I like the concept of the elven mage who failed to understand her limitations and was transformed into a vortex of destruction, but I was less enthralled by her personality: I imagine that she might find a conscience, even as the pain reduces her to a level of basic survival.
I suspect that most player characters finding her would try to destroy her as soon as they understood what she really was. She might be a hard one to kill, though, as a sort of "magic elemental". Go to Comment
Pretty neat, I like the descriptions of the different civilizations and the relationships between them. I think I like the Mandaans more than the Samman, although I'm not sure why. This would be a nifty planet to drop a malfunctioning ship on, particularly because it would prove... interesting if the Samman found it and claimed it for their Exalted. Go to Comment