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The Unbound Realms of Kevvar
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Ria Hawk's comment on 2007-06-04 02:44 AM
Pretty neat, I like the descriptions of the different civilizations and the relationships between them. I think I like the Mandaans more than the Samman, although I'm not sure why. This would be a nifty planet to drop a malfunctioning ship on, particularly because it would prove... interesting if the Samman found it and claimed it for their Exalted. Go to Comment
The Unbound Realms of Kevvar
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MoonHunter's comment on 2007-05-25 03:55 PM
An interesting piece with nice elements. It could use with some improved formatting, but few things are perfect. Go to Comment
The Unbound Realms of Kevvar
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EchoMirage's comment on 2007-05-26 02:00 AM
You're free to teach me - for example by copy-pasting it, formatting, and PMing it to me :D Go to Comment
The Unbound Realms of Kevvar
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EchoMirage's comment on 2007-06-09 07:20 AM
Likely, PCs will encounter the Samman more frequently... but, I will expand the post. Go to Comment
The Unbound Realms of Kevvar
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EchoMirage's comment on 2007-06-09 07:30 AM
Updated: added a bit to the Mandaan Go to Comment
The Unbound Realms of Kevvar
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Cheka Man's comment on 2007-05-25 12:23 PM
I like it, you worked well on it. Go to Comment
The Unbound Realms of Kevvar
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valadaar's comment on 2007-06-05 01:08 PM
They are interesting races indeed, though as Moonhunter mentioned, formatting would help.

As to specifics, look at how other 'race' subs for suggestions on how to break up the sub.

At the very least, I would seperate the 3 races into sections and try to make sure that the same areas are covered in each. For example, there is more detail on Samman then Mandaan. Go to Comment
The Unbound Realms of Kevvar
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Wulfhere's comment on 2007-06-07 05:13 PM
A very interesting planet! While it is well-written, headings for each section and spaces between paragraphs would be welcomed. Go to Comment
The Bloodflower Shroud
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manfred's comment on 2007-04-03 03:47 PM
An interesting set of items, with a good backstory and final power. Strangely enough, I like the way the tyrant's evil was removed in the end, a nice bit about the power of the woods. Go to Comment
The Bloodflower Shroud
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EchoMirage's comment on 2007-04-01 01:47 PM
Hm. No comment? Go to Comment
The Bloodflower Shroud
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EchoMirage's comment on 2007-04-03 04:12 AM
Updated: Edited: spelling, form, choice of words, in cooperation with Wulfhere Go to Comment
The Bloodflower Shroud
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Cheka Man's comment on 2007-03-31 09:14 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Bloodflower Shroud
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Cheka Man's comment on 2007-04-01 06:28 PM
Not armour to be worn by the weak. Go to Comment
The Bloodflower Shroud
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Cheka Man's comment on 2007-04-03 09:57 PM
You have earned a revote. Go to Comment
The Bloodflower Shroud
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Incarnadine's comment on 2007-04-03 03:23 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Bloodflower Shroud
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Murometz's comment on 2007-04-06 09:19 AM
quite evocative, right from the opening line...pretty imagery, wicked armor, and well told tale. Nice work Echo! Go to Comment
The Bloodflower Shroud
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valadaar's comment on 2007-04-03 12:56 PM
A grusome tale indeed. Well done! Go to Comment
The Bloodflower Shroud
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Wulfhere's comment on 2007-04-03 11:24 AM
A set of items, both beautiful and chilling, along with a myth of their origins as ominous and compelling as the items themselves. Crudely shaped by a tortured madman, they have been transformed, their horror cloaked within fair forms. This is how magic should be made!

Few adventurers who suspected the items' true origins would dare to touch them, yet they are not wholly items of evil. One of evil heart who sought to use them might find them eager to bring his eventual fall, while one who chose to wield their power for justice, remembering the sacrifice of the Chained Flowers, might find them to be just as potent.

The dark force that kept these items and transformed them into tools for the champions of darkness is the true mystery here. Can its power be overcome? Can the sinister fate of the Bloodflower Shroud be changed?

Only time will tell. Go to Comment
The Bloodflower Shroud
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punkcasher's comment on 2009-03-17 12:34 AM
Nice. Very full, and robust.

:) Go to Comment
Morgobondor, the Scourge of Silvermoon
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manfred's comment on 2007-03-26 01:40 PM
Entertaining read. Good work! Go to Comment
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