the good guys (for protecting kids) or one of the bad guys (for killing people)? Go to Comment
NPCs (Major) (Mystical)
One quibble -- What happened to the souls of all the youngsters sacrificed to give Circle life?
Did they all become part of the Circle's personality? (shades of Paranoia here)
Are some of them still around, seeking vengeance on Dahlia and her descendents?
Where they instrumental in the destruction of the Brethren of the Red Chalice? Go to Comment