A set of items, both beautiful and chilling, along with a myth of their origins as ominous and compelling as the items themselves. Crudely shaped by a tortured madman, they have been transformed, their horror cloaked within fair forms. This is how magic should be made!
Few adventurers who suspected the items' true origins would dare to touch them, yet they are not wholly items of evil. One of evil heart who sought to use them might find them eager to bring his eventual fall, while one who chose to wield their power for justice, remembering the sacrifice of the Chained Flowers, might find them to be just as potent.
The dark force that kept these items and transformed them into tools for the champions of darkness is the true mystery here. Can its power be overcome? Can the sinister fate of the Bloodflower Shroud be changed?
(Ummm, could it be that it was relased by mistake? I refer to the two abandoned titles at the end. The plot has the basics for us to fall upon and comment, just want to make sure that you really want it public. ;) ) Go to Comment
It definately has a lot going for it, very interesting concepts on race and religion. It just seems to be lacking something, though...
It's like you've got a skeleton and musculature, but there needs to be a little skin. The sub itself is a little hard to follow with the formatting. I feel like there should be a few more details about these factions as well.
Overall, a 4.0 You've definately got something, it just needs a bit more to make it great. Go to Comment
Spellcheck man! some of the words are run together and you might want to go over and compress the text a bit into more readable blocks. The idea is pretty cool, so I will wait for a brush up before I vote on this one. Go to Comment