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The Keeper of Dark Dreaming
NPCs  (Campaign)   (Mystical)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-01-03 09:01 AM


There are so many aspects of this sub that I like. Being a big fan of mythology, I love the description on how the Reverie came to be. I like the idea of the Reverie being a shared reality and it gets my mind thinking of all the ways that it would influence Elven society. The progression of Vlari-Shion's story is riveting. The language is wonderfully evocative. Truly a different take on monsters and it would have worked well for the quest.



I have racked my brain to come up with something that could use improvement, but I got nothin'.


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The Daughters of Alesta
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (City/ Ruin)
Siren no Orakio's comment on 2010-11-27 08:06 PM


A powerful lot of hooks available indeed, and well done. 


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The Daughters of Alesta
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (City/ Ruin)
valadaar's comment on 2011-01-25 03:14 PM


Wow, nicely done EM.  They are excellent foes and powerpieces for a campaign.


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The Daughters of Alesta
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (City/ Ruin)
Kassy's comment on 2014-07-24 11:31 AM
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The Daughters of Alesta
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (City/ Ruin)
Ramhir's comment on 2010-11-27 10:07 AM


Excellent sub! It was a little confusing in places - I didn't realize at first that the sub was written from an opposing viewpoint, for instance - but it is full of ideas that could be taken and used even if the whole sub was not used in the campaign. I like it!


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The Daughters of Alesta
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (City/ Ruin)
gulkien's comment on 2011-03-20 12:18 AM
The Daughters of Alesta
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (City/ Ruin)
gulkien's comment on 2011-03-20 12:19 AM
sorry I couldn't write much any way nice a lot of ways to use good back story and nice info tidbits Go to Comment
The Saintmakers
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (City/ Ruin)
Strolen's comment on 2011-02-20 09:04 AM


Congrats on First Place in the Monstrous Monsters Quest!!


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The Saintmakers
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (City/ Ruin)
Pieh's comment on 2010-11-22 02:02 AM


Very cool. I liked a lot of the descriptions of the victims and original demon. However, the form of floating body parts was fitting, just not satisfying. I feel like this could benefit from more detail. I want more of this. It's very good, but leaves me begging for more.


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The Saintmakers
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (City/ Ruin)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-24 02:49 PM
Updated to accommodate some suggestions, corrected a few mistakes. Added appearance of papa demon, and details of his demise and the Saintmakers' birth.

As for their appearance, I think it's more naturalistic; shapechangers that revert to a half-molten mass that browses through shapes when they are exposed have been done before. But when the king changes into a bloody piece od demon-belly with torn edges, dripping goo and flailing at you with guts, tentacles, half a pancreas and things which you'd have to look up in a issue of Abyss-pr0n just to fathom what their use might be, well, that is kinda more scary in my book. Go to Comment
The Saintmakers
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (City/ Ruin)
Phaidros's comment on 2011-09-15 04:06 PM
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The Saintmakers
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (City/ Ruin)
valadaar's comment on 2014-01-15 11:15 AM
This is a demon. Nasty, somewhat obscene.

Really, really well done.
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The Saintmakers
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (City/ Ruin)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-01-16 12:09 PM


A unique and surprisingly subtle demon that is likely to catch most groups by surprise, and ill prepared. One of these nasties in disguise as a rich merchant with a few indentured servants, (that loathe the merchant) being escorted by the party can lead to all sorts of misadventures. (When discovered it can also lead to some false accusations and a fun role playing scene.)



4.5 over all and +.5 for their unusual origins and the methods these demons sow the seeds of chaos. 



A small suggestion to improve the visual appeal would be to perhaps put the individual plot hook titles in bold so they each stand out a bit more?

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The Saintmakers
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (City/ Ruin)
Kassy's comment on 2014-05-05 04:27 PM
4.5/5

What Dossta said, and well done! Go to Comment
The Saintmakers
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (City/ Ruin)
slartibartfast's comment on 2010-11-21 09:03 PM


I really liked this; well-written and fun to read.  A very interesting idea; "feeding" off of people's malevolences.  It's been done before, but you've added some excellent twists in all the right places.  The plot hooks were very enticing as well.  Very well done!


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The Saintmakers
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (City/ Ruin)
Dossta's comment on 2010-11-22 12:37 PM


You know a submission is good when:



a)  It brings an evil smile to your face



b)  You can think of at least 10 ways to use it off the top of your head



c)  It leaves you wanting more



This is a fantastic sub on all three counts, and is very well-written to boot.  The only thing I would nitpick on is what Pieh already mentioned -- the floating body parts are not compelling enough to me.  I would probably not give them any "natural" form.  If forced to lower their assumed disguise, their appearance would shift rapidly between all of the "victims" whose thoughts they have consumed, with flashes of the Empress and Kharn- Salog reappearing most frequently throughout.  5/5


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The Saintmakers
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (City/ Ruin)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2011-07-27 03:01 AM


I think the plot hooks are where this creature shines, the fact that they leave people who have been consumed with hatred and evil as simpletons creates a moal dilemma. I love the little backstory about "the devil who just wasn't evil enough" but wish it was linked to some other posts so I knew more about this badass woman that tore his mind asunder. 


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30 Tieflings and the Gifts they bestow
NPCs  (Extras)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Scrasamax's comment on 2010-10-26 07:30 AM


Good job, i enjoyed this thoroughly. I like the gifts they can bestow, and that some are beneficial, some are merely artistic and some are perfectly demoniv.


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30 Tieflings and the Gifts they bestow
NPCs  (Extras)   (Criminal/Espionage)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-10-25 02:11 AM
We'll be like the 30-Brigade, Cheka, piling up useful 30-whatevers in the Citadel. Get working on those 30 elvish gifts! Go to Comment
30 Tieflings and the Gifts they bestow
NPCs  (Extras)   (Criminal/Espionage)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-10-27 01:04 PM
As long as the personality is pleasing to your senses, it can be all kinds of scrumptious. Go to Comment
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