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Sanguine Widowmaker
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MoonHunter's comment on 2005-02-11 08:47 AM
Actually you should note it on the top of the post - first line, so they can't miss it... and if they do... and are offended... it is their own fault. Go to Comment
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Iain's comment on 2005-01-14 04:30 AM
I don't know - I quite like your original appearance. An excellent post though. 5/5. Go to Comment
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Scrasamax's comment on 2005-01-13 03:27 PM
First let me voice my one, and only criticism. I dont like the physcial description of the blade, in that it is purple steel with glowing runes that writh about, and emitting the wail of tortured infants. This is a masterful post, but the description lacks the subtly deserving of such a weapon.

When drawn, young children will find themselves wailing. Their mothers will not be able to sooth them so long as the blade is drawn within their immediate vicinity (say 100 to 200 feet). Shadows cast by fires will take on the form of macabre plays of silent violence, massacres and slaughterings seen only in shade and shadow. Fires pop and hiss more vigorously when the blade is drawn. This way, it is the enviroment reacting to the drawn blade, rather than a moaning sword with wiggling squiggles.

Now for the praise. I was enthralled by this piece. I generally despize magical weapons as so few are done well, rather being Sword of +X superpower. I love the story, and read it twice just to make sure I didnt miss anything really good in it. Well done! Kudos. Go to Comment
Sanguine Widowmaker
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EchoMirage's comment on 2005-01-13 03:33 PM
Okay, your desription is scarier, that's true ;) Go to Comment
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EchoMirage's comment on 2005-01-14 03:58 AM
I will think about the appearance and alter it a bit. Go to Comment
Sanguine Widowmaker
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EchoMirage's comment on 2005-01-17 03:31 AM
Thanks for the laurels...
As for speech, the Sanguine Widowmaker can speak out loudly yet rarely does so... most often, he will simply nudge a person he has not forged a relationship with yet into the right direction, and will speak into the mind of a friend. Go to Comment
Sanguine Widowmaker
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EchoMirage's comment on 2005-02-11 11:20 AM
Good hint, MoonHunter. Thanks. Go to Comment
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EchoMirage's comment on 2005-02-11 01:55 AM
Don't worry, I've got several younger siblings, several being justkids, and plan to have kids someday myself, and would never harm a kid, nor wish harm on a child.
Mature people can handle such topics responsibly, and certainly do not delight in them, but they may be useful for gameplay to evoke a certain emotional response - for example, if youwere amongst the players encountering the Sanguine Widowmaker, the response would be exactly as intended - to creep you out, get scared and certainly not trust that cursed piece of iron, even though it might state that its intentions are lily-white.

Perhaps there should be a box to check if a post is not suitable for audiences under a certain age, due to violence, or sexual content? Go to Comment
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Cheka Man's comment on 2005-01-13 12:59 PM
At first I thought...not another Magic Sword. But this is different, it has it's own personality. :) 5/5 Go to Comment
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Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2006-01-05 10:53 AM
Bravo. Splendid post. I must have missed this when it was posted. Go to Comment
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Ancient Gamer's comment on 2005-01-13 10:34 PM
I agree with Scrasamax concerning the appearance of the blade, other than that it is very, very good. 5/5 Go to Comment
Sanguine Widowmaker
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Krishna's comment on 2005-02-09 11:34 AM
Pete, try to send here also Ranthor. It is also useful sword...but worst...but just a little bit :) Go to Comment
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maximo's comment on 2005-01-14 04:01 PM
I love this idea. An intelligent item that will certainly not be able to be "bullied" by it's owner. It's good to see an item that is truly intelligent! 5/5

I wonder...when it speaks to it's owner, does it actually speak, or is it some sort of telepathic link? Or does the owner even hear actual words...is it just a feeling or a sense that he "knows" what to do? Go to Comment
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oakleafbard's comment on 2005-02-11 12:12 AM
Great storyline. Most people would have stopped with a really cool weapon concept but you went that extra, unexpected step.I didn't mind the appearance but anything involving "...the whine of tortured infants.." makes my fatherly skin crawl. Not a criticism, mind you just being a dad. Go to Comment
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Murometz's comment on 2006-04-01 08:58 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
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valadaar's comment on 2006-08-21 07:20 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Voonsai
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Barbarian Horde's comment on 2005-01-19 05:33 PM
I like this one alot, as well as the other bios I read from EchoMirage, but I have a question for Siren. What does your name mean? Go to Comment
Voonsai
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manfred's comment on 2004-12-06 08:29 AM
(Note: there are a few typos here and there.)

Animistic worldview? This is a good character for many settings. The idea of dispossed spirits is excellent!

Oh, and what are those metal items it can materialize?


I like it. 5/5 Go to Comment
Voonsai
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manfred's comment on 2005-10-21 07:46 AM
Voonsai
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manfred's comment on 2005-12-27 11:20 AM
Actually, this submission could be easily converted into a Codex, with all those "children". Will you, Echo? Go to Comment
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