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The Tree of Bone
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EchoMirage's comment on 2011-03-15 01:53 AM
Yeah, the "ewww" was sort of intended. A success, then! Go to Comment
The Tree of Bone
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EchoMirage's comment on 2011-04-12 03:12 AM
I do not think the Emperor is evil, actually. He is alien - and knows little of human morals, perchance can't even understand them.
Whether his love for his wives/people was honest, I leave up to the reader, but in my opinion it was.

As for the "power level" it is an undead god. Undead Old One. Starspawn. Clad in corpses. He has collected them for at least a thousand years. It's going to be huge. It's not something to be brought down through swinging a sword at it, but through role-play and smarts.

His location was described to be in the middle of a barely inhabitable mountain chain, as unclaimed. Sure, it will be inside the territory of one of the mentioned realms, Aberlia or New Ebernesse - at least on maps. But a fantasy kingdom has usually better things to conquer that an inhospitable mountaintop where you need a dwarven apparatus to breathe.

As for the minions and powers, I'll add a paragraph. Go to Comment
The Tree of Bone
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EchoMirage's comment on 2011-04-18 02:14 PM


The minions of the Tree



Who keeps the dead god-emperor company besides his deceased children? It is the men of Valersund, forever bent by his sorcery, their flesh sustained by his will and their minds sundered by his presence.



They are hulking creatures, with exaggerated muscles bordering on the grotesque, and elongated arms ending often in rending claws. Some possess more than two, with extra appendages of murderous intent growing from their hunched backs, now useless mouths or as tails.



Though hideously deformed, they still are less horrid than their larger brethren, who consist of several fused bodies, walking on six legs and wielding weapons in all directions, or the jumbled amalgams of man and beast.



Each will also have a female face growing somewhere, disturbingly beautiful amidst his misshapen features; it is the face of the female who once commanded him, and forever it whispers to him the will of the god-emperor. The link, though, can be severed with magic or a weapon capable of harming ghosts, leading to confusion on the beast's part.



They are clad in remnants of armor, often of excellent make, and wrapped in shreds of dead flesh, skin and bone of those who sought to desecrate the Emperor's resting place. All over their skin, a strange slimy membrane is spread, exuded by the dead deity, to allow them to exist in the cold and thin air of the mountain summit, keeping them forever just beyond the grasp of death.



For weapons, the Servant Sons use their monstrous bodies, or man-made weapons, some of them even objects of power.



Most are hopelessly insane, driven but by the dead god-thing's will, though a select few embraced their monarch's influence and gave themselves to it, keeping reasoning and cunning largely intact, and their madness subtle.


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The Tree of Bone
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Cheka Man's comment on 2011-03-14 05:25 PM


Interesting, but a bit ewww.


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The Tree of Bone
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Cheka Man's comment on 2011-03-15 04:41 PM


With an HOH waiting for it.


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The Tree of Bone
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Mourngrymn's comment on 2011-03-24 09:51 AM
The Tree of Bone
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valadaar's comment on 2011-03-18 06:08 PM


An excellent addition to the quest - nicely done EM!


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Aramax's comment on 2014-10-13 11:39 AM
Very nice, a tad on the wordy side for me,but just a tad.I'm a sucker for anything vagoely Lovcraftian. For me right between a 5 and an HOH, so solid 5/5 Go to Comment
The Tree of Bone
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sverigesson's comment on 2011-03-15 08:27 PM
This is one of the best submissions in quite a while, I think. Great blend of epic and creepy. Go to Comment
The Tree of Bone
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RGTraynor's comment on 2011-04-02 04:47 AM


It's absolutely evocative prose, and were I to read it in a fiction work, it'd fit magnificently.  It's just a bit much for the exigencies of a tabletop gaming campaign, where the amount of storytelling and flavor text with which you can batter the players is limited.  There's a lot a GM has to invent here: what are the powers of the Tree?  Is it a deity in of itself, a servitor/avatar of one, or simply an uber-Undead?  Is there a nation near to hand or claiming this territory?  What are these minions the Emperor has?  Who are the cultists that serve/oppose him? I'd be happy to see more of these particulars fleshed out. 



The flavor text doesn't say, and I'd wager the average player would raise eyebrows at several pages worth of it that boiled down to "Evil last emperor of destroyed empire / nasty undead tree / and here's the location."

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The Tree of Bone
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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-03-15 08:30 PM


"ewww", yes.



I am in awe of the quality of the prose. A whole lot more showing than telling, for sure.

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The Tree of Bone
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caesar193's comment on 2012-12-14 09:42 PM
I love this thing. An undead tree made of thousands of corpses because of a fallen emperor's love? You sir get a HoH. And the caesar193 seal of approval. Go to Comment
The Keeper of Dark Dreaming
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Strolen's comment on 2011-02-27 05:00 AM
Update: Update Freetext Go to Comment
The Keeper of Dark Dreaming
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EchoMirage's comment on 2011-01-01 03:18 PM


Hm, intended this for the last quest, but did not post it in time.

 


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The Keeper of Dark Dreaming
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valadaar's comment on 2013-04-24 12:55 PM
Wow, EM, this is really damn good. The visuals of the hair and stuff extending as vast extraplanar tendrils is just awesome. Go to Comment
The Keeper of Dark Dreaming
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Silveressa's comment on 2011-01-13 11:09 AM


Wow in depth, with enough info to base an entire campaign around. It's nice to see an unusual enemy that has a fresh approach to achieving their goals, and really make players struggle to get a grasp on their capability and motivations.



A couple quick ideas to improve the appearance/presentation:



Putting the headers such as appearance, confrontation etc.. in bold would help a bit  to highlight the different sections of the article and make it easier to find a particular area when skimming during a game session.



Also, putting a line break in between each plot hook and bolding their titles would make the last text area a bit easier to read/navigate. (as it is it's a bit of a wall of text towards the end)

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The Keeper of Dark Dreaming
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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-01-03 09:01 AM


There are so many aspects of this sub that I like. Being a big fan of mythology, I love the description on how the Reverie came to be. I like the idea of the Reverie being a shared reality and it gets my mind thinking of all the ways that it would influence Elven society. The progression of Vlari-Shion's story is riveting. The language is wonderfully evocative. Truly a different take on monsters and it would have worked well for the quest.



I have racked my brain to come up with something that could use improvement, but I got nothin'.


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The Daughters of Alesta
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Siren no Orakio's comment on 2010-11-27 08:06 PM


A powerful lot of hooks available indeed, and well done. 


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The Daughters of Alesta
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valadaar's comment on 2011-01-25 03:14 PM


Wow, nicely done EM.  They are excellent foes and powerpieces for a campaign.


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The Daughters of Alesta
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Kassy's comment on 2014-07-24 11:31 AM
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