Dragoon God here, I love how you made the history so extensive, and rich with detail. the sword is terrifying to look at, yet good hearted as any noble knight, with some awsome magic skills,great job! Go to Comment
First let me voice my one, and only criticism. I dont like the physcial description of the blade, in that it is purple steel with glowing runes that writh about, and emitting the wail of tortured infants. This is a masterful post, but the description lacks the subtly deserving of such a weapon.
When drawn, young children will find themselves wailing. Their mothers will not be able to sooth them so long as the blade is drawn within their immediate vicinity (say 100 to 200 feet). Shadows cast by fires will take on the form of macabre plays of silent violence, massacres and slaughterings seen only in shade and shadow. Fires pop and hiss more vigorously when the blade is drawn. This way, it is the enviroment reacting to the drawn blade, rather than a moaning sword with wiggling squiggles.
Now for the praise. I was enthralled by this piece. I generally despize magical weapons as so few are done well, rather being Sword of +X superpower. I love the story, and read it twice just to make sure I didnt miss anything really good in it. Well done! Kudos. Go to Comment
Thanks for the laurels...
As for speech, the Sanguine Widowmaker can speak out loudly yet rarely does so... most often, he will simply nudge a person he has not forged a relationship with yet into the right direction, and will speak into the mind of a friend. Go to Comment
Don't worry, I've got several younger siblings, several being justkids, and plan to have kids someday myself, and would never harm a kid, nor wish harm on a child.
Mature people can handle such topics responsibly, and certainly do not delight in them, but they may be useful for gameplay to evoke a certain emotional response - for example, if youwere amongst the players encountering the Sanguine Widowmaker, the response would be exactly as intended - to creep you out, get scared and certainly not trust that cursed piece of iron, even though it might state that its intentions are lily-white.
Perhaps there should be a box to check if a post is not suitable for audiences under a certain age, due to violence, or sexual content? Go to Comment
I love this idea. An intelligent item that will certainly not be able to be "bullied" by it's owner. It's good to see an item that is truly intelligent! 5/5
I wonder...when it speaks to it's owner, does it actually speak, or is it some sort of telepathic link? Or does the owner even hear actual words...is it just a feeling or a sense that he "knows" what to do? Go to Comment
Great storyline. Most people would have stopped with a really cool weapon concept but you went that extra, unexpected step.I didn't mind the appearance but anything involving "...the whine of tortured infants.." makes my fatherly skin crawl. Not a criticism, mind you just being a dad. Go to Comment