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The Tree of Bone
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valadaar's comment on 2011-03-18 06:08 PM


An excellent addition to the quest - nicely done EM!


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The Tree of Bone
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sverigesson's comment on 2011-03-15 08:27 PM
This is one of the best submissions in quite a while, I think. Great blend of epic and creepy. Go to Comment
The Tree of Bone
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RGTraynor's comment on 2011-04-02 04:47 AM


It's absolutely evocative prose, and were I to read it in a fiction work, it'd fit magnificently.  It's just a bit much for the exigencies of a tabletop gaming campaign, where the amount of storytelling and flavor text with which you can batter the players is limited.  There's a lot a GM has to invent here: what are the powers of the Tree?  Is it a deity in of itself, a servitor/avatar of one, or simply an uber-Undead?  Is there a nation near to hand or claiming this territory?  What are these minions the Emperor has?  Who are the cultists that serve/oppose him? I'd be happy to see more of these particulars fleshed out. 



The flavor text doesn't say, and I'd wager the average player would raise eyebrows at several pages worth of it that boiled down to "Evil last emperor of destroyed empire / nasty undead tree / and here's the location."

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The Tree of Bone
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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-03-15 08:30 PM


"ewww", yes.



I am in awe of the quality of the prose. A whole lot more showing than telling, for sure.

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The Tree of Bone
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caesar193's comment on 2012-12-14 09:42 PM
I love this thing. An undead tree made of thousands of corpses because of a fallen emperor's love? You sir get a HoH. And the caesar193 seal of approval. Go to Comment
The Keeper of Dark Dreaming
NPCs  (Campaign)   (Mystical)
Strolen's comment on 2011-02-27 05:00 AM
Update: Update Freetext Go to Comment
The Keeper of Dark Dreaming
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EchoMirage's comment on 2011-01-01 03:18 PM


Hm, intended this for the last quest, but did not post it in time.

 


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The Keeper of Dark Dreaming
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valadaar's comment on 2013-04-24 12:55 PM
Wow, EM, this is really damn good. The visuals of the hair and stuff extending as vast extraplanar tendrils is just awesome. Go to Comment
The Keeper of Dark Dreaming
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Silveressa's comment on 2011-01-13 11:09 AM


Wow in depth, with enough info to base an entire campaign around. It's nice to see an unusual enemy that has a fresh approach to achieving their goals, and really make players struggle to get a grasp on their capability and motivations.



A couple quick ideas to improve the appearance/presentation:



Putting the headers such as appearance, confrontation etc.. in bold would help a bit  to highlight the different sections of the article and make it easier to find a particular area when skimming during a game session.



Also, putting a line break in between each plot hook and bolding their titles would make the last text area a bit easier to read/navigate. (as it is it's a bit of a wall of text towards the end)

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The Keeper of Dark Dreaming
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MysticMoon's comment on 2011-01-03 09:01 AM


There are so many aspects of this sub that I like. Being a big fan of mythology, I love the description on how the Reverie came to be. I like the idea of the Reverie being a shared reality and it gets my mind thinking of all the ways that it would influence Elven society. The progression of Vlari-Shion's story is riveting. The language is wonderfully evocative. Truly a different take on monsters and it would have worked well for the quest.



I have racked my brain to come up with something that could use improvement, but I got nothin'.


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The Daughters of Alesta
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Siren no Orakio's comment on 2010-11-27 08:06 PM


A powerful lot of hooks available indeed, and well done. 


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The Daughters of Alesta
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valadaar's comment on 2011-01-25 03:14 PM


Wow, nicely done EM.  They are excellent foes and powerpieces for a campaign.


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The Daughters of Alesta
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Kassy's comment on 2014-07-24 11:31 AM
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The Daughters of Alesta
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Ramhir's comment on 2010-11-27 10:07 AM


Excellent sub! It was a little confusing in places - I didn't realize at first that the sub was written from an opposing viewpoint, for instance - but it is full of ideas that could be taken and used even if the whole sub was not used in the campaign. I like it!


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The Daughters of Alesta
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gulkien's comment on 2011-03-20 12:18 AM
The Daughters of Alesta
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gulkien's comment on 2011-03-20 12:19 AM
sorry I couldn't write much any way nice a lot of ways to use good back story and nice info tidbits Go to Comment
The Saintmakers
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (City/ Ruin)
Strolen's comment on 2011-02-20 09:04 AM


Congrats on First Place in the Monstrous Monsters Quest!!


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The Saintmakers
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Pieh's comment on 2010-11-22 02:02 AM


Very cool. I liked a lot of the descriptions of the victims and original demon. However, the form of floating body parts was fitting, just not satisfying. I feel like this could benefit from more detail. I want more of this. It's very good, but leaves me begging for more.


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The Saintmakers
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EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-24 02:49 PM
Updated to accommodate some suggestions, corrected a few mistakes. Added appearance of papa demon, and details of his demise and the Saintmakers' birth.

As for their appearance, I think it's more naturalistic; shapechangers that revert to a half-molten mass that browses through shapes when they are exposed have been done before. But when the king changes into a bloody piece od demon-belly with torn edges, dripping goo and flailing at you with guts, tentacles, half a pancreas and things which you'd have to look up in a issue of Abyss-pr0n just to fathom what their use might be, well, that is kinda more scary in my book. Go to Comment
The Saintmakers
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Phaidros's comment on 2011-09-15 04:06 PM
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