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Jardan , the Oak Sage
NPCs  (Minor)   (Natural)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-11-09 07:51 PM
This is fun story, reminds me of Moses, the Green lantern, the Blackhood, the Phantom, and others. What I really like about this is how the story justifies the pay off. If you were to write up the fairy mafia with Trent enforcers, people would not buy it, but you story of Jardan takes us there and makes us believe it accept it and see at as a natural extension of the story.

I agree could use some polish, but the goal, execution and style are fantastic. Go to Comment
Jardan , the Oak Sage
NPCs  (Minor)   (Natural)
valadaar's comment on 2012-05-12 07:01 PM

Wow, unvoted is bringing up gems.  I love this one! Top marks!


 


 

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Kira Savarin
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
MoonHunter's comment on 2005-05-25 09:47 AM
Other than being hugely long, I am very impressed. An NPC with more depth, development, and impact on the world, than most PCs.

Of course that is what might make her difficult to use in a game, as she "shows up" the PCs in many ways. Go to Comment
Kira Savarin
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Alec_Shadowkin's comment on 2005-05-26 08:26 AM
Absolutely magnificent. You have done a wonderful job, Echo. I wonder if I can fit her into my world anywhere :) Go to Comment
Kira Savarin
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Maggot's comment on 2005-05-25 10:58 AM
Regarding her dad,I'm getting a Rachat vibe here. The simmilarity is pretty strong,since both are bastard half demon spawn that loath their respective sires. 4/5. Go to Comment
Kira Savarin
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Maggot's comment on 2005-05-25 10:48 PM
Speaking of linking,how does one do it? I have yet to figure it out. Go to Comment
Kira Savarin
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Maggot's comment on 2005-05-26 01:35 AM
Oh,and I have to say I like the idea that Kira and Rachat may be siblings. Makes a possible show down all that more exciting. Go to Comment
Kira Savarin
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Maggot's comment on 2005-05-26 07:23 AM
Thanks for the tip,Echo. Go to Comment
Kira Savarin
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EchoMirage's comment on 2005-05-25 06:30 AM
Done. Done? I don't know. Any ideas? :D Go to Comment
Kira Savarin
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2005-05-25 05:06 PM
I said I was unsure whether to post her - I had her made up long before Rachat, and was quite dismayed when he appeared - a day or two before I wanted to post her originally.

She does not loathe her father - she's pissed at him because he's responsible for her existence, and has not showed up for twenty years, in some of which she's been through hell.

Actually: they may share a father, she and Rachat. They may meet at some point - as allies or enemies.

I linked her to Rachat. "See, he's not a hellspawn, he's just... an old man who's.. eh, immortal, and has these burning eyes and yes, weird teeth and stuff. Yup, he's totally O.K." Go to Comment
Kira Savarin
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2005-05-26 01:53 AM
Though, their fathers seem a bit different... may be the same fiend still. Or they may be COUSINS.

As for linking, write something like "itm=23" into the linking section at the bottom of the post. Go to Comment
Kira Savarin
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2017-11-05 03:18 AM
Thanks for reminding me of her, I can use her in a current game of mine :) Go to Comment
Kira Savarin
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EchoMirage's comment on 2017-11-05 03:24 AM
Update: Corrected a few typos Go to Comment
Kira Savarin
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Cheka Man's comment on 2005-05-25 10:57 AM
5/5 Very good. Go to Comment
Kira Savarin
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Ancient Gamer's comment on 2005-12-01 09:24 AM
Welcome to the site, player of EchoMirage's group. We appreciate your GM here. You are very lucky you know ;) Go to Comment
Kira Savarin
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
forgotten adventurer's comment on 2005-12-01 09:20 AM
Really good, as most of your NPC in games are. Go to Comment
Kira Savarin
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
valadaar's comment on 2017-11-03 10:15 AM
Very good! I like her* a lot. She would fit in with the folks in the Blue Exorcist as well.

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The Pilgrim's Torch
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Heroic)
Barbarian Horde's comment on 2005-05-11 10:02 AM
Wow.


(Ashamed 5/5 voter.) Go to Comment
The Pilgrim's Torch
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Heroic)
manfred's comment on 2007-01-16 06:02 PM
So, um, do we ever see a little polished version of this jewel? Go to Comment
The Pilgrim's Torch
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Heroic)
Agar's comment on 2005-05-11 09:54 AM
5/5

For the others of you who are voting 5's and not commenting, shame on you. If it's that good, you should leave a comment, even just "Wow".

Wow.

Seriously though, this is a great item with a great story. It's almost too much story. Almost. I almost voted 4 because the sword is more like a plot device than a weapon, just something to move the story along than an item with it's own worth, but it's a really good story.

Good work! Go to Comment
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