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The Temple of the First Man
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Phaidros's comment on 2011-12-11 02:08 PM
I am only on this site for at most six months, but finding posts as these make my time here more than a nice diversion. The first part is almost an epic of the old, golden days. Go to Comment
The Temple of the First Man
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Priv8eye's comment on 2006-01-24 03:11 AM
Just came across this one today.

Lovely idea. Nicely crafted. Go to Comment
The Temple of the First Man
Locations  (Establishment)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Pariah's comment on 2006-08-16 03:55 PM
Wow... You put a lot into this. It's pretty. Go to Comment
The Temple of the First Man
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Spark's comment on 2006-02-14 02:53 PM
Like everyone else, I seemed to stumble across this one at random. It's clear you put a LOT of effort into this one, and it shows. Go to Comment
The Temple of the First Man
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Murometz's comment on 2006-03-30 03:57 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Temple of the First Man
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Murometz's comment on 2009-01-15 09:29 AM
Aye, its a beaut! Go to Comment
The Temple of the First Man
Locations  (Establishment)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Nap's comment on 2006-05-13 02:55 AM
One of the most enjoyable contributions I've read thus far on this site, and certainly deserving of five stars. While I would need to adjust it to fit my homebrew mythology, I would love to find a way to include something like this in my campaign. Great job! Go to Comment
The Temple of the First Man
Locations  (Establishment)   (Forest/ Jungle)
valadaar's comment on 2007-02-03 05:41 PM
I agree with the others - Great Sub!!!! Go to Comment
The Temple of the First Man
Locations  (Establishment)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-05-01 05:56 AM


Would it be possible to toss in some line breaks between the paragraphs? Right now it is a solid wall of text and serious eye sore to read. (Will gladly read, vote and comment afterward.)

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The Temple of the First Man
Locations  (Establishment)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-07-13 12:11 PM


Apologies for the late return to vote and comment until now, but this sub got lost in the shuffle.



I;m not sure I have much unique to add beyond I really enjoy this tale and the plot hooks at the end are a nice bonus and some truly unique. (Especially the child support one)



5/5 and a HOH


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The Temple of the First Man
Locations  (Establishment)   (Forest/ Jungle)
nightmareshadow's comment on 2009-01-15 03:25 AM
Very nice, wonderful story. I don't know about some of the plots but this is a post to aspire to for a young strolenite like myself. Go to Comment
The Temple of the First Man
Locations  (Establishment)   (Forest/ Jungle)
RGTraynor's comment on 2011-04-12 08:36 AM


Not bad, if a lot for what boils down to a "safe place of refuge."  A tick off for formatting and the occasional typo.


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The Temple of the First Man
Locations  (Establishment)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Forganthus's comment on 2012-06-11 05:05 PM
This is pretty great. You did a great job with description and storytelling. The idea of a place where gods go to be humble is very novel. Could use a little formatting. I like Azar's tree, too. Go to Comment
The Temple of the First Man
Locations  (Establishment)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Dossta's comment on 2011-12-08 05:38 PM


This is one of the first posts I remember reading here before officially joining the Citadel.  Then, as now, it brought a smile to my face.  When spinning tales and crafting the lore of worlds unforged, I often have a tendency to wax grandiose -- Behold! Spires of shimmering glass, trees of silver glittering in the moonlight!  All very pretty, to be sure, but oftentimes completely unecessary.  In its humble simplicity, this place touches the heart.  It's a lesson that I'll strive to remember whenever one of my ideas needs better grounding.


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The Temple of the First Man
Locations  (Establishment)   (Forest/ Jungle)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-07-18 09:37 AM


This has a wonderful old-world mythology feel to it. Makes me think of the Citadel; a haven from the cares of the outside world where we can all meet, tell stories, and have discussions.



This is also one of those subs that hints at a wider, fully fleshed world, and inspires ideas beyond the location.



(The part about stealing the scythe while the god was eating his cookies cracked me up :)



A well deserved 5/5 and an HoH.


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Arron and Cinthra
NPCs  (Minor)   (Travelers)
Barbarian Horde's comment on 2005-04-10 06:55 AM
The tale is very good, a bit long at times, but very good. If this was a scale from 0 to 10 you would have gotten a 9. But on this scale I shall award you a 5 (4.5)

The only things that lowered the score was that it got somewhat boring at times, but recovered very quickly. There were also a couple of grammar issues, but no biggie. Go to Comment
Arron and Cinthra
NPCs  (Minor)   (Travelers)
Barbarian Horde's comment on 2005-04-14 10:11 AM
Didnt read it but i think its good. Hope to c u soon Echo :) Go to Comment
Arron and Cinthra
NPCs  (Minor)   (Travelers)
Barbarian Horde's comment on 2005-05-23 07:29 AM
Don't you understand sarcasm? EchoMirage - Just- arg. It's disgusting how cruel and sad you are. Go to Comment
Arron and Cinthra
NPCs  (Minor)   (Travelers)
Barbarian Horde's comment on 2005-05-24 02:25 AM
If I have something to say, I can say it here. What, you scared of my feedback because your story is unbelievably Long/Boring?stupid?
Do me a favour and get a LIFE Go to Comment
Arron and Cinthra
NPCs  (Minor)   (Travelers)
Barbarian Horde's comment on 2005-05-24 05:06 AM
I think this conflict needs to end here.
Dear barbarian horde, these comments are unprofessional and uninteresting. If you truly think this post is of inferior quality, you should point out WHAT you do not like. You should say WHY the overall score is low. Boring, long and stupid IS a comment, but it rather seems like you do not like roleplaying at all...

If this is some sort of blood feud going on, take it somewhere else. Go to Comment
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