Well, some people are that way. Anyway: thanks Horde for your feedback, I'd be glad to discuss my long-windedness in the chatroom.
I will try to improve THAT... waaaaait, coming up:
"Arron is a merc and he rox. He;s croode, cuz momma taught him nuffing bettur. Cinthra is an angel-thing but no angel as she works fer teh goddass of luv. Arron likes Cinthra cuz she makes breakfast and had got great boobs. Cinthra likes Arron cuz he saved her arse from slaver guys. Chaotic evil Slaver guys (CR 17) equipped with Leomund's Tiny Huts and Vorpal Lollipops of Tongue-Slaying (+37). Dey wander teh land and help gud people and battle evil cuz dat's wat gud people do."
Short enough? Or shall I get it shorter? "Arron is teh merc sword masta and Cinthra's got teh power of love. They rock."
I can't help myself but love this particular NPC (or is that NPC's? :P) But I find Arron a little bit as one of the stereotipycal 'save all people' type. By this I mean "Despite his intimidating appearance htough, he's got a pleasant quality around him".
It fits perfectly which is the thing that got me. Nice one Echo!
Dragoon God here, I love how you made the history so extensive, and rich with detail. the sword is terrifying to look at, yet good hearted as any noble knight, with some awsome magic skills,great job! Go to Comment
First let me voice my one, and only criticism. I dont like the physcial description of the blade, in that it is purple steel with glowing runes that writh about, and emitting the wail of tortured infants. This is a masterful post, but the description lacks the subtly deserving of such a weapon.
When drawn, young children will find themselves wailing. Their mothers will not be able to sooth them so long as the blade is drawn within their immediate vicinity (say 100 to 200 feet). Shadows cast by fires will take on the form of macabre plays of silent violence, massacres and slaughterings seen only in shade and shadow. Fires pop and hiss more vigorously when the blade is drawn. This way, it is the enviroment reacting to the drawn blade, rather than a moaning sword with wiggling squiggles.
Now for the praise. I was enthralled by this piece. I generally despize magical weapons as so few are done well, rather being Sword of +X superpower. I love the story, and read it twice just to make sure I didnt miss anything really good in it. Well done! Kudos. Go to Comment